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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Companion of the Cold Blooded"Flash Fiction
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Comment from royowen
Mmmh, I wonder about being married to an alligator, (in Australia it would be a crocodile, not sure of the difference, equally dangerous, heh heh) I think this is a novel idea, and a marvellously conceptual entry in this contest, good luck Gregory, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Mmmh, I wonder about being married to an alligator, (in Australia it would be a crocodile, not sure of the difference, equally dangerous, heh heh) I think this is a novel idea, and a marvellously conceptual entry in this contest, good luck Gregory, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank you Roy! I really appreciate that. Crocodiles have teeth on the outside I think and can be salt water. I have no idea though haha ;)
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I think they're both salt and fresh, Gregory, they are here anyway, contrarian Aussies, heh heh.
Comment from Pantygynt
I won't ask the obvious question, why? The social pressure is not what it was prior to the summer of love you know. You don't 'have to get married' any more. The shotgun business is a thing of the past.
This has all the ingredients of a story like a beginning a middle and an end but I am having trouble with the word count exceeding the maximum of 52. MS word states 53 and that is down to the ... that joins 'chest to I'd'. If you cut the ... it rises to 54. I suggest some judicious pruning before the closing date.
The stars relate to the story and take no account of the word total problem. The committee will not be so generous.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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I won't ask the obvious question, why? The social pressure is not what it was prior to the summer of love you know. You don't 'have to get married' any more. The shotgun business is a thing of the past.
This has all the ingredients of a story like a beginning a middle and an end but I am having trouble with the word count exceeding the maximum of 52. MS word states 53 and that is down to the ... that joins 'chest to I'd'. If you cut the ... it rises to 54. I suggest some judicious pruning before the closing date.
The stars relate to the story and take no account of the word total problem. The committee will not be so generous.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much. I counted it wrong. I took out one word. But do ellipses count as a word? THANK YOU for counting. Seriously.
Comment from Miranda Langston
this one deserves six stars sheerly because of its creativity... well, that and your use of descriptive language. this is an excellent entry for the contest. very entertaining
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this one deserves six stars sheerly because of its creativity... well, that and your use of descriptive language. this is an excellent entry for the contest. very entertaining
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Wow what a GREAT review. Truly I appreciate that more than you know. It's seriously an honor and I'm grateful for the stars. Really, thank you.
Comment from SLMorrical
Interesting story. I see the alligator as the wife in this story. I can see why that is so. This is very good. The wife as a predator and the husband as prey. Sounds just like most women. LOL Well done, keep writing.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Interesting story. I see the alligator as the wife in this story. I can see why that is so. This is very good. The wife as a predator and the husband as prey. Sounds just like most women. LOL Well done, keep writing.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Lol haha thank you! I really appreciate that a lot. Thank you... :)
Comment from country ranch writer
Wow comparing her to an alligator you got brass buy her some cream for her skin to soften her rough skin. Married all this time to a man who compares her to a gator.
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Wow comparing her to an alligator you got brass buy her some cream for her skin to soften her rough skin. Married all this time to a man who compares her to a gator.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Oh it was just a flash Fiction remember. Not true at all lol. Thank you for reading!!
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just saying
Comment from Teresa Alford
Good job in writing your dribble. It can be tacky writing to convey a story in so few words. But what fun the challenge is. Keep writing!
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reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Good job in writing your dribble. It can be tacky writing to convey a story in so few words. But what fun the challenge is. Keep writing!
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Comment Written 01-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2019
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Thanks so very much!!
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I just noticed my previous comment said tacky when it should have said tricky. You probably knew what I meant.
