Comment from Linda Hughes

Excellent

I am totally intrigued now, and must continue on to read the next installment. The story is down to earth, and much like anything that can happen in real life, with the same thoughts and feelings about in-laws. The tension builds from knock on the door to discovering the check, which then begins a guessing game in the reader's mind, until it is finally confirmed what is about to take place. Good plot... carry on.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Linda; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad the story intrigues you and I hope it will continue to do so. I look forward to reading your thoughts about Part Two.

~patty~

Comment from Patricia A. Shaw

Excellent

I love this story. It is filled with great quality and it is realistic. It is mysterious and serious. When I get letters or phone calls I say What? too. The color of the letter was just right. I look forward to the next one. Thanks

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

thank you so much for reading and reviewing this part of the story. I hope you continue to read along - I posted part two earlier today.

~patty~

reply by Patricia A. Shaw on 07-Jun-2017

I will.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

What a surprise letter, in more ways than one. Out of it all, the only thing that Kathy ever wanted was for her to love her. Is it too late? What will happen at the will reading, it sounds like it's going to be fun! Wonderful writing and I can't wait to read the next part. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Sandra; thank you so much for your kind and thoughtful review of this piece. Kathy and her mother-in-law are interesting characters, and they banged around in my head for weeks before I finally started writing their story. I hope you will continue on through the rest of the story,

~patty~

Comment from mbroyles2

Excellent

This has an intriguing introduction and I was immediately drawn into the story. There is a mystery and an emotional sequence.
A truly interesting read.
Michael

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Michael; thank you so much for the wonderful words of praise for this piece. I've posted part two this morning and I hope you will continue to read along.

~patty~

Comment from writergal614

Excellent

Hi Patty,

Great read! It keeps you interested in what type of twist it will take. I like that you really hit on small details. That is an essential part of a good story! Cant wait to read more.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi; LOL - I'm not Kathy! She is the main character in this fictional piece, but I'm glad you felt the story was real.

I've posted the second part this morning, and I hope you will follow along on this wild ride. Thanks for reading,
~patty~

Comment from rtobaygo

Excellent

Good morning, Patty

Great flow, pace and continuity. You immediately bring the reader into the story. with a great hook. Your character's feelings,thoughts and her range of emotions towards her mother-in-law were spot on. Enjoyed.

Out of sixes.

Take care and stay safe,

Ray

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Ray; thank you so much for the wonderful review of this piece. I'm working on the next part in this series, and I must admit, this is a wickedly fun write!

I will take your virtual six - its the thought that counts!

~patty~

Comment from Asem.inspirations

Excellent

Good morning Patty,

First, I want to say that my favorite line is this one: Her familiar perfume assaulted my nostrils. (lol)

but...

I was taken back when I read the rest of your story. At first I felt sad that she waited until she was dead to express her admiration and love for you. By the time I finished reading it, I was just happy for that she made sure to let you know how she really felt even if she did it the way she did. The main thing to me is that she trusted you even more than her children. She knew that she could depend on you no matter what the relationship was like when she was alive.

My second husband was so extremely abusive, an evil man but the one blessing that I did get from that marriage was that my mother in law was a real mother and best friend to me. She always expressed her gratitude, love and trust of me. Yes, she did depend on me and trust in me more that some of her own children. She was a real blessing to me in a really bad time of my life and what is more...we really needed each other. We were each other's blessing.

I so wish you shared this with your mother-in-law bit God knows how much we can bear. You were so strong and she realized that so she didn't feel you needed her. I on the other hand, well, God knew that I needed a mother and a best friend, someone who was showing me true love and attention. I sincerely prayed for true love, anyone to truly love me. God was not only saying to me that he truly loved me but he provided me with what I needed and asked for in my mother in law and also my Aunt Barbara.

My heart is with you and this is an exceptional write. I am happy for you today.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Tier; this was a work of total fiction. While it IS true, I would have loved to hear these words from my mother-in-law, nothing like this has ever happened in real life. No, this is a tale born of my dreams and nightmares. Its been almost fifteen years since I had to be in the room with my sisters-in-law, and I've already decided that when my mother-in-law does die, I will NOT be at the funeral.

Thank you for sharing your story with me; I just had to learn to live without a mother figure in my life. I modeled my own motherhood after the role models on TV.

I appreciate you stopping by to read,
~patty~

reply by Asem.inspirations on 06-Jun-2017

oh wow, I guess it was so well written that I just concluded it was true. (lol)

reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Such a nice compliment! I just posted Part Two and I hope you enjoy it as much.

I will be gone for a week starting on Thursday. I'm going to visit my daughter, her husband, and my grandbabies! I'm super excited.

~patty~

Comment from Marvin Calloway

Exceptional

I liked this story very much. It has a lot going for it. It was easy to read, easy to follow and held my interest. It's also suspenseful.
I look forward to reading the answers to my questions.
Marv

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2017

Hi Marv; thank you so much for the lovely review of this story. I'm working on the second part right now, and I hope some of your questions are answered. I'm not entirely sure how many parts it will take to tell the whole story.

~patty~
PS: the shiny six stars and EXCEPTIONAL rating were of great importance to me!

Comment from Mabaker

Excellent

This has the earmarks of an exciting story, I'll look forward to the next installment. But fiction can sometimes cover fact. Why won't people tell others when they do something right? Quick to heap blame slow to praise. Just a 'well done.' Would do. Sincerely Anne.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi Anne; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. The next part should be up by the end of the week. I'm glad you're willing to follow along,
~patty~

Comment from Bichon

Excellent

I enjoyed this very much, and can find no errors. I am a bit behind with reviews, apologies, but will do my best to catch up.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2017

Hi Chloe; thank you so much for reading and reviewing. Are you out of school now? Or do you only get a break for a few weeks between semesters?
~patty~

reply by Bichon on 05-Jun-2017

My exams start on Wednesday! I have them on every weekday until the Wednesday after. Thankfully actual school is finished though.