Perennials of War
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Comment from giraffmang
Strange happenings at the plant. A bit of a holding instalment here with not much movement but well written nevertheless.
Anderson stood and recovered Shana - I would hyphenate here to differentiate the meaning.
As Shana ate, Susan turned on the TV. "Do you watch any soap operas? - need closing speech marks here.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2018
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Strange happenings at the plant. A bit of a holding instalment here with not much movement but well written nevertheless.
Anderson stood and recovered Shana - I would hyphenate here to differentiate the meaning.
As Shana ate, Susan turned on the TV. "Do you watch any soap operas? - need closing speech marks here.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2018
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I will add that hyphen and the quotation marks. Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Realist101
Hi Barb, wow. I always admire your skill with dialogue and sure wish I could keep up with you. This chapter is so detailed, it really brings us into the world of your characters. Each of them can be 'seen' by us (reading) this. If that makes sense!? Amazing work! :D
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Hi Barb, wow. I always admire your skill with dialogue and sure wish I could keep up with you. This chapter is so detailed, it really brings us into the world of your characters. Each of them can be 'seen' by us (reading) this. If that makes sense!? Amazing work! :D
Comment Written 08-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the wonderful encouragement.
Comment from DonandVicki
The dialogue you created really pulled me into the story. I will have to go back and get caught up on the rest of the story. Very well written. Don and vicki.
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The dialogue you created really pulled me into the story. I will have to go back and get caught up on the rest of the story. Very well written. Don and vicki.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from tfawcus
An action-packed episode that keeps your readers on the edge of their seats! I have a few chapters to catch up on, in due course! Can't do it now, as I'm out and about and battery life is down to 5%. Just wanted to check in and let you know that I haven't forgotten you! Life's a bit hectic at the moment!
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An action-packed episode that keeps your readers on the edge of their seats! I have a few chapters to catch up on, in due course! Can't do it now, as I'm out and about and battery life is down to 5%. Just wanted to check in and let you know that I haven't forgotten you! Life's a bit hectic at the moment!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you for stopping by. I appreciate your input.
Comment from c_lucas
I like the way you are slowly pulling these two together. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very adventurous read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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I like the way you are slowly pulling these two together. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very adventurous read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from judiverse
This shows Drew's concern for his employees, as he's taking time to make sure the family of the man who lost his life in the rig explosion is taken care of. I'd like to see Shana getting over her family teachings and become less fragile. Love Romeo and Thor. They're very loyal, and real softies. Interesting that Shana's family didn't have a TV. That seems typical of her father. Suspenseful chapter, as we don't know what the fall-out will be from the oil rig fire. judi
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This shows Drew's concern for his employees, as he's taking time to make sure the family of the man who lost his life in the rig explosion is taken care of. I'd like to see Shana getting over her family teachings and become less fragile. Love Romeo and Thor. They're very loyal, and real softies. Interesting that Shana's family didn't have a TV. That seems typical of her father. Suspenseful chapter, as we don't know what the fall-out will be from the oil rig fire. judi
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the generous review
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You're very welcome. While I think of it, I meant to call your attention to a word you used. I think it was recovered. It seemed to me you need a hyphen, re-covered, because I thought you meant that Drew put the cover back over Shana. judi
Comment from Sankey
Another great chapter once more. Still plenty of excitement. I had forgotten the enemy could have got at Drew via the oil rigs. Just 2 spags today. "If you need anything, ho[w](l)ler."
"Do you watch an[d](y) soap operas?
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Another great chapter once more. Still plenty of excitement. I had forgotten the enemy could have got at Drew via the oil rigs. Just 2 spags today. "If you need anything, ho[w](l)ler."
"Do you watch an[d](y) soap operas?
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the catches. I appreciate them.
Comment from Ben Colder
This is very good. I can see this happening about the rig on fire and the crews jumping. My son in law works a rig somewhere in Texas. Good one Barb. Well done.
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This is very good. I can see this happening about the rig on fire and the crews jumping. My son in law works a rig somewhere in Texas. Good one Barb. Well done.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, another great chapter. Drew and Shana seems to be on an even keel yet again, but I wonder what is to happen next. Very well written. I found a couple of things:
My first priority to make sure Robert's family's= My first priority is to make sure Robert's family's
Should we wait breakfast or go ahead? = Should we wait eating/with breakfast or go ahead?
All the best. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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Hi Barbara, another great chapter. Drew and Shana seems to be on an even keel yet again, but I wonder what is to happen next. Very well written. I found a couple of things:
My first priority to make sure Robert's family's= My first priority is to make sure Robert's family's
Should we wait breakfast or go ahead? = Should we wait eating/with breakfast or go ahead?
All the best. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.
Comment from royowen
It looks like Kuznetsov and his mob may have sabotaged one the oil rigs owned by Drew and Co. And some men are not accounted for. One man is definitely a casualty and Drew makes a pledge to look after the family. Shana is still stressing about the money incident, but Drew says not to worry. Well done, Barbara, Goodvscribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : Anderson stood and (recovered) Shana. Revived?
2: "You're rotten."?
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It looks like Kuznetsov and his mob may have sabotaged one the oil rigs owned by Drew and Co. And some men are not accounted for. One man is definitely a casualty and Drew makes a pledge to look after the family. Shana is still stressing about the money incident, but Drew says not to worry. Well done, Barbara, Goodvscribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : Anderson stood and (recovered) Shana. Revived?
2: "You're rotten."?
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Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2018
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I meant to put the blankets back over her. Maybe I need to rethink it. Thank you.
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Well done,
