Beyond The Wall
How many walls do we have around us.34 total reviews
Comment from Mistydawn
What a powerful story, so beautifully, written, descriptive, it brings out a lot of emotions in the reader. I love how you used the wall to symbolize the barrier between us and heaven and what we need to do to break that wall down. Terrific job. It deserves a six-star, but I'm all out, sorry.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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What a powerful story, so beautifully, written, descriptive, it brings out a lot of emotions in the reader. I love how you used the wall to symbolize the barrier between us and heaven and what we need to do to break that wall down. Terrific job. It deserves a six-star, but I'm all out, sorry.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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With this story, all of the glory goes to God. He led me through the whole process. Many thanks for the kind words.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Shanbreen
I like this flash fiction for the message it carries:
"The wall represented the distance we were apart. The more you studied the Word, the closer we became. Remember that."
It says it all.
From the technicalities of writing, there are some grammar and spelling that may need tweaking. =)
...standing in front of a huge brick wall with no end in sight and extends into thick white clouds above. (discontinuity with "and." You could remove "and" and state: "... with no end in sight, extending into thick white clouds.")
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...out to all of us, convicts me... (did you want to say, convicts?)
Best thing is that the fiction made me feel good.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I like this flash fiction for the message it carries:
"The wall represented the distance we were apart. The more you studied the Word, the closer we became. Remember that."
It says it all.
From the technicalities of writing, there are some grammar and spelling that may need tweaking. =)
...standing in front of a huge brick wall with no end in sight and extends into thick white clouds above. (discontinuity with "and." You could remove "and" and state: "... with no end in sight, extending into thick white clouds.")
Also
...out to all of us, convicts me... (did you want to say, convicts?)
Best thing is that the fiction made me feel good.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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With this story, all of the glory goes to God. He led me through the whole process. Many thanks for the kind words and your help with this story.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think your friend will be well pleased with your story. It really is brilliant! I wish I had a 6 left, it's that good! We need to get closer to God, in all ways. Only then can be truly know Him. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I think your friend will be well pleased with your story. It really is brilliant! I wish I had a 6 left, it's that good! We need to get closer to God, in all ways. Only then can be truly know Him. Well done, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 10-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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With this story, all of the glory goes to God. He led me through the whole process. Many thanks for the kind words and the thought of a six.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Donka Kristeva
"The more you studied the Word the closer we became"-- the key to the light of Christ and knowing God's love for us. That dream is a call to many of us. Only the Word, the living Word of God can answer all our questions and meet all our needs. Many thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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"The more you studied the Word the closer we became"-- the key to the light of Christ and knowing God's love for us. That dream is a call to many of us. Only the Word, the living Word of God can answer all our questions and meet all our needs. Many thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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With this story, all of the glory goes to God. He led me through the process. Many thanks for the kind words, my friend!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
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You are very welcome.
Comment from RGstar
Well done Mike. Thought I would come and support. Wall, the climb, enlightenment, learning...all good transition through the work.
I like the combination and the underlined message, as well mixed with humour.
Well done.
Good luck with it.
My best wishes.
RGstar
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Well done Mike. Thought I would come and support. Wall, the climb, enlightenment, learning...all good transition through the work.
I like the combination and the underlined message, as well mixed with humour.
Well done.
Good luck with it.
My best wishes.
RGstar
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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With this story, all of the glory goes to God. He led me through the whole process. Many thanks for the kind words, my friend!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your story, Mike. It read smoothly with a great message. I believe this is a great piece for your friend. There is much to learn from a piece like this. However, each one must take that on. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I enjoyed your story, Mike. It read smoothly with a great message. I believe this is a great piece for your friend. There is much to learn from a piece like this. However, each one must take that on. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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With this story, all of the glory goes to God. He led me through the whole process. Many thanks for the kind words.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Ulla
Hi There. this is very well written and you have a great imagination about the great wall. Well, the wall against what? Now I'm not religious so I have no idea what wall you'd be thinking of. I liked your writing all the same. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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Hi There. this is very well written and you have a great imagination about the great wall. Well, the wall against what? Now I'm not religious so I have no idea what wall you'd be thinking of. I liked your writing all the same. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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The wall was the distance the man had turned away from God. It's good to hear from you. Many thanks for the kind words.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Julie Pie
This is very well done. Your descriptions paint a clear picture of the wall and all the narrator is experiencing. As the narrator is climbing the stairs it feels as if we are with him, building up to a big ending. Very enjoyable and uplifting!
Nice work,
Julie
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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This is very well done. Your descriptions paint a clear picture of the wall and all the narrator is experiencing. As the narrator is climbing the stairs it feels as if we are with him, building up to a big ending. Very enjoyable and uplifting!
Nice work,
Julie
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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With this story, all of the glory goes to God. He led me through the whole process. Many thanks for the kind words.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Sugarray77
I got a lot out of this 'dream' and feel like the Lord has nudged me to open my eyes to this message. It is well written and strong in faithful testimony. Thank you. Melissa
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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I got a lot out of this 'dream' and feel like the Lord has nudged me to open my eyes to this message. It is well written and strong in faithful testimony. Thank you. Melissa
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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With this story, all of the glory goes to God. He led me through the whole process. Many thanks for the kind words and shiny 6 stars!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from dmt1967
This story compelled me to read on. Usually, I find stories like this a bit boring but you kept me intrigued until the end. I like the way God appeared, although I would have liked less gold lol. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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This story compelled me to read on. Usually, I find stories like this a bit boring but you kept me intrigued until the end. I like the way God appeared, although I would have liked less gold lol. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2018
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With this story, all of the glory goes to God. He led me through the whole process. Many thanks for the kind words.
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
