Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

I think you just opened the door to an axe murderer. Big mistake. Let's try that again:

Who is it?
Mumble mumble.
Can't hear you. Speak up.
Wankilu.
Are you Hawaiian?
Choppayuup.
Oh, you're Cherokee. Is this Elizabeth Warren?
Yes, lemmecomin.
My pleasure. I'm a big fan.
LOCK CLICKS. CHAIN LOCK SLIDES OPEN.
My, what blue eyes you have.
Yeah, from Cherokee blood. Now I kill you.
Aiieeeee! Thunk (falls on floor in pool of blood)
THE END

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019

Hahahaha,Thank you so much! very funny!!! You really re-wrote this. I love it. Ulla:)))

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

How are you going to meet people if you don't order takeout? That's what I want to know. Seriously, I like your story. I like the pizza boy's soft blue eyes and your "do come in." Your story line resonated with me as well. It is so hard to cook and eat healthy, and I hate cleaning the house. I'd rather watch tv and eat pizza any old day.
Nice job with the story.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019

Hahaha, Debbie. So true. How on earth would you meet anybody? Thanks for a great review. Ulla:)))

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Hah!!
So pizza was a good choice after all, ha ha.
Love this entry.
Love pizza and Chinese...and the serendipity of this!!
Quite charming!
Blessings...

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019

Thank you so much, Irish. I loved your review. I'm still catching up, but getting there. All the best. Ulla:)))

reply by Irish Rain on 12-Jan-2019

You're most welcome!!

Comment from damommy

Excellent

Hmmmm. Who might this blue-eyed creature be? Sounds like it's going to be interesting. Eager for more. You have what it takes to write a book. Go for it!

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019

Thank you so much, Yvonne. I know this is a late response, but I'm finally getting there. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Tootsie55

Excellent

Wow! This was interesting. I wonder who it was at the door? Is there gonna be anymore to this? What about your Air Hostie job is there more of that coming? Looking forward to whatever. No spags.

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019

Thank you so much. I'm still so behind but slowly catching up. All best. Ulla:))

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

Oh, this one is fun, Ulla... a pair of blue eyes are certainly captivating, for sure! Good job on crafting this short tale for the contest prompt. I hope it wins!!

Melissa

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019

Hi Melissa, Thank you so much!!! Ulla:)))

Comment from Rob Caudle

Excellent

Oh boy, I can totally relate to this conundrum of what to order, yet again! Nicely written with lots of vivid imagery like the tedious day at work, empty fridge staring back at you...been there. But,,,,hmmmmm....who could it be at the door? Surely not the delivery guy so soon! Nice suspense tactic.

Cheers!

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 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019

Thank you so much, and sorry about the late answer. I'm still catching up. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Talk about being taken by surprise, it just goes to show, when oppotunity comes knocking at one's door, we can't choose a convenient time, we have to grab it and run. Just like this gem of a clever flash fiction, well done Ulla, good luck, blessings, Roy

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 Comment Written 03-Jan-2019

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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2019

Thanks a lot, Roy. Sorry for the late answer,. Still catching up. All the best. Ulla:))

reply by royowen on 12-Jan-2019

My pleasure Ulla