Don't Blink
Don't Turn Your Back...92 total reviews
Comment from kiwisteveh
I like this with the oxymoronic contrast of rip/threaten bringing joy.
It is a great way of expressing the power and passion of love.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
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I like this with the oxymoronic contrast of rip/threaten bringing joy.
It is a great way of expressing the power and passion of love.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 15-Mar-2019
Comment from Pink Petals
Sometimes, but not always. Love can have sharp edges as well, not always bringing us joy. In the beginning perhaps, but it does rip our hearts open one way or another!
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Sometimes, but not always. Love can have sharp edges as well, not always bringing us joy. In the beginning perhaps, but it does rip our hearts open one way or another!
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2019
Comment from called2rite
A one line poem that tells the story of what happens when you fall in love un-expected and not wanting to. The word "open" leaves room for a variety of emotions to land there and one being love. comment made on 3-14-19 by called2rite.
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A one line poem that tells the story of what happens when you fall in love un-expected and not wanting to. The word "open" leaves room for a variety of emotions to land there and one being love. comment made on 3-14-19 by called2rite.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from WildWithWords
I hate these 1 line poems with a passion - but then again we have to pay the bills right?
Having said that, I think you've actually done a great job of maximizing the message content here and used no small amount of irony in doing so. I think you've actually nailed the sentiment pretty well and the reader can easily relate.
Good luck.
Bill (WildWithWords)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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I hate these 1 line poems with a passion - but then again we have to pay the bills right?
Having said that, I think you've actually done a great job of maximizing the message content here and used no small amount of irony in doing so. I think you've actually nailed the sentiment pretty well and the reader can easily relate.
Good luck.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2019
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Hey WildWithWords... I've been designing movie posters in LA for a couple of decades and the TagLines for the movie are considered as important as the art. It is not easy to make a succinct point about the movie in a few words and yet the taglines follow the movies they accompany for the duration... many outlive the art... just sayin'
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Yeah... you're a pro at this one-line caper.
Remind me to stick to longer stuff where I have a chance of competing. LOL.
Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment from LisaMay
Love makes us very vulnerable and can cause such pain and sorrow, but sometimes, just sometimes, we may get lucky and abundant joy can be ours. We may not believe it at first, possibly thinking ourselves unworthy, and can't really accept it... it threatens our equanimity. We may have established a calm, loveless life and suddenly our whole world of stability is threatened by overwhelming emotions.
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Love makes us very vulnerable and can cause such pain and sorrow, but sometimes, just sometimes, we may get lucky and abundant joy can be ours. We may not believe it at first, possibly thinking ourselves unworthy, and can't really accept it... it threatens our equanimity. We may have established a calm, loveless life and suddenly our whole world of stability is threatened by overwhelming emotions.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Artasylum,
One Line Poem is actually a great challenge, and you have faced it beautifully with lovely wording.
Instead of "threatens", 'enthralls' might have been better. I think so.
Nice Attempt, and Best of Luck!
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Hello Artasylum,
One Line Poem is actually a great challenge, and you have faced it beautifully with lovely wording.
Instead of "threatens", 'enthralls' might have been better. I think so.
Nice Attempt, and Best of Luck!
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from Wabigoon
Art--
Haven't felt that in some time and really don't expect to, but I like what you are saying. There are only so many times your heart can be ripped like this.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
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Art--
Haven't felt that in some time and really don't expect to, but I like what you are saying. There are only so many times your heart can be ripped like this.
Thanks
Wabigoon/Jeff
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from Mr. Boozle
I am finding such great poets on here that make such an impact with so few words. But this are the right words to get the feeling across. I really like this one.
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I am finding such great poets on here that make such an impact with so few words. But this are the right words to get the feeling across. I really like this one.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Cute artwork and presentation, Diana.
-You have an effective one line poem.
-You catch our attention with the verb "rips."
-I like the concluding part of your
poem that shows the resulting joy.
-Good luck in the contest.
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-Cute artwork and presentation, Diana.
-You have an effective one line poem.
-You catch our attention with the verb "rips."
-I like the concluding part of your
poem that shows the resulting joy.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
Comment from rspoet
Hello Diana,
This is a very fine one line poem and entry for the contest
with excellent use of powerful action words like rips and threatens,
then ending in the surprise peaceful word - joy.
Can't do much better in one line.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
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Hello Diana,
This is a very fine one line poem and entry for the contest
with excellent use of powerful action words like rips and threatens,
then ending in the surprise peaceful word - joy.
Can't do much better in one line.
Best wishes to you.
Robert
Comment Written 14-Mar-2019
