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Comment from Preston McWhorter
Hi, Treischel,
Congratulations that thy seed not vanish from this Earth. My best to Mother and Daughter. May Belle's life be always as light and gay as this poem. This is an excellent song celebrating the birth of a new life. The rhyme and meter are superb and the telling of the story from the mother's point of view excellent. "more precious than a cultured pearl" an excellent metaphor as is all of the figurative language.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Hi, Treischel,
Congratulations that thy seed not vanish from this Earth. My best to Mother and Daughter. May Belle's life be always as light and gay as this poem. This is an excellent song celebrating the birth of a new life. The rhyme and meter are superb and the telling of the story from the mother's point of view excellent. "more precious than a cultured pearl" an excellent metaphor as is all of the figurative language.
Your friend and colleague,
Preston
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank you very much Preston., for an outstanding review, and those precious words. I will be sure to pass your thoughts along.
Comment from patcelaw
Congratulations on the new great grand daughter. She is so prefect and I know she is going to be a blessing to the family. I will be getting a great grand daughter in late August or early September. I am excited. Blessings for a good day.
Copy this poem and give it to your grand daughter.
Across The Room
When you look across the room,
And see your daughter smile,
Why not stop everything,
Just to play with her a while?
For all too soon the years,
May take her to a distant place,
And many will be the days,
You'll long to see her face.
Don't let those precious years,
Slip by until she's grown,
To take some time to cherish her,
And make your love well known.
For as you strive to love her,
The way God wants you to,
You'll build such precious memories,
That she'll show her love to you.
© Patricia Lawrence
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Congratulations on the new great grand daughter. She is so prefect and I know she is going to be a blessing to the family. I will be getting a great grand daughter in late August or early September. I am excited. Blessings for a good day.
Copy this poem and give it to your grand daughter.
Across The Room
When you look across the room,
And see your daughter smile,
Why not stop everything,
Just to play with her a while?
For all too soon the years,
May take her to a distant place,
And many will be the days,
You'll long to see her face.
Don't let those precious years,
Slip by until she's grown,
To take some time to cherish her,
And make your love well known.
For as you strive to love her,
The way God wants you to,
You'll build such precious memories,
That she'll show her love to you.
© Patricia Lawrence
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank you Patricia, for a great review, and that wonderful poem. I will.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Belle is beautiful. I like your poem for her. It has a great rhythm. The rhyme is super.
I can tell you really love her, too.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Belle is beautiful. I like your poem for her. It has a great rhythm. The rhyme is super.
I can tell you really love her, too.
Good job and thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank you Jannypan. She is special.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Congratulations on now being a Great Grandpa:)
What a sweet little girl and a sweet name too.
Blessings to her and all.
Teresa
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Congratulations on now being a Great Grandpa:)
What a sweet little girl and a sweet name too.
Blessings to her and all.
Teresa
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank you so much Teresa.
Comment from WalkerMan
A beautiful double, inter-rhymed octogram for lovely baby Belle Rose, so delightfully pictured. What a joy! Centering of lines works well here, and the background fits the photo's colors with good contrast for the text. Superb.
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A beautiful double, inter-rhymed octogram for lovely baby Belle Rose, so delightfully pictured. What a joy! Centering of lines works well here, and the background fits the photo's colors with good contrast for the text. Superb.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank you Walkreman for the wonderful review, and those stars.
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You are welcome. You certainly earned the six with that one. I give out lots of fives to good work that I like. If such a piece is near-flawless technically and really moves me as well, then it gets a six (unless I have already used my quota for the week, as there is so much awesome talent here on FS). -- Mike
Comment from VaV-VOOM
That was just an awesome poem Treischel, Belle Rose is such a unique, and old fashion sounding name. She is just a charming little thing; you should be very proud, and what a gift of word you have given her. Someday she will share her poem with all that will read. Great Grandpa Treischel! Write On! VaV-VOOM!
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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That was just an awesome poem Treischel, Belle Rose is such a unique, and old fashion sounding name. She is just a charming little thing; you should be very proud, and what a gift of word you have given her. Someday she will share her poem with all that will read. Great Grandpa Treischel! Write On! VaV-VOOM!
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank you very much Vav-Voom. Wouldn't that great?
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Great poetry! VaV-VOOm!
Comment from AnnieDawn
A beautiful poem for a beautiful child. Is this the first? It does not really matter as they all are special in their own way. It is great that you can usher her birth in with such a wonderful tribute. She is going to love her name when she grows up as it is unique. Great job and congratulations.
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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A beautiful poem for a beautiful child. Is this the first? It does not really matter as they all are special in their own way. It is great that you can usher her birth in with such a wonderful tribute. She is going to love her name when she grows up as it is unique. Great job and congratulations.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank you so much AnnieDawn. She is my second Great-granddaughter.
Comment from Pantygynt
Congratulations Grandad! What a way to to start out in the world with an octogram for company composed by grandad. She can't fail. I bet that won't be the last poem composed in her honour. This is lovely.
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Congratulations Grandad! What a way to to start out in the world with an octogram for company composed by grandad. She can't fail. I bet that won't be the last poem composed in her honour. This is lovely.
Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank you Pantygynt. Most likely not. Great-granddad.
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Oops! Sorry, lost a generation somewhere.
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Lol
Comment from William Ross
congrats that makes you a great grandparent. good write on the new great grand daughter. congrats again. enjoy her. have a wonderful day
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reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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congrats that makes you a great grandparent. good write on the new great grand daughter. congrats again. enjoy her. have a wonderful day
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Comment Written 19-May-2016
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Thank you William.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
Aww! So cute. Congratulations Grand pa and Grand ma. My youngest grandchild is six and the changes for another not very soon. A great way to celebrate a new addition to the family circle.
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Aww! So cute. Congratulations Grand pa and Grand ma. My youngest grandchild is six and the changes for another not very soon. A great way to celebrate a new addition to the family circle.
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Comment Written 19-May-2016
reply by the author on 19-May-2016
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Thank youbSandra. Amazing how hey multiply.
