A Man Becomes Such
fiction, man, injustice45 total reviews
Comment from LIJ Red
I don't think this applies to the rich loser in Las Vegas or the wifebeater in Texas,
or even the guy roaring down the bicycle path in the truck, and nobody I know in these hills has gone ballistic, but it may be happening in those cities where violence is the norm. Your free verse is well written.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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I don't think this applies to the rich loser in Las Vegas or the wifebeater in Texas,
or even the guy roaring down the bicycle path in the truck, and nobody I know in these hills has gone ballistic, but it may be happening in those cities where violence is the norm. Your free verse is well written.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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It is written mostly so we never forget the injustices and subsequent actions, no matter how delayed , that eminate from them.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think that you have achieved your goal.
The anger and anguish are well displayed and felt.
A strong poem with a strong message.
Well done
Sharon
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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I think that you have achieved your goal.
The anger and anguish are well displayed and felt.
A strong poem with a strong message.
Well done
Sharon
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thank you.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Hello Victor. It is a serious piece of writing this one. In my own mind, I never go to the place of no return. I am not sure if it's because I'm not capable or just don't think in terms such as this. I do think men are much more into the eye for an eye theory. Women exact vengeance a plenty, it is just delivered in a less open way. A powerful write and I can understand why some would confuse it with the Texas tragedy, however, it felt more to me like a father or a husband tipped over the edge because of the girl used and broken. Wonderful piece of serious thought provoking writing. Well done. xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Hello Victor. It is a serious piece of writing this one. In my own mind, I never go to the place of no return. I am not sure if it's because I'm not capable or just don't think in terms such as this. I do think men are much more into the eye for an eye theory. Women exact vengeance a plenty, it is just delivered in a less open way. A powerful write and I can understand why some would confuse it with the Texas tragedy, however, it felt more to me like a father or a husband tipped over the edge because of the girl used and broken. Wonderful piece of serious thought provoking writing. Well done. xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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And you have iterpreted it completely and correctly. There must be a reward awaiting you. :)
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How is ur son? Please get me news when it is reasonable to do so.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"A Man Becomes Such" is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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"A Man Becomes Such" is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Awe. Thanks. Blushing, but happy. Hi there my Lady.
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Awe nothing. I can't even imagine you blushing. Hi to you kind Sir.
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Well...it is theoretically possible.
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Anything is theoretically possible........... Dear Sir!
Comment from sandy montgomery
I cannot even imagine. I think you have captured something here of it. This is a skillful comment on social injustice and what it can bring men to do. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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I cannot even imagine. I think you have captured something here of it. This is a skillful comment on social injustice and what it can bring men to do. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you. I appreciate it.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent read and poem and if this was just an attempt you have succeeded wonderfully, as somethings, some people just cannot endure, very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Excellent read and poem and if this was just an attempt you have succeeded wonderfully, as somethings, some people just cannot endure, very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you.
Comment from DonandVicki
A very timely poem that is dark and well composed. The poem does what all good poetry should do and that makes the reader think, well done. Don and Vicki.
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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A very timely poem that is dark and well composed. The poem does what all good poetry should do and that makes the reader think, well done. Don and Vicki.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Thank you. And, I mean it. :)
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I like the short staccato feel to this poem. It leaves us to fill in the words to add to the meaning of your poem.
Sometimes understated says the most.
I think the poem does a great job of telling a story of the past, with a timeless message.
What drives your main character is obvious, and understandable. The crime against him causes an immediate reaction. Retribution. Other people these days, not so much justification.
Great job,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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I like the short staccato feel to this poem. It leaves us to fill in the words to add to the meaning of your poem.
Sometimes understated says the most.
I think the poem does a great job of telling a story of the past, with a timeless message.
What drives your main character is obvious, and understandable. The crime against him causes an immediate reaction. Retribution. Other people these days, not so much justification.
Great job,
Rhonda
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2017
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Boy, ain't that the truth. Thank you.
Comment from Brigitte Elko
This is a powerful presentation of anger. The detailed saga of the journey to the end is poignant in this poetry. During these stressful times, this is a possible scenario though you deemed it Fiction. I felt the pain as I read this. The one thing I am not sure of is if the lines about Spring fit in with the rest. Just my opinion, you are the author. Those lines are the only ones that relate positivism of life to me and the rest just anger. Great work.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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This is a powerful presentation of anger. The detailed saga of the journey to the end is poignant in this poetry. During these stressful times, this is a possible scenario though you deemed it Fiction. I felt the pain as I read this. The one thing I am not sure of is if the lines about Spring fit in with the rest. Just my opinion, you are the author. Those lines are the only ones that relate positivism of life to me and the rest just anger. Great work.
Fan Friend,
Brigitte
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2017
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For irony my dear. For irony alone. Thank you.
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Thank you for the enlightenment. Don't be angry with me..like that old country says,lol
Brigitte
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no reason to be angry. Thank you for the review.
Comment from dragonpoet
This seems like the man in this poem has committed suicide because he can't live alone with what he did during his life. Life didn't didn't treat him well so he treated his family and strangers very badly.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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This seems like the man in this poem has committed suicide because he can't live alone with what he did during his life. Life didn't didn't treat him well so he treated his family and strangers very badly.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 06-Nov-2017
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2017
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Thank you.
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My pleasure.
Joan