Victor
An anapestic poem for Potlatch Poetry26 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
Yvonne, you have crafted a great poem for the Club - Potlatch Poetry prompt. I am unfamiliar with Anapest and hope to learn more.. great job on the story of Victor.
Melissa
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Yvonne, you have crafted a great poem for the Club - Potlatch Poetry prompt. I am unfamiliar with Anapest and hope to learn more.. great job on the story of Victor.
Melissa
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you. Come join us in the club. It's great fun.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Interesting and well crafted. Could easily be compared to real life and how one partner in a long term relationship, while they are still alive, pines for the day they will be reunited with their significant other who has traveled on. A good entry for this club event.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Interesting and well crafted. Could easily be compared to real life and how one partner in a long term relationship, while they are still alive, pines for the day they will be reunited with their significant other who has traveled on. A good entry for this club event.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you. I appreciate you reading and reviewing this.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, they have always been a beautiful enigma of nature to me and I just love that you've given one a personality and a family! :) ;) Who knew that little anteaters could be an effective way of teaching family values! :) ;) A great and entertaining write, Yvonne -- thank you for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Oh, they have always been a beautiful enigma of nature to me and I just love that you've given one a personality and a family! :) ;) Who knew that little anteaters could be an effective way of teaching family values! :) ;) A great and entertaining write, Yvonne -- thank you for sharing! ;) ;) Yvette
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you. What nice things you've said, and I appreciate them.
Comment from Pantygynt
This shoyuld really be in the Animal Crackers club as well. It is amusing and tear-jerking at the same time. I wondered why 'Victor' , I would have though Arthur or even Arbuthnot if you wanted a really classy name - probably too many syllables there mind.
I particularly enjoyed your made up word 'aardvark-dom' - a neat touch I thought.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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This shoyuld really be in the Animal Crackers club as well. It is amusing and tear-jerking at the same time. I wondered why 'Victor' , I would have though Arthur or even Arbuthnot if you wanted a really classy name - probably too many syllables there mind.
I particularly enjoyed your made up word 'aardvark-dom' - a neat touch I thought.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you. I thought Victor would go with the 'v' in 'aardvark' and be less obvious than an 'a' name. I'm glad you liked 'aardvark-dom'. I was a little worried that might be a stumbling block.
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I did pick up on the consonance of the V in aardvark and i wanted to know whether that was there by accident or design so I thought I would tease the anwer from you rather than ask outright.
This really was great fun.
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I'm glad you got it. Thanks.
Comment from Douglas Paul
I think it would be fun to find this park bench and sit down and have a chat with Victor. He sounds like my kind of guy. I love the meter in this poem, one of my favorite forms
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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I think it would be fun to find this park bench and sit down and have a chat with Victor. He sounds like my kind of guy. I love the meter in this poem, one of my favorite forms
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you. Victor was a fun guy in his youth. lol
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Very good. Perfect rhymes from beginning to end. This is an excellent tribute to a handsome aardvark, (if there is such a thing). I have always considered them homely.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Very good. Perfect rhymes from beginning to end. This is an excellent tribute to a handsome aardvark, (if there is such a thing). I have always considered them homely.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Beauty is in the of beholder. lol. The old joke: Once a man was picking out a queen bee to start a hive. While holding the one named Beauty, she flew straight up and then down into the man's eye. The other man shouted, "Oh, no! Beauty is in the eye of the bee holder." Thank you, Thomas.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Even anteaters fall in love. They must, for we always have new batches of anteaters pups (or kittens, or whatever they are called). No instinct could be more important, for without reproduction, species would quickly become extinct. I would not miss hyenas and rhinos, but it's a good thing it's not up to me. :)
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Even anteaters fall in love. They must, for we always have new batches of anteaters pups (or kittens, or whatever they are called). No instinct could be more important, for without reproduction, species would quickly become extinct. I would not miss hyenas and rhinos, but it's a good thing it's not up to me. :)
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Everything has its own beauty. I think the California Condor is ugly, so yes, it's a good thing it's not left up to us. lol. Hyenas are pretty ugly creatures, but I think the rhino has a certain dignity. Thanks for reviewing, Phyllis.
Comment from lyenochka
What a great job to tell a whole story in anapestic meter, Yvonne! And what a cute animal to write about! It's a great little story with a very happy ending.
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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What a great job to tell a whole story in anapestic meter, Yvonne! And what a cute animal to write about! It's a great little story with a very happy ending.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you. It was a silly idea, but I couldn't resist it.
Comment from Teri7
This is just too cute what you have penned for the club. Victor is very cute and very different looking. You used very cute words that made him sound like a real family man anteater in the making. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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This is just too cute what you have penned for the club. Victor is very cute and very different looking. You used very cute words that made him sound like a real family man anteater in the making. I enjoyed reading and reviewing this. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Thank you, Teri. I appreciate this great review.
Comment from tbacha58
Well, that is a fantastic description of an animal we don't hear a lot. Extremely nicely done, forming a whole love story with a very lovely rhyming. I enjoyed reading it. Terry xoxo
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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Well, that is a fantastic description of an animal we don't hear a lot. Extremely nicely done, forming a whole love story with a very lovely rhyming. I enjoyed reading it. Terry xoxo
Comment Written 09-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2019
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I'm so glad you did. Thank you so much.
