Comment from krys123

Excellent

Wow Steve;
-indeed you gave my tongue twisting, tearing, tormenting, tumbling and thorough thirst for more. Definitely, being a sports fan, I loved your sports section and your section on politics was spot on and being appropriate for this time of year.
-This was not to you a bundle of time to figure out and do and I applaud you for that.
-It also reminded me of what Pres. Obama followed up on that was originally done by Bob Dylan in their songs. Definitely tongue twisting for sure.
-Thanks for sharing and I mean that a lot and have a good one and take care.
Alex

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016

Thanks, Alex. Someone else has made the connection to Bob Dylan too.

This started out as a fairly random list of rhyming phrases - the hardest part was marshalling them into some sort of organised context.

Steve

reply by krys123 on 02-Aug-2016

That is usually the hardest thing to do is organize them to complete the context thoroughly. You did a very good job and take care my friend. And you are so welcome Steve.
Alex

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

You turned the Sunday newspaper into a poem. This is a much better read than the paper. LOL Very creative and a very good job.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016

Thanks, Barbara.

This started out as a fairly random list of rhyming phrases - the hardest part was marshalling them into some sort of organised context.

Steve

Comment from rama devi

Exceptional

Wow, my friend, this is amazing to read aloud! What fabulous unusual rhymes and slant rhymes--all well timed in this rap-like fluid free verse flow of satirical commentary and memorable one-liners too as well as musically coherent alliteration (etc.). Intensely thought provoking and requiring many read-throughs to fully absorb (all worth it!).

This poem DELIVERS.
And Shivers~!


Favorite bits (in order of appearance):

where are the boundaries
frisson of friction
delayed execution
conclusion -- confusion
and:

devising dissension
commanding a question
with no explanation

and especially love the wit here:

Puzzles and Comics
defy economics
capering jester
insidious monster
invidious punster
or funster imperious
you cannot be serious




potent:
ignoring the history
father confessor
offender transgressor


Absolutely love this word play:
Lifestyle
(or strifestyle)
the makers and menders
and various vendors

Ha ha ha:
underwear optional
(future conditional)

Love the voicing in the arts one:

remarks on The Arts are
compelling depiction
of factual fiction
in separate session
of cinematography
not quite pornography
artsy meandering
gawking and gandering
past understanding
both take-off and landing
fostering posturing


AND THIS SATORI LIKE closing line to the stanza:
precision illusion


Impacting:

it's hardly surprising
pollution solution
gets hardly a mention
conditional fission
is missing explosion

GREAT rhyme pair:
Politics
fancy tricks


FUN BITING WIT:

cluster and banter
of Satan or Santa
advance or regression
the splintering faction
rendition redaction
to sphincter contraction
and gross purefaction

Did you mean: PUTREFACTION?

Missing a 't' - unsure...is that a typo or is that an intentional pun?

Apt closing note:

a whole new dimension
emotion in passing
digression digression
procession
the end

Thanks for this intelligent and highly entertaining (ironically) feast of word play and satire.
I like the premise of exploring all facets of the news~
Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016

Thanks, Rama. Your reviews always uncover things about my poems that I wasn't even fully aware of myself! Did I really do that? Wow! I'm smart!

Steve

reply by rama devi on 01-Aug-2016

You certainly are! :-))))

Comment from LisaD123

Exceptional

This is an outstanding poem. The playfulness makes this a delight to read and it is highly original and imaginative. A perfect accompaniment to the Sunday papers! Congratulations for such a talented piece.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016

Thanks, Lisa. The timing was just a coincidence!

Steve

Comment from humpwhistle

Exceptional

This reminds me of some Dylan's early songs. I swear he used to open
the newspaper and turn it into rhyming venom. In fact, Phil Ochs, an early Dylan apostle once recorded an album titled, All the News that's Fit to Sing.
What makes this different from the Dylan songs--his were longer.
I enjoyed reading it aloud. The feral cats on my stoop joined in on the chorus.
Great stuff.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016

Thanks, Lee. Yes, someone else mentioned Dylan. I guess there's no more topical write than what comes hot off the press, although I confess that the sounds were more important than the content - to start with, anyway.

Steve

reply by humpwhistle on 01-Aug-2016

Yeah, Steve, I get it. But Dylan somehow glommed on to the rapid-fire rhyming of -tion and -ing and -ection ending words. Just an observ(ation) --there's another one.

Truth is, yours makes more sense than his.

Comment from jpduck

Exceptional

Now, that IS a 'blinder' -- not for one moment a 'bungle or blunder'. And you're quite right; it has to be read aloud. I did. I think 'strifestyle' should replace 'lifestyle' in the dictionary at once.

Adrian

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016

Adrian, thanks for the lovely comments and the six stars. I appreciate it.

Steve

Comment from William Ross

Excellent

This is good what a tongue twister, you have all the world news rapped up in this fine piece, great use of many tongue twisting words. have a wonderful day

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016

Thanks, William!

Steve

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

Hahahahaha! G'day Steve. Wow, mate. I took your suggestion and read it out loud. The kids were all laughing and asked me to read it again, but I was out of breath! It reminds me of that old Billy Joel song, we didn't start the fire lol.

Great job, cobber. Very entertaining and creative.

Cheers Fez

This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2016

---

reply by the author on 01-Aug-2016

Thanks, Fez.

Good to see you around. How's life?

Steve