Legend of Timpanogos
Myth of the Mountain30 total reviews
Comment from winnona
A very well written contest entry. This poem has meant the contest challenge very well. The words flowed well line to line combining and telling the story for the reader. Good luck in the contest. Very well done.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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A very well written contest entry. This poem has meant the contest challenge very well. The words flowed well line to line combining and telling the story for the reader. Good luck in the contest. Very well done.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the good luck wishes and the encouraging comments about the poem.
Comment from marinadawn
I like your tales best of all the different legends but I had hope that they would have had a happy ending, I still like those live happily after endings, nice mountain scene
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I like your tales best of all the different legends but I had hope that they would have had a happy ending, I still like those live happily after endings, nice mountain scene
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you for your kind comments about the poem. I am pleased your liked it. I agree with you, I prefer the happy ending too.
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi, mystery author
I enjoyed reading your well-written poem, I love stories about legends and myths. You made it your own and turned it into a lovely story. Very sad what happened and you described it all so well in your poem. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Hi, mystery author
I enjoyed reading your well-written poem, I love stories about legends and myths. You made it your own and turned it into a lovely story. Very sad what happened and you described it all so well in your poem. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Hi Mary,
Thank you for the kind comments about the writing and the good luck wishes. Much appreciated.
Comment from closetpoetjester
Wow a complete and very tragic love story. She sounds like a virteous woman who gave her all for the man with the emerald eyes. An excellent read and although epic I managed to stay with it for the duration. Some lovely rhyming throughout and I can tell you have worked hard on this. Very well done and I DID like the ending in spite of her ultimate sacrifice. Informative notes too, although the poem DOES stand alone.
Cheers P
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Wow a complete and very tragic love story. She sounds like a virteous woman who gave her all for the man with the emerald eyes. An excellent read and although epic I managed to stay with it for the duration. Some lovely rhyming throughout and I can tell you have worked hard on this. Very well done and I DID like the ending in spite of her ultimate sacrifice. Informative notes too, although the poem DOES stand alone.
Cheers P
Comment Written 14-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Thank you for sticking with the story until the end. It was a long poem. and that can be off putting for many people. I am glad you enjoyed it and the sad ending. I appreciate you taking time to read and review.
Comment from nancyrabbrose
Your epic poem deserves all the stars I am able to give it. Well done. I used to live in Marin County, CA. There we have Mt. Tamalpais and there is an Indian maiden formation on the top of that mountain. I am happy to read your story. You did well to synthesize the many versions of the legend. Your poetry is First Class. Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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Your epic poem deserves all the stars I am able to give it. Well done. I used to live in Marin County, CA. There we have Mt. Tamalpais and there is an Indian maiden formation on the top of that mountain. I am happy to read your story. You did well to synthesize the many versions of the legend. Your poetry is First Class. Well done.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2017
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I appreciate the six star rating and for you taking the time to read this very long poem. I am happy to hear you found a connection in your local. Your comment about the poetry being "First Class" has me smiling. Your brightened my day on several levels. Thank you.
Comment from Quantum Traveler
The background color is well chosen for the Image Portrayed and enhances the coolness of the scene.
I find this writing to be excellent mix of the many tales of Mount Timpanogos.
An Outstanding Writing for a Poem of Length intertwining Legend and Nature.
Since I live nearby I take the opportunity to climb Mount Timpanogos yearly and connect with the Beauty of the waterfalls, alpine meadows and Aspen Groves.
Very Nicely Portrayed...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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The background color is well chosen for the Image Portrayed and enhances the coolness of the scene.
I find this writing to be excellent mix of the many tales of Mount Timpanogos.
An Outstanding Writing for a Poem of Length intertwining Legend and Nature.
Since I live nearby I take the opportunity to climb Mount Timpanogos yearly and connect with the Beauty of the waterfalls, alpine meadows and Aspen Groves.
Very Nicely Portrayed...Quantum Traveler...Phil.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Hi Phil,
After the contest I'll have to ask where you live. It must be in the area of the Mountain. Thank you for the excellent review. You made me smile. This is one of my favorite places.
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I'll be waiting...The Best to You On the Contest...Q.T...Phil.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This certainly meets the requirement of lengthy. You do manage to tell a complete and compelling story. I have to say I found myself distracted as the meter is all over the place so while it is an excellent story you tell - it loses much of the beauty it could have simply because it lacks fluidity. If it had lacked rhyme, it could have been considered free verse so the inconsistent meter would be considered minor when compared to the content. I wish you the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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This certainly meets the requirement of lengthy. You do manage to tell a complete and compelling story. I have to say I found myself distracted as the meter is all over the place so while it is an excellent story you tell - it loses much of the beauty it could have simply because it lacks fluidity. If it had lacked rhyme, it could have been considered free verse so the inconsistent meter would be considered minor when compared to the content. I wish you the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Yes, it is long. Lack of consistent meter was on purpose. I tried both iambic and trochaic meters and decided it sounded too sing song in both. Sorry it distracted you. Thank your for your kind comments about the content and the best wishes. It is appreciated.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A beautiful poem about star crossed lovers who loved each other as much as humans could do. In the end, the princess thought she had to die to save her people and leapt to her death. Her lover died of a broken heart. The mountain, lake and cave all bear evidence of this love and sacrifice.
Well done.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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A beautiful poem about star crossed lovers who loved each other as much as humans could do. In the end, the princess thought she had to die to save her people and leapt to her death. Her lover died of a broken heart. The mountain, lake and cave all bear evidence of this love and sacrifice.
Well done.
Best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Hi Rhonda,
Thank you for the analysis and gracious comments. I appreciate the good luck wishes as well.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, I gotta admit, when someone tells you to write a poem of "Great Length", you sure don't aim to disappoint, do ya?
Homer's Iliad ain't got nothin' on this as far as sheer girth goes.
You certainly rose to the challenge quite admirably as this epic excursion into Native American sacrificial practices and traditions pertaining to the Chief's lovely doomed daughter, Utahna, and her brooding brave, the ever-so-manly Red Hawk, comes crashing down Mount Timpanogosto a dramatic conclusion.
Exceptional, best of luck!
~Dean
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Well, I gotta admit, when someone tells you to write a poem of "Great Length", you sure don't aim to disappoint, do ya?
Homer's Iliad ain't got nothin' on this as far as sheer girth goes.
You certainly rose to the challenge quite admirably as this epic excursion into Native American sacrificial practices and traditions pertaining to the Chief's lovely doomed daughter, Utahna, and her brooding brave, the ever-so-manly Red Hawk, comes crashing down Mount Timpanogosto a dramatic conclusion.
Exceptional, best of luck!
~Dean
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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It is long, but it will never compare to the Illiad in scope or length. When I listened to the Illiad on tape it took a couple of weeks at an hour a day. I hope this doesn't feel that long.
Thank you for the good luck wishes and the great review full of kind comments. I am pleased you found it exceptional.
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I was only joking of course.
It's really a great poetic love story. I don't see anything being able to top it in the contest, at least not by what I've read thus far.
Best of luck.
~Dean :)
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I was teasing back. Thank you for the nice comments
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You're very welcome.
Comment from robina1978
Nice photo of a snowy mountain that complements your poem perfectly. I'd never heard of the legend, but you managed to write it with detail and rhyme. A boy and girl in love but they die. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Nice photo of a snowy mountain that complements your poem perfectly. I'd never heard of the legend, but you managed to write it with detail and rhyme. A boy and girl in love but they die. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2017
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Thank you for the good luck wishes and the kind comments. The picture is of Mount Timpanogos.
