Astatula (Final Edition)
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Master of the Lanes"A young boy tries to turn his life around.Can he?
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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
Excellent to get some more backgroung information on thee one we all fell in love with.
Noproblems noted and an excellent piece of writing.
Nice to catch up
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Excellent to get some more backgroung information on thee one we all fell in love with.
Noproblems noted and an excellent piece of writing.
Nice to catch up
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Comment from Jim Lorson Sr
I love the name of Cody's sperm donor. You pick a good name and a great place for his dad to be. How dang bad was he at bowling? At his death, is this how Brock came to have Cody under his care.
A good story to read from start to end!
Well written Brett,,,,,,,,Jim
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I love the name of Cody's sperm donor. You pick a good name and a great place for his dad to be. How dang bad was he at bowling? At his death, is this how Brock came to have Cody under his care.
A good story to read from start to end!
Well written Brett,,,,,,,,Jim
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Comment from MTF1955
There';s my boy. I feel like a proud parent and my kid just won student of the year. I just love this kid. You do an amazing job portraying him. Mary
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There';s my boy. I feel like a proud parent and my kid just won student of the year. I just love this kid. You do an amazing job portraying him. Mary
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Comment from judiverse
Schroeder did a lot of damage to Cody. That's surely what makes him able to stand up to bad guys like the Assassin and Bee-Bo. He has a strong desire to survive, and has out of necessity developed the skills. This gives a good background about Cody, which leads us to understanding how he functions as he does. When you talk about Schroeder being fruit cake, you might want to avoid going on to talk about slices of pie missing. Maybe just say a couple of pieces missing. judi
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Schroeder did a lot of damage to Cody. That's surely what makes him able to stand up to bad guys like the Assassin and Bee-Bo. He has a strong desire to survive, and has out of necessity developed the skills. This gives a good background about Cody, which leads us to understanding how he functions as he does. When you talk about Schroeder being fruit cake, you might want to avoid going on to talk about slices of pie missing. Maybe just say a couple of pieces missing. judi
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You're very welcome. judi
Comment from misscookie
This young man had it rough before he was born
This chapter touched me very deeply for my youngest son life didn't start well.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
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This young man had it rough before he was born
This chapter touched me very deeply for my youngest son life didn't start well.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 06-Aug-2016
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Keep up the fine work.
Cookie
Comment from Sankey
Wow! Interesting look back. Always good to be filled in on the original history of Codey. No spags as far as I can tell. Keep up te good work and we look forward to some more.
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Wow! Interesting look back. Always good to be filled in on the original history of Codey. No spags as far as I can tell. Keep up te good work and we look forward to some more.
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Comment from jlsavell
Brett, once again you deliver a great story-line. You have manged to paint the picture of Cody's father and his horrific ways and Cody's reason for feeling. exceptional write.. jimi
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Brett, once again you deliver a great story-line. You have manged to paint the picture of Cody's father and his horrific ways and Cody's reason for feeling. exceptional write.. jimi
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Comment from create4christ
Awww...So that scum of the earth sperm donor was also an incestuous pervert? EVIL INCARNATE! Almost as bad as BeeBo.
Thank you for sharing. ..Penny
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Awww...So that scum of the earth sperm donor was also an incestuous pervert? EVIL INCARNATE! Almost as bad as BeeBo.
Thank you for sharing. ..Penny
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Comment Written 06-Aug-2016
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