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Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan

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Comment from SLMorrical
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First I would like to say I just love the Fiddler on the roof. Your chapter is wonderful. I know some people have a problem with family marring out of their religion. My one question to Shana would be how much does she love Drew to try and find a way for it to work. I also see a little hint that he is having feelings for Jeff. I am curious to see who these pans out. Well done. I would have loved to give you six stars but my allotment is used up.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the kind review. Virtual sixes are just as good. Thank you.
Comment from c_lucas
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Jeff has given Shana some very good advice. I have a Jewish friend who has turned to Buddhism. He is married to a gentile. It is a choice for the couple to make. This is very well written.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by c_lucas on 02-Jan-2019
    You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Barbara, I really liked this chapter and maybe Shana is finally opening up to the idea of courting a Gentile. To be honest, as she has grown up in the West, I think her father has brought too much pressure on her. The woman is the one that carries on the Jewish faith to the children, anyway. So nothing is lost. Looking forward to what's next. All best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the kind review. I have known may Jews and some you wouldn't even know they're Jewish unless they told you, others, well are very much like Shana's family. It just depends how strict they are, as with any religion.
reply by Ulla on 02-Jan-2019
    I totally agree. I've known many Jews as well and you're right. Sometimes you'd never know and other times there was no doubt.:))
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Barb
I had no problem reading this chapter with Shana decision to marry Drew, because, of the difference between their Religions. Barb it was well written and
you had me feeling that Shana was emotional upset.
Gert

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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I don't think children can be raised as both Jewish and Christian. They're bound to have strong opinions well before adulthood, and they'll feel like they must betray one or the other parent. If the mother is Jewish, then the children are... that's how it's usually done.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    I think so too, but Jeff doesn't know that. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Phyllis Stewart on 02-Jan-2019
    And I don't think Drew would mind raising his kids Jewish. He could study and convert... or not. Only the kids really matter.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    true, we'll have to see what happens.
Comment from robyn corum
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Barbara,

Another interesting chapter as Shana struggles with the feelings of her heart. You do leave the possibilities open both ways, and I'm waiting to see what she finally decides. *smile* Nicely done.

Some notes, if I may?
1.) "Lately, Drew's been my (confidant) on so many things,

2.) Michael opened the patio door, "Oops, excuse me," and closed it.
--> Michael opened the patio door(. When he saw the girls speaking privately, he said,) "Oops, excuse me," and (retreated.)

3.) "Why don't you want a man like Drew to love you? I don't get it(.)"

4.) Why does him loving you, upset you so much(?)

5.) He's Gentile, but has Jewish in his heritage.
--> He's Gentile, but has (a Jewish heritage.)

Hope this helps. Still enjoying! Thanks!




 Comment Written 02-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the help. I read this over and over again and still made so many mistakes. I have corrected all of them.
reply by robyn corum on 02-Jan-2019
    You're welcome!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I loved that film, Barbara, very entertaining as well as enlightening. I can understand more about Shana's fears about her Papa. She doesn't want to let him down. It's going to be very interesting how you play this into the story. Everyone obviously wants them to get together, they are a match made in Heaven, but.... Oh dear. I know you already have the book finished. I can't wait to find out what you do. Sorry I'm out of 6s, I owe you one. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

I WISH YOU A HAPPY, HEALTHY NEW YEAR!!!

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    Thank you for the kind review. Virtual sixes are just as good. Thank you.
Comment from judiverse
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Glad to see this post from you. At last the family is beginning to understand what's at the root of Shana's problem about returning her feelings for Drew. She is clearly torn, and Papa seems at the heart of her refusal to commit to Drew. As an advice columnist, I would suggest that she consult someone, maybe a rabbi, who has dealt with interfaith marriages. Her father is biased and too involved with Shana's life to be objective. Hannah would be a good one to talk to, and she'd probably be willing to offer her thoughts, even with the sick baby. Shana shouldn't let her own happiness be determined by others. (There is no charge for that advice.) Great work with your story, and I like the way you have Shana finally expressing herself to Drew's mother. I like the advice Jeff gives Shana. judi

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    Jeff will continue to offer advice as will Susan. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by judiverse on 02-Jan-2019
    You're very welcome. Hope you are enjoying your break, and Happy New Year. judi
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
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This is another good post. Your characters are well developed and have substance. I especially like the relationship between Shana and Susan. She has her potential mother-in-law's approval which says a lot about her as a person.

As I'm not a particularly religious person myself I find it hard to see why marrying someone from a different faith should be an issue. You have done a good job of showing it from Shana's perspective which helps the reader understand her dilemma but I'm glad she is able to consider a compromise.

[He's not ignoring it." "True, but that's the big elephant in the room we can't ignore."]

I thought the word ignore sounded a bit repetitive but it didn't detract from a good read



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 Comment Written 02-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 02-Jan-2019
    I will think about using another word than ignore. Thank you for the kind review.