Comment from Drew Delaney

Excellent

You did really well with this one, Robina.

I have one suggestion to possibly make it even better.
I always blamed his age
then he always raged. (Then he would fly into rage)
This way, it rhymes perfectly with (age)

Hope things are getting better for you.

Drew xx

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a great week. I pick your tip.

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Your story echoes for many of us. Fortunately, my many ailments are not life threatening. I appreciated your rhymed couplets as well. Take good care of yourself and best wishes in the Story Poem contest- Joan

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

It is the waiting that is so unfair because we want progress and answers now. Very well done, rhyme and flow and telling a storythat is too true

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2017

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Comment from Janilou

Excellent

I read through your poem and I have to admit to being a little confused by your closing line.

Nothing gets fixed with wealth?

My mind wanted to read

Nothing gets fixed without wealth

All the best in the contest

Jan

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. Thanks for the tip.

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

I hope Robert's surgery goes well.

Lines 9 and 10 should rhyme but they do not.

Good luck in the story poem contest.

teresa

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. Also thanks for the tips.

Comment from nbonner

Excellent

Nicely written. I like how the poem flowed and the message it provides, 'money isn't everything' (at least that's what I take from it). The writing was a little hard too read though (maybe make it a little darker)? Just a suggestion, otherwise I really enjoyed the read. Nice job! Thank you for sharing and best wishes in the contest. NB

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

You are so right, Wealth cannot buy back health. It seems as we age the body just falls apart and they can try at great expense to fix things, knees, hips, hearts and other parts.
But what do we really get in the end maybe a couple of years, but often it is only a few months. Seems to me the more sensible thing to do is just give us something to make us a free of pain as possible for the rest of our lives. Patricia

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

I'm glad you can still keep enough humor on call to help mitigate some of your concern for health issues. I hope your government had universal health coverage. We're praying for your best outcomes.

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 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week. Yes, they do.Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

Well I'll add my prayers to the previous ones Ine. I hope you do well health wise, and your dear husband's operation goes well. A nicely written work here my friend, nothing worse than I'll Health. Well done. Blessings, Roy

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 Comment Written 11-Sep-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Sep-2017

Thanks for your kind review, Ine. Have a lovely week.

reply by royowen on 11-Sep-2017

You too Ine