Haunted Even At Deathbed!
67-Word General Fiction. Said! Haunted at deathbed!54 total reviews
Comment from susand3022
AlCreator! Inspire me! Damn! That's pretty good! I've been trying to figure out how on Earth a person can do a story in 50 words and here you've done one in 67. I now have an example to follow and an inspiration that it CAN be done! Very well done! Susan
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AlCreator! Inspire me! Damn! That's pretty good! I've been trying to figure out how on Earth a person can do a story in 50 words and here you've done one in 67. I now have an example to follow and an inspiration that it CAN be done! Very well done! Susan
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
Comment from SLMorrical
I like this. I work as a Hospice Nurse, and I have seen dying patients being haunted. Their actions or moans tell all. We all can be haunted on our death beds. This flows well. Very well done. Keep writing.
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I like this. I work as a Hospice Nurse, and I have seen dying patients being haunted. Their actions or moans tell all. We all can be haunted on our death beds. This flows well. Very well done. Keep writing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
Comment from Heather Knight
This is a thought-provoking little text. I do hope the narrator finds peace in the after-life, even if he's being haunted on his death bed.
Thanks for sharing.
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This is a thought-provoking little text. I do hope the narrator finds peace in the after-life, even if he's being haunted on his death bed.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
Comment from Sanku
Hello I think the fear you have is almost common for all of us. At some stage we do take stock.And sure there are things you are sorry about
I am sure God will forgive us ,Why shouldnt he
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Hello I think the fear you have is almost common for all of us. At some stage we do take stock.And sure there are things you are sorry about
I am sure God will forgive us ,Why shouldnt he
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
Comment from Raul1
In this world we need to live for ourselves and not stay dependent on violent issues. I am not saying to do wrong, but to be able to live your life. I think this person haunted by negative events should live his own life. We can't fix everything. If we do then we're all Supermen and the women Supergirls. God should solve the violent issues. Thanks for sharing this article. This fictional person is a sad being. Interesting story.
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In this world we need to live for ourselves and not stay dependent on violent issues. I am not saying to do wrong, but to be able to live your life. I think this person haunted by negative events should live his own life. We can't fix everything. If we do then we're all Supermen and the women Supergirls. God should solve the violent issues. Thanks for sharing this article. This fictional person is a sad being. Interesting story.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
Comment from Ogden
I hope the situation you write of never will apply to you. I'm sure many with guilty consciences have experienced the same fears. Probably some readers of your poem.
Good thinking, Dr. Alcreator.
Don
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I hope the situation you write of never will apply to you. I'm sure many with guilty consciences have experienced the same fears. Probably some readers of your poem.
Good thinking, Dr. Alcreator.
Don
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
Comment from Dean Kuch
How right you're...
Really, Doc?
That makes absolutely no sense whatsoever, grammatically speaking.
Why not just simply say, "Oh, how right you are", and be done with it?
It's one thing to have a unique style all your own.
It's another thing entirely to use proper grammar which actually makes sense.
Have mercy...~Dean
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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How right you're...
Really, Doc?
That makes absolutely no sense whatsoever, grammatically speaking.
Why not just simply say, "Oh, how right you are", and be done with it?
It's one thing to have a unique style all your own.
It's another thing entirely to use proper grammar which actually makes sense.
Have mercy...~Dean
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Thank you for writing such a great review, I salute your wisdom, but I have written the same what you have written or tried to mean, please check my author's notes, where I have stated the same, it was per my style and art of expression, and I never think, it is ABSOLUTELY grammatically wrong, I do not plead my words, I only say, thank you for the guidance, and please, please, and please, I wish, it would be better and wise if and only if you do not offer your wise comments in the future, I do not like to get a wise comment from you any more, I do not like to mute you for disrespecting a wise man of your stature; gentlemanly requesting, please do not offer your wise comments on my works, I know, my works would be public, even then, personally I request you to offer your wise comments in the future, if you like, you may read, but please do not offer your wise comments on my public work henceforth. I know by writing this I hurt you, but I am sorry, I do not like to receive your wise, intelligent, or professional and helpful reviews any more; you have offered so many wise reviews in the past, but I do not like to receive so much wise comments from you, and I hope, you will never take it personally and proceed to take action against me; just I wish, plainly I request you, I have no personal grudge, I wish to keep a good relation with you, but I do not wish to get or receive your wise reviews on my works or postings in the future and I think, this was your last review or comment on my work or post . Thanking you once again for offering a wise review.
