Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "The Cycle"a place to gather my poetic forms
28 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
Hello Jeni,
It appears Luna is shining brightly
in this fun poem of magic and fairies
with excellent rhymes
Favorite line:
"This place is where beasts meet and greet,
they all play games and never cheat"
I like the meter of those two lines, too
Nicely done
RS
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Hello Jeni,
It appears Luna is shining brightly
in this fun poem of magic and fairies
with excellent rhymes
Favorite line:
"This place is where beasts meet and greet,
they all play games and never cheat"
I like the meter of those two lines, too
Nicely done
RS
Comment Written 23-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2016
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Thanks, RS for your complimentary review and pointing what you especially liked. I like beasts who never cheat!
I appreciate your continued attention to my work...Thanks to the moon and back!
Comment from Thomas Bowling
A very good poem. The moon plays an important part in our solar system. The moon controls many things, Tides moods even phycology to a degree.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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A very good poem. The moon plays an important part in our solar system. The moon controls many things, Tides moods even phycology to a degree.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2016
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Dear Thomas,
Yes, and being that I'm smack-dab in the middle of the Zodiac Sign, Cancer, I think of myself as a child of the moon. My alternate name is actually Moonchild. Thanks for your review on this one. I'm glad you liked it!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh, how wonderful you have made each part of the cycle. You given a positive lean to all of these phases, and all watched over by the moon.
I love the way you form your lines, each with an ease characteristic of a master!
Well done, my friend,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Oh, how wonderful you have made each part of the cycle. You given a positive lean to all of these phases, and all watched over by the moon.
I love the way you form your lines, each with an ease characteristic of a master!
Well done, my friend,
Rhonda
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Dear Rhonda,
I truly appreciate your kind review. Thanks for your attention to my work!
Comment from Pantygynt
Even without a set meter this flows along beautifully. The cycle of a whole day seen from the perspective of a child its rhyming couplets will delight your young readers I am sure. However, this is by no means all infantile stuff. A couple of internal rhymes, hig/sky and meet/greet, raise the intellectual level as does the excellent feminie rhyme animals/contitutional.
a cleverly constructed poem.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Even without a set meter this flows along beautifully. The cycle of a whole day seen from the perspective of a child its rhyming couplets will delight your young readers I am sure. However, this is by no means all infantile stuff. A couple of internal rhymes, hig/sky and meet/greet, raise the intellectual level as does the excellent feminie rhyme animals/contitutional.
a cleverly constructed poem.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Thanks so much for your kind review. I'm truly glad that you found this poem enjoyable. I'll meet up with you later, I'm sure.
Blessed be
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You might be interested to know I have been enrolled onto the FanStory Academic staff and will be shortly advertising my first class. This is likely to do with rhyme as Mountain Writer (Ray) is already strong on meter. There is nothing on rhyme at the moment.
You probably don't need this but I thought I'd let people know.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. The lines flow well from the one to the other. Your rhyming are excellent. Although not in a set meter it still has a rhythm.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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A very well-written poem. The lines flow well from the one to the other. Your rhyming are excellent. Although not in a set meter it still has a rhythm.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Dear Sanda,
Again, I thank you for your kind review. As usual, I appreciate your attention to my work!
Blessed be
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Everything that's said about living with in sync with the rhythm of nature - being in harmony with the earth, feeling the cycle of the seasons - happens to be true. Thanks for writing the wonderful piece.
Bill~
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Everything that's said about living with in sync with the rhythm of nature - being in harmony with the earth, feeling the cycle of the seasons - happens to be true. Thanks for writing the wonderful piece.
Bill~
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Bill, I'm in tune with the words of your review. I appreciate your attention to my work, and I thank YOU for reading and reviewing.
Blessed be
Comment from frierajac
It has a charm that reminds me of Beatrix Potter of English fame, which is a complement. "Fairies resume" may sound a bit autobiographical for what
ever inspires you
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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It has a charm that reminds me of Beatrix Potter of English fame, which is a complement. "Fairies resume" may sound a bit autobiographical for what
ever inspires you
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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I certainly do appreciate the compliment, and am happy that overall you enjoyed the poem. I'm honored to be compared to
Beatrix Potter.
Blessed be
Comment from William Ross
very good, great rhyming and rhythm has a good meter and flows and reads well. Nicely done in rhyming quatrains. Thanks for the share and have a great day
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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very good, great rhyming and rhythm has a good meter and flows and reads well. Nicely done in rhyming quatrains. Thanks for the share and have a great day
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Dear Bill,
I'm thrilled that you again enjoyed my work. Thanks for the detailed review. You have a great day as well!
Blessed be
Comment from sandy montgomery
Well done. Very well written. Lovely imagery. Good flow and rhythm. Natural and free flowing rhyme. Great art and color scheme. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Well done. Very well written. Lovely imagery. Good flow and rhythm. Natural and free flowing rhyme. Great art and color scheme. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Dear sandy,
I thank you for your warm review. I'm really happy that you enjoyed this poem..and for your continued attention to my work.
Blessed be
Comment from AnnaLinda
Hi Luna!
You surely are brightening up the sky around here.
I enjoyed reading your ode to the moon with its
nicely rhymed lines and fantasy filled lines.
Yet, you bring in the children that are learning
about a new star...interesting. I like your internal
rhyme and I could go for a vacation here:
"This place is where beasts meet and greet,
they all play games and never cheat. "
Linda
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Hi Luna!
You surely are brightening up the sky around here.
I enjoyed reading your ode to the moon with its
nicely rhymed lines and fantasy filled lines.
Yet, you bring in the children that are learning
about a new star...interesting. I like your internal
rhyme and I could go for a vacation here:
"This place is where beasts meet and greet,
they all play games and never cheat. "
Linda
Comment Written 21-Nov-2016
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2016
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Hi, Linda!
I appreciate the compliment in the first line of your review. I'm glad that you found the children learning about a new star interesting, and liked "they all play games and never cheat..." that is my favorite stanza of the poem.
Thanks again for the terrific review!
Blessed be
