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Perennials of War

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Is Anderson a gallant knight? Can he recover Shan

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Comment from ciliverde
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I've missed quite a few chapters as I've been gone from the site, but happy to know that the story about Shana and Anderson - familiar characters to me - is still going on. Do compost piles really explode? I've never heard of that. Your method of writing is very compelling, one becomes immediately interested in the characters. I like how Anderson said the families are similar - I think different cultures often are more alike that different, when you think about it.
Carol

 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 07-May-2018
    Compost piles can combust, but it's extremely rare. I just needed something. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sis Cat
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Ha, Barbara, a good fake out, "It looks like a compost pile or something similar exploded." Nevertheless, this pushed Anderson and Shana together. I'm vacationing in Mexico right now, so reading about people eating migas and chorizo north of the border appealed to me.

The theme of this chapter was families, their differences and similarities. The Sharp family form a nice counterbalance to Shana's family. Anderson spoke the theme of this chapter: "I told you there were a lot of similarities between our families."

Your prose is clean and your characters, dialogue, and action are engaging and entertaining.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 07-May-2018
    Have fun in Mexico. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sasha
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That was a close call. They will need to do a thorough inspection to be sure it was an explosion, Anderson's quick action was impressive too. Although, Anderson was unprepared, I like his father's get to the point attitude. Things are heating up and I fear Shanna has more to worry about than a scratch. Great work with this chapter and I look forward to the next chapter.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 06-May-2018
    Shana has a lot to worry about. Thank you. Sasha.
Comment from meeshu
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I've been following this story from the beginning. I really like it. people that don't know they are Jewish? eating pork? am I reading too much into this? good read, Barb...........meeshu

 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 06-May-2018
    Only Shana is Jewish and she isn't eating pork. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by meeshu on 06-May-2018
    thanks I wanted to be sure.
Comment from Harry Smith
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The reader was interested in this chapter from the beginning until the end and the chapter is filled with lots of imagery and emotions. I enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 06-May-2018
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Sometimes the most innocent questions are the ones that arouse problems for people. Odd booms, and the such, are things to be suspicious of. Found no errors to note. On occasion, even though a person may love someone there is reason to be concerned about them. Interesting read. Odd question about what Jewish people believe in. That could lead this story in so many diversified directions.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 06-May-2018
    Thank you for the kind review. The Jewish part has already caused a few issues.
Comment from royowen
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I wonder if Michael really lacks knowledge, or is he just leading Shana on? Drew chokes. I know the scratch is there for a reason, I wonder if it's a bullet graze or not, or a rusty nail, doesn't she need a tetanus shot? Well done Barbara, you've woven some intrigue in this chapter dear girl. Blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 06-May-2018
    I am going to add the tetanus shot. It was an oversight. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by royowen on 06-May-2018
    Most welcome Barbara
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hello Barb
I believe that Anderson dad has asked Shana a great question here I am waiting for her answers
to her question
After Michael helped himself to a healthy portion and began eating, he said, "Shana, I know Jewish people exist, but I don't think I ever met one. Exactly what do they believe?"
No wonder why Anderson chocked on his food


 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 06-May-2018
    LOL I think/hope this is an interesting conversation. Michael doesn't pull any punches. Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Gert sherwood on 06-May-2018
    I will be waiting to see what everyone reactions are going to be when Shana reply to the question.
    Gert
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Well, there's no need to beat about the bush, I mean to say, it's a pretty reasonable question coming from someone who doesn't know. lol, I could just picture Drew's face! Thank goodness the bang wasn't serious, it was worrying for a while. Well done, my friend, another excellent part. Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 06-May-2018
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
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Sometimes an innocent question can get a person in trouble. Ignorance will get the same person in more trouble. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.

 Comment Written 06-May-2018


reply by the author on 06-May-2018
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by c_lucas on 06-May-2018
    You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie