Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Hello dragonpoet,

A romantic piece! :)

I like the uneven rhyme scheme with the occasional 'unrhyme'.

Best wishes for the contest.

Sonali




Those eyes make my heartbeat raise ... did you mean 'rise' or 'race'?

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017

Thanks. I may make the change

dp

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

This is such an impassioned plea; love pure and simply expressed, a need that can only be filled by that special one..."With you my sadness dies...I want you." Isn't it true? There are some people who seem especially gifted to bring joy into the lives of others without even trying!

Lovely. Best of luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017

Thanks for such postitive comments. I appreciate the good luck wishes. It is right about some having the gift for love.

dragonpoet

reply by Dawn Munro on 11-Feb-2017

You're very welcome. :)

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Yes this is well written and has good rhyming through the poem a strong poem full of feeling all I can say is to change the category to romance good luck regards Jill

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017

Thank you, Jill, for your kind comments and high rating.

Joan

Comment from Ridley Williams

Excellent

Hello, my friend,

I truly appreciate this poem which expresses the desires and completion attained when a person finally finds their "one and only".
I found your word choice of "taze" to describe the feeling of electricity that courses through the body at such a time, to be a very original way to make that statement...well done.
I also liked the phrase, (and I paraphrase), "You bring the sun's bright rays...and though it tries...darkness forever dies"...beautiful lines full of emotional content.
My very best for your poems success in the contest...
Bill

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017

Thanks for the thorough review and high rating. I am glad you liked my choise of words.

Joan

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

A sweet love poem for the love poem poetry contest. Excellent rhyme and sweet sentiments. Very nicely done.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. Glad you liked it.

Joan

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Great use of simple phrases to make feelings known. I liked "feelings with no disguise" to show pure emotion. I like the simple "I want you" ending the last two stanzas to emphasize the longing. You probably want the possessive form of it, as "its" in the line, ", it strength."

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017

Thanks for the strong encouragment. I am glad you liked the emphasis. I will check the error.

dp

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

To linger, (its) strength forever dies.

Thanks! Another cool poem, this time about love! Good luck in the voting! I hope you do well!! Have a super day!

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017

Thanks, Robin, for the nice comments and the editing help.

dp

Comment from Luna

Excellent

Joan, your rhyming in this was exquisite, the way you took it from one stanza to another. A lovely romance poem, I wish you very well in the contest.

I certainly enjoyed reading this.

love,
jeni

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 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017

Thanks for your kind encouragement, Jeni.

Joan

Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

Hi friend , so simple and straightforward, this writing ends having said what it sets out to do..you want him. Good language and very good flow.
Danny Jock

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 Comment Written 06-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017

Thanks for the kind comments and all the stars. I am glad you liked the flow. Meter seems to be one of my weak points.

Joan

Comment from DR DIP

Exceptional

Now THAT is a really good love poem Dragon Your rhyme scheme is perfect for this piece
Good luck in the love poem contest dragon. Thankyou for sharing

dip

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017

Thank you for the raves, dip. I am honored by the six star rating.The good luck wishes are much appreciated.

Joan