Why Anansi Has Eight Thin Legs
Haiku (Please read author notes!)44 total reviews
Comment from Wardine
I really enjoyed this piece! I thoroughly appreciated the pacing and wording chosen. The author impacted the reader with their choice of language. I will read more from this author!
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I really enjoyed this piece! I thoroughly appreciated the pacing and wording chosen. The author impacted the reader with their choice of language. I will read more from this author!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
Comment from strivinginsc
Great read and one I can remember to tell my grandchildren. Fables are fake, but always with a lesson to be learned. Loved it!
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Great read and one I can remember to tell my grandchildren. Fables are fake, but always with a lesson to be learned. Loved it!
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
Comment from Dom G Robles
The legendary tale about the spider Anansi is something that is informative. I am quite amused how this spider obtained its eight thin legs. The Haiku which is based upon the tale describes a unique expression in eight words which, could be hard to understand without the accompanying tale. I enjoyed reading the poem and the fable.
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The legendary tale about the spider Anansi is something that is informative. I am quite amused how this spider obtained its eight thin legs. The Haiku which is based upon the tale describes a unique expression in eight words which, could be hard to understand without the accompanying tale. I enjoyed reading the poem and the fable.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
Comment from DonandVicki
I have enjoyed reading your authors notes almost as much if not more than your poem. A very interesting and imaginative story that complements your poem perfectly.
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I have enjoyed reading your authors notes almost as much if not more than your poem. A very interesting and imaginative story that complements your poem perfectly.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
Comment from Dawn Munro
Yes, I am familiar with some of these fables - St. Vincent and the Grenadines, Jamaica and other Caribbean countries are rich with them as well. Your haiku is so beautifully presented, too, the music you chose a great addition to your amazing poem and notes. Just one small suggestion - the kire (cutting, or pivot line) actually joins two concrete images, so it should connect them - example - famished anansi seeks nourishment...etc, etc. Otherwise, this is fabulous - richly entertaining notes, as well.
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Yes, I am familiar with some of these fables - St. Vincent and the Grenadines, Jamaica and other Caribbean countries are rich with them as well. Your haiku is so beautifully presented, too, the music you chose a great addition to your amazing poem and notes. Just one small suggestion - the kire (cutting, or pivot line) actually joins two concrete images, so it should connect them - example - famished anansi seeks nourishment...etc, etc. Otherwise, this is fabulous - richly entertaining notes, as well.
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
Comment from lyenochka
Thanks for sharing the story. I wouldn't have understood the poem without it. I like the colorful folktales from Africa. I guess being a glutton in a land where food isn't always abundant is something to really avoid.
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Thanks for sharing the story. I wouldn't have understood the poem without it. I like the colorful folktales from Africa. I guess being a glutton in a land where food isn't always abundant is something to really avoid.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
Comment from RobertaLee
Really adorable, idea...illustration...and perfectly formed Haiku; even about 'nature' as traditional Haiku are.
Enjoyed much. And thanks.
Smiles and blessings
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Really adorable, idea...illustration...and perfectly formed Haiku; even about 'nature' as traditional Haiku are.
Enjoyed much. And thanks.
Smiles and blessings
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
Comment from Thal1959
Very well done, Luna, and very interesting to. Many older cultures have explanations for why animals look or behave the way they do. I would assume this regards what we call the "Daddy long-legs" spider, though I don't know if it came from Africa or is indigenous there. The Haiku is a proper 5-7-5. The spider, and its perpetual seeking for food, is a "nature" theme for a Haiku. And the Satori works well - going from famished to glutton.
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Very well done, Luna, and very interesting to. Many older cultures have explanations for why animals look or behave the way they do. I would assume this regards what we call the "Daddy long-legs" spider, though I don't know if it came from Africa or is indigenous there. The Haiku is a proper 5-7-5. The spider, and its perpetual seeking for food, is a "nature" theme for a Haiku. And the Satori works well - going from famished to glutton.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
Comment from dragonpoet
This spider seemed to let hunger lead him to make a bad decision. These lines are a good synopsis of the story.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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This spider seemed to let hunger lead him to make a bad decision. These lines are a good synopsis of the story.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
Comment from estory
I think you have some great fragmented images in this piece, and some great alliterations making the music skip and trip throughout. Famished and Anansi is nice and Glutton bamboozled works too. Nice humorous, light kind of piece in all the heaviness out there today estory
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I think you have some great fragmented images in this piece, and some great alliterations making the music skip and trip throughout. Famished and Anansi is nice and Glutton bamboozled works too. Nice humorous, light kind of piece in all the heaviness out there today estory
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
