The Greater Good
A sonnet57 total reviews
Comment from flylikeaneagle
JMF: beautiful sonnet with images of romance, stars and time.
Life is wonderful when we have friends. I like how the atmosphere
is clear with the stars and then the wind picks up. flylikeaneagle
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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JMF: beautiful sonnet with images of romance, stars and time.
Life is wonderful when we have friends. I like how the atmosphere
is clear with the stars and then the wind picks up. flylikeaneagle
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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Thank you for this encouraging review. I am so pleased that you liked it.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sarah B Sullivan
Great rhymes and rhythm. The poem is strong, but I felt like the couple should be mentioned in the stanza about things going bad (with the wind bringing in the cloud cover), since they were the ones enjoying life and would be the ones sensing the "trials" referred to in the last couplet. I like that last couplet a lot. Thank you!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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Great rhymes and rhythm. The poem is strong, but I felt like the couple should be mentioned in the stanza about things going bad (with the wind bringing in the cloud cover), since they were the ones enjoying life and would be the ones sensing the "trials" referred to in the last couplet. I like that last couplet a lot. Thank you!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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Thank you Sarah for this encouraging review. My maiden name is Sullivan and I have a grand-daughter Sarah. Small world.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sophie Shumaker
A beautiful piece of poetry that you should keep. Good luck in the contest! Have a wonderful day!
Sophie
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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A beautiful piece of poetry that you should keep. Good luck in the contest! Have a wonderful day!
Sophie
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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Thank you Sophie for this encouraging review. I am so pleased that you liked it. Hope you have a wonderful day too.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from jenintorre
What an excellent sonnet you have written. The message that you portray is very profound.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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What an excellent sonnet you have written. The message that you portray is very profound.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018
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Thank you Jen for this encouraging review and the good luck wishes.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
Hi Janet
This was a wonderful Sonnet that flowed beautifully, a excellent choice of subject that gave me much to ponder, super metering throughout and an effortless read.
Thoroughly enjoyable
Mitchell
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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Hi Janet
This was a wonderful Sonnet that flowed beautifully, a excellent choice of subject that gave me much to ponder, super metering throughout and an effortless read.
Thoroughly enjoyable
Mitchell
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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Thank you Mitchell for this encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written Shakespearean Sonnet. When two people truly love each other their time together goes by like a dream. Before they know it is their time to leave from earth for a higher place where their souls can continue the greatness of true love.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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A very well-written Shakespearean Sonnet. When two people truly love each other their time together goes by like a dream. Before they know it is their time to leave from earth for a higher place where their souls can continue the greatness of true love.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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Thank you Sandra for this encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from kiwijenny
The giant orb appears and rises high
above the couple locked in love's embrace.
Their world stood still but time just seemed to fly
and blur the Milky Way to ancient lace.
Ooh what good imagery. I loved Milky Way to ancient lace.
Well penned
God bless
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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The giant orb appears and rises high
above the couple locked in love's embrace.
Their world stood still but time just seemed to fly
and blur the Milky Way to ancient lace.
Ooh what good imagery. I loved Milky Way to ancient lace.
Well penned
God bless
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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Thank you for this encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Ogden
This is an impressive poem, replete with imagery, and an excellent entry in the Shakespearean Sonnet contest. There is an issue in the second stanza you may want to consider. The third line changes tense, which I suspect is unintentional.
Don (Ogden)
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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This is an impressive poem, replete with imagery, and an excellent entry in the Shakespearean Sonnet contest. There is an issue in the second stanza you may want to consider. The third line changes tense, which I suspect is unintentional.
Don (Ogden)
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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Thank you Do for this encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments and I will take another look at that third line.
Blessings
Janet
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You'e very welcome, Janet.
Don
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, :)
I hope you are doing well. Good poem. I really like the way you describe the night sky. Keep on writing!
I hope you have a good weekend.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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Hello, :)
I hope you are doing well. Good poem. I really like the way you describe the night sky. Keep on writing!
I hope you have a good weekend.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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Thank you for this encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments.
I am doing well and I hope you are too. We are off to visit friends and family for a few weeks so I will be away from FS for a bit.
Hope you have a good weekend too.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Writeling
Mmmm, I get it... and it's clever... clever pull of the narrative to make your final swipe. I will look up more of your work. I really like:
'Their world stood still but time just seemed to fly
and blur the Milky Way to ancient lace.'
With best wishes, Writeling
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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Mmmm, I get it... and it's clever... clever pull of the narrative to make your final swipe. I will look up more of your work. I really like:
'Their world stood still but time just seemed to fly
and blur the Milky Way to ancient lace.'
With best wishes, Writeling
Comment Written 02-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2018
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Thank you for this encouraging review. I greatly appreciate your kind comments and those extra special stars.
Blessings
Janet
