The Trump Backed Whale
a tale of a whale56 total reviews
Comment from Leena
Wow this is too good; true as well! I see a beautiful satire along with the rhymes... Absolutely amazing and worth appreciation. Lord save the Canadian poet :) Great job. Thumbs up for you!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Wow this is too good; true as well! I see a beautiful satire along with the rhymes... Absolutely amazing and worth appreciation. Lord save the Canadian poet :) Great job. Thumbs up for you!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2017
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Thanks! Love the positive review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from tmoler
It reads for the most part as a fun sort of poem. It was well written and original. I was caught by surprise by the ending.
I would rate it perfect if the ending were a bit different.
Good work on the most part.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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It reads for the most part as a fun sort of poem. It was well written and original. I was caught by surprise by the ending.
I would rate it perfect if the ending were a bit different.
Good work on the most part.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Thanks. Glad you found it fun. I considered a different ending for that whale, but I thought it might be in poor taste. What kind of ending would you have liked?
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Maybe have the whale eat plankton or spout water on something in the ocean
Comment from vkmack
This is fabulous. I expected something dour and serious, but you've created a tale of whale that works without fail. This is part children's cautionary tale and part political satire. It works on the same level as the writings of Dr. Seuss, Lewis Carroll, and David Sedaris (strange bedfellows)--there is something very deep and more complicated beneath the happy simplicity. So glad I checked in tonight. Thanks for making my day with this magical work. Bravo!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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This is fabulous. I expected something dour and serious, but you've created a tale of whale that works without fail. This is part children's cautionary tale and part political satire. It works on the same level as the writings of Dr. Seuss, Lewis Carroll, and David Sedaris (strange bedfellows)--there is something very deep and more complicated beneath the happy simplicity. So glad I checked in tonight. Thanks for making my day with this magical work. Bravo!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Thanks! I've taken some flack with this one, and it's wonderful when someone appreciates it. I tried to keep it light and funny, but not everyone saw it that way. Thanks again for the six!
Comment from cflorian8
Even a novice will notice that your words poke fun at Donald Trump and his policies on Immigration. You also comment on his ego, and how he seems to lash out at any person who disagrees with him. Did I leave anything out? The rhyme scheme is steady and the read is smooth. Very good job.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Even a novice will notice that your words poke fun at Donald Trump and his policies on Immigration. You also comment on his ego, and how he seems to lash out at any person who disagrees with him. Did I leave anything out? The rhyme scheme is steady and the read is smooth. Very good job.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Yep, I admit I was having a bit of fun with the Donald. He seems to have an issue with our dairy cows too. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the six!
Comment from royowen
I think this is a "whale" of a story poem, which grabs the imagination and takes a good run with it. I'm not certain if young lives would understand it. But never less, the rhyming, the articulate narrative, and clever theme and confident presentation, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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I think this is a "whale" of a story poem, which grabs the imagination and takes a good run with it. I'm not certain if young lives would understand it. But never less, the rhyming, the articulate narrative, and clever theme and confident presentation, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Thanks. This one is for the grownups. I've found that kids tend to take things literally and don't get satire very well. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Most welcome Cindy
Comment from Joan E.
Your title certainly caught my attention! Your satirical quatrains are quite effective, and I admired your end and internal rhymes. I'm with "the oceans and the seas" and wish you good luck in Canada--we're all going to need it over the next four years! Also, congratulations on your "Frog" poem win. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Your title certainly caught my attention! Your satirical quatrains are quite effective, and I admired your end and internal rhymes. I'm with "the oceans and the seas" and wish you good luck in Canada--we're all going to need it over the next four years! Also, congratulations on your "Frog" poem win. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Thanks. Yep, I think the whole world is going to need all the luck it can get. Glad you got a kick out of my poem.
Comment from Mike Stevens
A fine (and fictionally-true!) poem. Ha--this seems plenty brave (and funny) to me, Cindy, and 40 reviews, wow--If I get 3, I'm feeling pretty good, and the ones who didn't like it, are delusional Kool-Aid drinkers!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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A fine (and fictionally-true!) poem. Ha--this seems plenty brave (and funny) to me, Cindy, and 40 reviews, wow--If I get 3, I'm feeling pretty good, and the ones who didn't like it, are delusional Kool-Aid drinkers!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Thanks. Most people took it in the spirit it was intended. Unfortunately it offended a few. Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from thonnigford09
Amazing commentary. I just heard about Canada myself. I don't remember how isolationism worked in the past for us, but...today...who knows? anyway, well written and well rhymed and I would recommend it.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Amazing commentary. I just heard about Canada myself. I don't remember how isolationism worked in the past for us, but...today...who knows? anyway, well written and well rhymed and I would recommend it.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Thanks. Glad you liked my fun little poem.
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I actually took the poem seriously.
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I was really surprised how many people did. I'm afraid I even offended a few. That was not my intention.
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I appreciated this and also wish I would have had a six left!!!!! Only had fives to give! Thanks again, Theresa.
Comment from misscookie
I like the artwork you show to go with your poem
It is perfect match.
I love the clever way you got your message across. This is what I call a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go mm.
Cookie
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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I like the artwork you show to go with your poem
It is perfect match.
I love the clever way you got your message across. This is what I call a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go mm.
Cookie
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Thanks. I'm so glad you found it clever and enjoyable. Thanks again for the six!
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You're very welcome, have a nice day.
Cookie
Comment from Annie_ Stone
Well that was a very interesting poem of tale of a whale. All whales or any animal for that matter don't like to be blocked up. Working together is best, but not always do able.
Thanks for sharing
Annie
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Well that was a very interesting poem of tale of a whale. All whales or any animal for that matter don't like to be blocked up. Working together is best, but not always do able.
Thanks for sharing
Annie
Comment Written 03-Jun-2017
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2017
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Yeah, I think a wall will create more problems than it solves. Good thing whales have better sense. LOL Glad you enjoyed.
