Comment from The Death

Excellent

Hi johngie,

It seems that your poem is based on the artwork - and its absence, it would be hard to fully comprehend the meaning. However, when paired, it makes full sense. We all seek for instant relief during stressful times. Good luck!

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

Comment from Nika2016

Excellent

a rather strange photo...
that infers a tense
person ready to scream?
May I suggest..yoga?
Smile. I have had these days..yesterday in fact.
xxxxxxx

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

Comment from Bill O'Bier

Excellent

Tense situations surely produce mental and emotional strain, and after you've been in them "instant relaxation needed" will become your mantra. Your brief words are expressive and the choice of artwork is perfect. Thanks for sharing and good luck in this contest.

Wishing you all the best...
Bill~

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Johngie, some times you just have to let what ever is in there out...so scream...cry if it helps...let it all out...well done...and what a picture...xxoo Linda

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016

Thanks LInda

reply by l.raven on 20-Aug-2016

you are so very welcome...xxoo Linda

Comment from Heather Knight

Excellent

I like this poem, it made me laugh.
I particularly like the title and the combination of the picture and the words.
Take it easy! ;)

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

I suppose in a poem that short the title has to be part of the work. Would Fury
Take a deep breath
chill out
be a two-four-two?
I think I'll start a one syllable prompt.
Just kidding. Looks fine to me.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

Comment from Thomas Bowling

Excellent

I wish I could pop a bottle manx into that gaping mouth. This is what I felt like the day my car caught fire. A lot of people think my story, "Hell Found Me," is fiction. Now, you know the truth.

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

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reply by the author on 20-Aug-2016

Thank you

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hahaha.... I know the feeling. :)

Good entry for the 2/4/2 contest. Yours should do well.

Good syllable count
Good topic
Interesting presentation

Well done.
Gypsy

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

why not
go to bed then
and sleep?

Unfortunately FanStory does not believe that a 2-4-2 poem rates a 2-4-2 review, and demands that I write some more like asking whether you wrote your 2-4-2 because of the artwork or chose your artwork because of your 2-4-2?

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016

Comment from royowen

Excellent

An excellent entry in this 2/4/2 poetry contest, the artwork is a real complimentary adjuct to this qualifying entry, it's hard to win these, but you've got a good chance, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 20-Aug-2016