Perennials of War
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Another excellent part, Barbara! Drew is most definitely a tad upset! LOL, and he's not going to leave Shana again, Hmm, now we know what that means, he's going to make sure she marries him. I don't envy Jeff and Michael's meeting with Drew! Well done, my friend, can't wait for the next part. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Another excellent part, Barbara! Drew is most definitely a tad upset! LOL, and he's not going to leave Shana again, Hmm, now we know what that means, he's going to make sure she marries him. I don't envy Jeff and Michael's meeting with Drew! Well done, my friend, can't wait for the next part. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging reviewl
Comment from Sasha
Drew is justifiably angry. Someone is going to have to explain how Patricia got into the house and so close to Shana. Shana may be fine but Drew is seriously angry and I doubt any answers will lessen his anger.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Drew is justifiably angry. Someone is going to have to explain how Patricia got into the house and so close to Shana. Shana may be fine but Drew is seriously angry and I doubt any answers will lessen his anger.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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We'll have to wait and see. LOL Thank you for your continuous support.
Comment from c_lucas
A passive woman and an active man can create some very interesting action. This is very with a smooth flow of words, making for an excellent read. Good job.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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A passive woman and an active man can create some very interesting action. This is very with a smooth flow of words, making for an excellent read. Good job.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good afternoon, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. Virtual six. Wow, the tension and anger in the air was palpable. I can imagine it took all of Drew's self control not to explode, yet mixed within his anger and disappointment was his genuine concern for Shana's safety. Should be interesting when he's back at the apartment. Well done!
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Good afternoon, Barbara
Enjoyed the post. Virtual six. Wow, the tension and anger in the air was palpable. I can imagine it took all of Drew's self control not to explode, yet mixed within his anger and disappointment was his genuine concern for Shana's safety. Should be interesting when he's back at the apartment. Well done!
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from Commando
Awesome post, Barb. Oh, my God! Your expertise in writing is commendable. As I began reading your presentation, I felt a magnetic force pulling my mind in, and would not let go until I reached the end. The remote and impersonal man in the artwork certainly stimulates the imagination. Keep your quill wet with ink and keep on a 'writing. I'm waiting for your next post. Happy Labor Day, best wishes and God bless!
Bill (Commando)
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Awesome post, Barb. Oh, my God! Your expertise in writing is commendable. As I began reading your presentation, I felt a magnetic force pulling my mind in, and would not let go until I reached the end. The remote and impersonal man in the artwork certainly stimulates the imagination. Keep your quill wet with ink and keep on a 'writing. I'm waiting for your next post. Happy Labor Day, best wishes and God bless!
Bill (Commando)
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review..
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Thank you for the awesome presentation, Barb!
Comment from judiverse
Wow! This is great. Anderson isn't too pleased with what's happened in his absence, to say the least. It takes a while for him to get the story, too. He declares he's never going to leave Shana again. Great work in showing the various reactions to what occurred and why Patricia landed in the hospital. Excellent work with moving the story along. As I was thinking about Patricia's appearance and her being ordered to kill Shana, it occurred to me that we hadn't heard from Patricia in a while. You might consider making reference to her in a chapter leading up to your last, maybe offering some kind of hint. Patricia seems unlikely to be a hit woman unless you take us a little bit into her character. It doesn't have to be much, but an indication that trouble's brewing with her. Unless my memory has caused me to forget. judi
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Wow! This is great. Anderson isn't too pleased with what's happened in his absence, to say the least. It takes a while for him to get the story, too. He declares he's never going to leave Shana again. Great work in showing the various reactions to what occurred and why Patricia landed in the hospital. Excellent work with moving the story along. As I was thinking about Patricia's appearance and her being ordered to kill Shana, it occurred to me that we hadn't heard from Patricia in a while. You might consider making reference to her in a chapter leading up to your last, maybe offering some kind of hint. Patricia seems unlikely to be a hit woman unless you take us a little bit into her character. It doesn't have to be much, but an indication that trouble's brewing with her. Unless my memory has caused me to forget. judi
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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I will consider your suggestions. Thank you for the encouragement.
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You're welcome. I've probably forgotten when you last mentioned Patricia--before she showed up with the gun. judi
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Barbara,
I wondered how Drew was going to react to this news. You did a great job of expressing his emotions.
Looking forward to the next part,
A few notes,
'"Yes, everything's fine. I finished 'King Lear'. (the punctuation goes INSIDE the quote marks - even if they are single.)
'I'll be home in about two and (a) half hours.'
'I think under the circumstances...'
'I'm paying a small fortune for while this was...(this seems awkward - a while?
'"All right. I'll be home in about two and (a) half hours.'
~patty~
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Hi, Barbara,
I wondered how Drew was going to react to this news. You did a great job of expressing his emotions.
Looking forward to the next part,
A few notes,
'"Yes, everything's fine. I finished 'King Lear'. (the punctuation goes INSIDE the quote marks - even if they are single.)
'I'll be home in about two and (a) half hours.'
'I think under the circumstances...'
'I'm paying a small fortune for while this was...(this seems awkward - a while?
'"All right. I'll be home in about two and (a) half hours.'
~patty~
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the catches. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, This is another fine chapter to the story. I'm glad it was finally there. So Shana is threatened, and Drew is livid. So he's never going to leave her alone again? Romance or even love is definitely in the air. Just one minor thing:
I think under circumstances you'd be happy to pay her debts." = I think under the circumstances you'd ..."
All the best. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Hi Barbara, This is another fine chapter to the story. I'm glad it was finally there. So Shana is threatened, and Drew is livid. So he's never going to leave her alone again? Romance or even love is definitely in the air. Just one minor thing:
I think under circumstances you'd be happy to pay her debts." = I think under the circumstances you'd ..."
All the best. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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I have made that correction. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I like how you know how to keep me tense in this chapter with the cell call between Anderson (Drew) and Shana,
I may be totally off base, by thinking Drew had planned that his e-wife Patrica go see Shana?
Gert
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Hello Barb
I like how you know how to keep me tense in this chapter with the cell call between Anderson (Drew) and Shana,
I may be totally off base, by thinking Drew had planned that his e-wife Patrica go see Shana?
Gert
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Drew wants nothing to do with Patricia. Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome Barb and it's good to know that Drew doesn't wantto have any thing to do with Patrica
Gert
Comment from Adri7enne
"He'll calm down by the time he gets home. His anger rarely lasts long." Michael headed for the kitchen. "I need a drink." LOL! I should say! I need a drink myself just reading it! You really keep the tension high, here. Great job, Barb.
Ooh, I'd love to have someone like Anderson in my corner. "By the way, I'm never leaving you again." Come on down! Great stuff, Barbara. I'm really enjoying this novel. Wish I had a six. It's such a smooth read. Good flow with nothing to disturb the reader all the way through. Loved it.
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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"He'll calm down by the time he gets home. His anger rarely lasts long." Michael headed for the kitchen. "I need a drink." LOL! I should say! I need a drink myself just reading it! You really keep the tension high, here. Great job, Barb.
Ooh, I'd love to have someone like Anderson in my corner. "By the way, I'm never leaving you again." Come on down! Great stuff, Barbara. I'm really enjoying this novel. Wish I had a six. It's such a smooth read. Good flow with nothing to disturb the reader all the way through. Loved it.
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Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the encouraging review. Anderson is one of a kind.
