Perennials of War
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Comment from Ricky1024
This was well written rich and team as well as imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks,
Dr Ricky 1024.Later...
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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This was well written rich and team as well as imagery.
It flowed well and read well with no grammar issues as well.
Adjective Content was aligned well with Objective Content and Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Thanks,
Dr Ricky 1024.Later...
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
After being gone for a couple months, it's obvious I'm way behind in the story. Having neglected many things at home during my absence it's not likely that I'll be able to go back and catch up entirely. But I still plan to follow along as best I can. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
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After being gone for a couple months, it's obvious I'm way behind in the story. Having neglected many things at home during my absence it's not likely that I'll be able to go back and catch up entirely. But I still plan to follow along as best I can. Thanks for sharing another fine chapter. :-)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the review. If you have any questions, I'd be glad to give you the quick version.
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I know how busy we all stay, and I wouldn't want to put you in a time crunch. I will try to go back and just skim through when I get a chance, or if you could maybe give me the high spots of a chapter in a line or two. But, Please, don't take time you don't have, just for me. :-)
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I like the sense where Anderson is threading the stout man with a knife then how the action goes on with when four hospital security guards descended upon them.
Smiles about eating too many donuts and the conversation of the three cats with one of them about ready to have kittens
Great Chapter
Gert
Gert
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Hello Barb
I like the sense where Anderson is threading the stout man with a knife then how the action goes on with when four hospital security guards descended upon them.
Smiles about eating too many donuts and the conversation of the three cats with one of them about ready to have kittens
Great Chapter
Gert
Gert
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome Barb
Gert
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Great action in this chapter, Barbara - it's all happening...
just a couple of minor things to check on.
Wish I had some more coffee.He walked - Space needed after period
The pregnant cat isn't due in the next two or three days(,) is she?" - add comma
Blessings,
Margaret
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Great action in this chapter, Barbara - it's all happening...
just a couple of minor things to check on.
Wish I had some more coffee.He walked - Space needed after period
The pregnant cat isn't due in the next two or three days(,) is she?" - add comma
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
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I have made the corrections. Thank you for the catches. I appreciate it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I thought this part was really good, it had some action, and some humour. The pregnant cat, lol! I liked the way Shana's father said in reply to his saying he was outvoted, that he doubted that happened much, LOL. Well done, Barbara, this is coming along nicely! Big hugs. Sandra xxx
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I thought this part was really good, it had some action, and some humour. The pregnant cat, lol! I liked the way Shana's father said in reply to his saying he was outvoted, that he doubted that happened much, LOL. Well done, Barbara, this is coming along nicely! Big hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Writingfundimension
Hi, Barbara
Wow, this is a very complicated novel with angle of art theft, which I think you are handling extremely well. I always hesitate to get into the area of weaponry because it's not something I know much about. You, on the other hand, seem quite knowledgable and comfortable with the topic. Lots of action here. I look forward to reading more!
Bev
Bev
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Hi, Barbara
Wow, this is a very complicated novel with angle of art theft, which I think you are handling extremely well. I always hesitate to get into the area of weaponry because it's not something I know much about. You, on the other hand, seem quite knowledgable and comfortable with the topic. Lots of action here. I look forward to reading more!
Bev
Bev
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
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I so enjoy getting a review from you. Thank you.
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You're welcome, Barbara.
Comment from Rasmine
Barbara,
Good chapter. Love the action; it is well-written. Now you have them out of the penthouse apartment, that is good. Glad you found the image of the knife.
Can't wait for the next!
Nome
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Barbara,
Good chapter. Love the action; it is well-written. Now you have them out of the penthouse apartment, that is good. Glad you found the image of the knife.
Can't wait for the next!
Nome
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Thank you for the encouraging review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation having smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end - The End leading to another beginning, Interesting!
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Hello Barbara.wilkey,
Nice piece in continuation having smooth and captivating flow throughout from the beginning to the end - The End leading to another beginning, Interesting!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Barbara
Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed reading the continuation
It appears the conflict between Benjamin and Anderson regarding Shana (from the prior post) has been resolved to a degree. The action sequence in the hospital was good and I liked the humor regarding the donuts and coffee.
The lead, Matt said, " What is the lead...is it the one initiating the conversation ?
"From your mouth to God's ears." Haven't heard this expression in a long while.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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Good morning, Barbara
Good morning, Barbara
Enjoyed reading the continuation
It appears the conflict between Benjamin and Anderson regarding Shana (from the prior post) has been resolved to a degree. The action sequence in the hospital was good and I liked the humor regarding the donuts and coffee.
The lead, Matt said, " What is the lead...is it the one initiating the conversation ?
"From your mouth to God's ears." Haven't heard this expression in a long while.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
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I met the lead of the security team. Maybe I need to work on that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from giraffmang
Ah, I was expecting, or hoping for something a little more active than a simple outnumbering. Maybe later on...lol
Good well written instalment.
Additional three men surrounded the four of them - An additional here I think.
I found it a little odd that there wasn't more of a discussion about the attempted abduction from Shana's family. The explanation given by Anderson doesn't hold a lot of water, given that anyone there could have called the police and pressed charges irrespective of his men's wants or the wants of the hospital security.
to be treated with the upmost respect - I think in this instance it may be utmost -
utmost - of the highest or greatest degree, most extreme.
upmost - situated at the top, highest or most upward position.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2018
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Ah, I was expecting, or hoping for something a little more active than a simple outnumbering. Maybe later on...lol
Good well written instalment.
Additional three men surrounded the four of them - An additional here I think.
I found it a little odd that there wasn't more of a discussion about the attempted abduction from Shana's family. The explanation given by Anderson doesn't hold a lot of water, given that anyone there could have called the police and pressed charges irrespective of his men's wants or the wants of the hospital security.
to be treated with the upmost respect - I think in this instance it may be utmost -
utmost - of the highest or greatest degree, most extreme.
upmost - situated at the top, highest or most upward position.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2018
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I have made that correction and I was awaken in the middle of the night because I realized that Shana would have some questions that I haven't addressed in my next post. I am in the process of rewriting parts of it. Thank you for the kind review. Things to heat up in two,maybe three posts. It will happen before they leave this area. I have already written it, I just can't remember how many posts in the future it is.
