Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 56 "The Path"Dawn of Chaos
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Comment from Lady Jane
I felt this meter was off just a tad. Some rhyme, some not, for me it felt a bit choppy, but that's my particular taste. The content, however, was well conceived and deep. Setting goals is a good thing...just remember, shoot for the moon. Even if you fall, you'll land above the stars. Standing firm despite set backs builds character. Nice job, here.
Janelle
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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I felt this meter was off just a tad. Some rhyme, some not, for me it felt a bit choppy, but that's my particular taste. The content, however, was well conceived and deep. Setting goals is a good thing...just remember, shoot for the moon. Even if you fall, you'll land above the stars. Standing firm despite set backs builds character. Nice job, here.
Janelle
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Then I'm a rock each effort another link moving hopefully forward in progesdion. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response about this read.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"The Path", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to reading your next post.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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"The Path", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. You KEEP WRITING and I'll KEEP READING. I look forward to reading your next post.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Glad aspects of this write was able to find your interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching words.
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TPAC,
As always, you're very welcome,
Take care, God bless you and best wishes,
the Duchess
Comment from Thomas Bowling
This would probably be a great poem if I could understand it. I read it twice and each time said, "What the Hell is he talking about?" I can't make heads or tails of it.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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This would probably be a great poem if I could understand it. I read it twice and each time said, "What the Hell is he talking about?" I can't make heads or tails of it.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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I feel you. The write aim was future planning before old, setting goals higher then you can accomplish. Despite you still gave a generous rate. Thanking you for it and your welcomed response.
Comment from meeshu
while the overall theme is clear the verse is somewhat opaque, the way I like it. I really enjoy the way string words together, a good poem has 100 messages. good write, Tpac..............meeshu
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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while the overall theme is clear the verse is somewhat opaque, the way I like it. I really enjoy the way string words together, a good poem has 100 messages. good write, Tpac..............meeshu
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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At least some aspects of this write was understood. Maybe soon to touch other views as well. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting words.
Comment from Gloria ....
Hey TPAC. What a dramatic poem, and each word selected to carry forward to impact of choices and the outcomes arising from these choices.
A most enjoyable read on a sunny Saturday. Many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Hey TPAC. What a dramatic poem, and each word selected to carry forward to impact of choices and the outcomes arising from these choices.
A most enjoyable read on a sunny Saturday. Many thanks for sharing.
Gloria
Comment Written 14-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Glad this write was appealing to you. Thanking you for your generous rate and touching words.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
I love to read poetry aloud. It is the only way for me. It is also important in which voice and cadence I read a writing. At first, I was not jiving with the message, til at last I read it as a Shakespearean actor would. Why I even gestured at certain parts for emphasis. This alludes to the struggle and plight such an orator might be venting about. I enjoyed reading this. I hope other readers appreciate the need to read it as such.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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I love to read poetry aloud. It is the only way for me. It is also important in which voice and cadence I read a writing. At first, I was not jiving with the message, til at last I read it as a Shakespearean actor would. Why I even gestured at certain parts for emphasis. This alludes to the struggle and plight such an orator might be venting about. I enjoyed reading this. I hope other readers appreciate the need to read it as such.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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I like your conceptions prevailing this write. Many helpful views that gives me an refreshing appeal to further works. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting words.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Wow -- such an interesting and thought provoking piece -- it echos of things reached for yet not achieved...something to which I guess we can all relate on one level or another.
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Wow -- such an interesting and thought provoking piece -- it echos of things reached for yet not achieved...something to which I guess we can all relate on one level or another.
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Glad aspects in this write was found appealing to you. Views promoting an excitement with in the reader, found pleasing by them. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed response.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork, TPAC.
-Note is appreciated.
-You have some good ideas
in your poem.
-You use the idea of a path
in life to represent the
various steps we take to find our way.
-The conclusion is also good.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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-Very nice artwork, TPAC.
-Note is appreciated.
-You have some good ideas
in your poem.
-You use the idea of a path
in life to represent the
various steps we take to find our way.
-The conclusion is also good.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018
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Glad these factors about this write was understood. Also, pleased aspects detailed was acceptable as well. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting words.
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You are quite welcome, TPAC.
Comment from fm wright
A lot of your lines just don't make sense to me. I'm just not sure what you are trying to say with this poem. To me your words don't really seem to have anything to do with a path.
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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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A lot of your lines just don't make sense to me. I'm just not sure what you are trying to say with this poem. To me your words don't really seem to have anything to do with a path.
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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I feel your view apparently finding nothing coherent about this write. The work failing in all aspects of being appealing to any reader interests. I do try to reach beyond my interests. Thanking you for your generous rate and welcomed views.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
This poem needs editing overall. There is consistent lack of clarity Ex. lines 1,4,5,6 the entire 3-rd stanza, and the last 2 stanzas. I am sorry I could not understand the theme of this work.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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This poem needs editing overall. There is consistent lack of clarity Ex. lines 1,4,5,6 the entire 3-rd stanza, and the last 2 stanzas. I am sorry I could not understand the theme of this work.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018
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I will review your acclaims about this write, targeting me those special points suggested as pits. Thanking you for your generous rate and comforting words.
