Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This one-hundred-word story, Revelations, uses the required word count and intimates all we need to know to get to the violent reaction from our narrator. It might also suggest that her temper may be a factor in there somewhere.

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2019

Thank you so much, Bill. Oh, most definitely so. I actually had great fun writing this and I've loved all the different reaction to my little story. All best. Ulla:))

Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

Oh no!! another corpse. Action packed and descriptive, good job in few words.
How's this for an alternative scenario to the predictable one of revenge: you've killed the baby's daddy and now the nanny he so thoughtfully was bringing home to help with the child won't get the job because you will be in jail for murder!

 Comment Written 08-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019

Hahahaha, you do make me laugh,LisaMay. What a tough mistake to make eeh? I love all the interpretations of my little flash. All best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

Oh dear. I guess that will teach him to bring home another woman. =} I didn't see any errors and have no suggestions for improvement. I'm not very helpful am I. Well done. I do hope you do well in the contest. Rox

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019

Hehehe, Thanks a lot, Roxanna. I would have thought so. It cost him his life. A great review. All best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

This is such a tragic story. What a life that was wasted in this story. I feel sorry for the man who has been murdered in this piece. I think you wrote it well. I enjoyed your story! Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2019

Thank you somuch, Raul. It's open to a lot of interpretations. All the best. Ulla:)))

reply by Raul1 on 09-Apr-2019

You're welcome.

Comment from babykoala

Excellent

Brilliant use of the limited words count to create the most tension and emotion and twist. Expertly executed and I really enjoyed reading this short story.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019

Thank you so very much. I'm delighted that you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I guess one can never put oneself in the position of emotion that one feels when shock sets in. And excellent entry in this 100 word contest Ulla, a great ending, and a super entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019

Thank you so much, Roy. I'm so glad you liked it. All best. Ulla:))

reply by royowen on 07-Apr-2019

Most welcome

Comment from LaFrance

Exceptional

Ulla, this is an intriguing flash story, It is very puzzling of what happens to the main character, that she would kill the person she longed to see. Very good.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019

Wow, thank you so very much. It's anybody's guess what happens between her seeing the shapely legs emerge until the knife in her hand. Thanks so much againfor the lovely recognition. All best. Ulla:))

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Well, not much to say about this write. The knife said it all. Revenge at it's best I suppose. Good one. So short it makes a person's head spin trying to figure out what happened. LOL.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019

Thank you so much, Ben. That was the whole idea. It's up to the reader to fill in the gap. I only had a hundred words. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

Wow, this was an intense read, Ulla. I love the way you catch the reader's attention right at the beginning. And the end of the story was so great. I'd love to hear the whole story. Nice job.

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019

Thank you so much, chas. As you know I only had a hundred words to play with, so I had to leave the imagination to the reader. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

And who wouldn't want to? Imagine, leaving her pregnant, then coming back with a new woman! He had a lot of nerve bringing her with him as a 'surprise' for the woman who waited for him. Talk about inconsiderate! Good job! :)

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2019

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2019

Thanks a lot, Phyllis. Exactly! How dared he! Highly inconsiderate, indeed. Great review. Thanks so much again. Ulla:)))