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As you wish.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear friend,
This was a bit of an unusual piece. I'm not quite sure why you chose to write this post in just this way - it doesn't seem like you were constricted by length or anything - so some of your shorthand just doesn't make sense to me.. (sorry!)
O man, how right (you are)!
--> this is the only way this line makes sense, imo.
Good luck!
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Dear friend,
This was a bit of an unusual piece. I'm not quite sure why you chose to write this post in just this way - it doesn't seem like you were constricted by length or anything - so some of your shorthand just doesn't make sense to me.. (sorry!)
O man, how right (you are)!
--> this is the only way this line makes sense, imo.
Good luck!
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Thank you, you have written the review without reading, in the author notes, the same is given, but you wrote in a hurry, without reading the author notes, what you have guided is already written, so sorry, a reviewer of your stature made a blunder, I think, please check, how you have committed the blunder, what should I write? you must have deliberately written to prove your wisdom, but by committing blunder, sorry and awful it is from a reviewer of fame, and above all, you are a writer also, before commenting, you should have checked what you write, you need not cut a sorry figure, rather I feel sorry learning your wisdom in words, please, and please, and please do not review a work I post, I hope you never mind, even if my works are public, i do not wish you come forward to read and offer your comments, for by writing comments you do not help me anyway but denounce, I think, you have cannot do so, I did not write to you earlier, in all previous reviews, you ever wrote reviews without any justification but whimsically you write something to denounce me and condemn my writing, so I think, it is wise, if you do not read my works any more, I should have muted you but why should I do that, I find it would be disgusting, I soberly and gently request you for god's sake, please do not offer your comments on my works here, if you wish to complain, or mute me, you are free to do so, or write to Tom, and anyone can find how awful you write your comments, I do not say, you do not know how to write review, you are wise, rather wiser than me, but I think, you please do not offer your comments on or to my works published, just please imagine, if I have done like this, you must have written to me complaining, I am also a reviewer, I know what reviewer write it is always right, that does not mean, a reviewer can desperately write making blunder, without reading author's notes, I think, I have written enough, I know, you being a lady you would not take it so personally and make it an issue and go for justice and somehow will try to issue me a warning from the site for writing this treating me pleading my writing, never, never, I have written only to tell you that you have made a blunder, and none can do any harm for writing this about the same, being a gentleman, as you are a lady, I wish and request you please do not offer your comments on my work any more. Hope you will understand why I have written this much, and I request you please do not edit or offer me higher rate because I do not want higher rating, I only request you please do not offer any comments on my work..
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Thank you for your honesty. I have considered what you're saying and find that you are absolutely right. I have been too caught up in pointing out errors and haven't strived hard enough to find the message you intend to convey in your unusual pieces.
I will continue to read and review your work, but I intend to do so with a different heart. Thanks for your sincere and kind approach in this note. Have a great day!
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
All of us, I believe, can relate to being haunted by what we have said, thought, done or not done. I wish I had a 6-star to give you. I loved your poem; it was thought-provoking and something I feel we all think about as time passes on, especially when we realize we've lived longer years than we have left. Well illustrated, too.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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All of us, I believe, can relate to being haunted by what we have said, thought, done or not done. I wish I had a 6-star to give you. I loved your poem; it was thought-provoking and something I feel we all think about as time passes on, especially when we realize we've lived longer years than we have left. Well illustrated, too.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Thank you, thank you very much for your wise review and comments I appreciate. But, I think I should not receive any more reviews or comments on or of my works from you. I request you gentlemanly, please do not offer your wise comments or reviews on my posts in the future. I do not like to mute you to disrespect a wise reviewer of your sort. Simply, I wish please, please, please and please do not offer your wise comments or review on my works or posts, and I think, this was your last review or comment on my work; please do not take it personally and make it an issue to go further to do harm to me, I hope, you understand, I am such a poor writer, I wish you not to offer your wise reviews of my posts, and I understand I have made it clear, and please do not edit and offer me new rating for I do not want to get higher rating; I have no objection about your reviews, as I have already stated, simply I wish please do not offer your wise review on my works anymore. Thanking you once again for offering your last wise comments and reviews. Wish you every success in your chosen goals. Please forgive me if I have hurt you by writing this. God bless.
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My deepest apologies. I will not do it again, nor will I hurt you in any way. God bless you, too.
Comment from Artasylum
Well this is very avant guard piece and an extremely unusual train-of thought that rambles well but not to much but, in the end it is about God's grand design for us. yours, diana
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Well this is very avant guard piece and an extremely unusual train-of thought that rambles well but not to much but, in the end it is about God's grand design for us. yours, diana
Comment Written 07-Oct-2018
