Little Poems
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Comment from kiwijenny
I agree...go to the right.....light
Be true be honest embrace values ...please.
I saw a disturbing piece on tv about the destruction of Enron. I pray for the world. Evil it is...oops I did a Yoda
God bless
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
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I agree...go to the right.....light
Be true be honest embrace values ...please.
I saw a disturbing piece on tv about the destruction of Enron. I pray for the world. Evil it is...oops I did a Yoda
God bless
Comment Written 28-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
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Thank you kiwijenny. My the Force with you be. Lol.
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Treischel... I think you have written a very good poem about social currents in the world.. your notes are very good and supportive of your verse. I would mention that in the rhyme scheme between stanzas, you have used the word bereft twice.. therefore, it is not a rhyme, but a repetitive word.. also the last word in the fourth stanza, first line is misspelled... imperiled... just my observations.
Melissa
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Hello Treischel... I think you have written a very good poem about social currents in the world.. your notes are very good and supportive of your verse. I would mention that in the rhyme scheme between stanzas, you have used the word bereft twice.. therefore, it is not a rhyme, but a repetitive word.. also the last word in the fourth stanza, first line is misspelled... imperiled... just my observations.
Melissa
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2019
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Ah, you are correct on both points. I'll fix the mispelling immediately, and see if I can substitute another rhyme. I am glad you caught that. You are the first to notice.
Comment from trimple
Good morning, Tom
The world is indeed going through some serious changes. Some for the better, others not so.
What I do know is, regardless of what party one leans towards, I think we all need to see each other throughout the world as a unique and extremely clever species. We are and always will evolve, my friend.
Personally, I lean more towards socialism than any other named party, I live in the U.K, so... but I don't think any set up is ideal for everybody in any given part of the world. I see the human race. My fellow man and all his guises and failings.
I sometimes think we are too clever for our own good.
Your poem is a wonderful expression of how the winds can so easily change the landscape of life, here on this, 'our' earth.
Very well penned indeed.
kind regards
tracey
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Good morning, Tom
The world is indeed going through some serious changes. Some for the better, others not so.
What I do know is, regardless of what party one leans towards, I think we all need to see each other throughout the world as a unique and extremely clever species. We are and always will evolve, my friend.
Personally, I lean more towards socialism than any other named party, I live in the U.K, so... but I don't think any set up is ideal for everybody in any given part of the world. I see the human race. My fellow man and all his guises and failings.
I sometimes think we are too clever for our own good.
Your poem is a wonderful expression of how the winds can so easily change the landscape of life, here on this, 'our' earth.
Very well penned indeed.
kind regards
tracey
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2019
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Thank you tracey. I agree completely and appreciate the review and comments. It is the universal fellowship of mankind that is important. Indeed, we have the capacity for great good and great evil, with many paths to each.
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A lovely read, Tom
Comment from tfawcus
I imagine that MissMerri will be amused by your naming of this form, in her honour. You move from natural storms to those created by mankind with a smooth transition. The world seems to be going through a rough patch at the moment. It's a moot point whether we're impearled or knackered! I was slightly doubtful about the repetition of 'bereft' in the rhyme scheme. Was that intentional?
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I imagine that MissMerri will be amused by your naming of this form, in her honour. You move from natural storms to those created by mankind with a smooth transition. The world seems to be going through a rough patch at the moment. It's a moot point whether we're impearled or knackered! I was slightly doubtful about the repetition of 'bereft' in the rhyme scheme. Was that intentional?
Comment Written 28-Jan-2019
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Thank you Tony. It was intentional. I wanted to see what Pantygynt would have to say, and thought it would make a good topic for his rhyming class. Is it allowable, and if so, when and how. The stars are much appreciated
