Christine's Poems
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Comment from Leineco
I love that you took the picture and saw that he was walking amongst the clouds!! What a unique detail to catch :-)
You took it from there in a most melancholy way, (thank goodness not
the night of. . .that would have been unbearable), walking us through
her memory, and WHY this rain made her see him in the clouds.
A very emotional write Chrissy - wonderful addition to the group write
portfolio :-)
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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I love that you took the picture and saw that he was walking amongst the clouds!! What a unique detail to catch :-)
You took it from there in a most melancholy way, (thank goodness not
the night of. . .that would have been unbearable), walking us through
her memory, and WHY this rain made her see him in the clouds.
A very emotional write Chrissy - wonderful addition to the group write
portfolio :-)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hi Leineco. Thank you so much for supplying this great image and I studied it for sometime before this came into my mind and then it just all transpired into my sad story. I am so pleased you liked it and I am looking forward to reading all the others as well. Many Cheers for your support od my work. Christine😃
Comment from I am Cat
Hello Christine,
A sad lament for a lost spouse, (thankfully this isn't a true story)
;)
well told,
I was glad to see it wasn't. ;)
I enjoyed (is that the correct word?) the poem
lol
only one correction:
And be with you in love(')s sweet melody.
I always enjoy reading you, Christine,
Cat
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hello Christine,
A sad lament for a lost spouse, (thankfully this isn't a true story)
;)
well told,
I was glad to see it wasn't. ;)
I enjoyed (is that the correct word?) the poem
lol
only one correction:
And be with you in love(')s sweet melody.
I always enjoy reading you, Christine,
Cat
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hi Cat, Thank you so much for your review as I know you are always very busy , but also very thoughful and I do appreciate your lovely comments and also for your advice. ( corrected this now) How much fun are these images to get out imaginations going. I thought free verse was the go here for me, and it made my story just flow out, As always Many Cheers have a great day. Christine x😀
Comment from Douglas Paul
A very creative response to the Challenge picture, Chrissy. I am glad you said in your notes that you made this up, you were so convincing I thought it was true. The rhyme and verse flow really well. You get my 6 for today
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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A very creative response to the Challenge picture, Chrissy. I am glad you said in your notes that you made this up, you were so convincing I thought it was true. The rhyme and verse flow really well. You get my 6 for today
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Ho Douglas, I am so happy to accept your six stars for this effort for this image and tried to do a bit of a different style to my usual rhyming pieces. I enjoyed this challenge and find these are a good way to stretch ones imagination. Many Many Thanks for you lovely support. Cheers Christine😃😃
Comment from kittykatnoel
A good story in a poem. I like the way you have created these characters and the setting. You create emotion, climatic moment, and ending in a nice smooth and flowing way.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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A good story in a poem. I like the way you have created these characters and the setting. You create emotion, climatic moment, and ending in a nice smooth and flowing way.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hi kittykatnoel, I thank you for your review and comments for my picture challenge for this image and subsequent story that just seemed to pour out once I started . I triedcto keep the meter tight despite the free verse style and have been pleased with the reactions. Cheers to you Christine😃
Comment from royowen
Christine, just for a minute, you had me going, such sadness conjured from a piece of art work, is truly amazing, I tend to be unimaginative when it comes to this musing! The interpretation is a clever one, the time spent on this is worthwhile, it's a really good reading of it. Well done, my friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Christine, just for a minute, you had me going, such sadness conjured from a piece of art work, is truly amazing, I tend to be unimaginative when it comes to this musing! The interpretation is a clever one, the time spent on this is worthwhile, it's a really good reading of it. Well done, my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hi Roy, Many thanks for reading and leaving a review, always good to get your perspective on my work. I enjoyed this challenge and thought I would try to something a bit different. I am pleased you thought it a good read. As always Cheers Christine😃
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Most welcome Christine,
Comment from ciliverde
A compelling tragic tale here Christine, about an accident that took the life of your husband - which I knew to be a fictional story based on an earlier conversation with you :)
I like the line "I see you walking in the clouds above" - that's a nice image that I think would comfort someone grieving.
Carol
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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A compelling tragic tale here Christine, about an accident that took the life of your husband - which I knew to be a fictional story based on an earlier conversation with you :)
I like the line "I see you walking in the clouds above" - that's a nice image that I think would comfort someone grieving.
Carol
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Hi Carol, Many thanks for your review and comments. The first line set the theme for my story which just unfolded with each Stanza, my imagination worked on this one. No my husband is all good , but I suppose this could be someones story. I do appreciate your great support for my work Cheers Christine 😃
Comment from frogbook
This is excellent, so poignant and sad. I was sure it was true, so right there is a sign of an excellent poet because it was so sincere you had me convinced. Liked the form and certainly was an original take with the superb ending especially.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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This is excellent, so poignant and sad. I was sure it was true, so right there is a sign of an excellent poet because it was so sincere you had me convinced. Liked the form and certainly was an original take with the superb ending especially.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2016
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Ho frogbook. I was pleased with your words and rating for my poem and thanks for thinking of me as an excellent poet, that was so nice. I wnjoyed writing this story and axsad one it turned out to be. I had no idea what I was going to do until I wrote my first line and then it all just came out. Thanks for reading this much appreciated, Cheers Christine😀
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
I enjoyed your challenge poem. The story you told flows smoothly. Good job on the presentation--the color scheme, the topic, the word choices, etc. All work together to create a memorable read. The black/white color scheme seems to set the tone for a sad story. Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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I enjoyed your challenge poem. The story you told flows smoothly. Good job on the presentation--the color scheme, the topic, the word choices, etc. All work together to create a memorable read. The black/white color scheme seems to set the tone for a sad story. Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Hi Jannypan, Many thanks for reading and reviewing my Challenge poem . I am glad it all seemed to work together and your lovely words are welcome. Cheers Christine😃
Comment from evilynne
That's a sad one and, yes, it is different (hopefully not a true tale). Your poem is a tale of love and heartbreak, well written and enjoyable. Evi
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That's a sad one and, yes, it is different (hopefully not a true tale). Your poem is a tale of love and heartbreak, well written and enjoyable. Evi
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Hi Evi, Many thanks for reading and reviewing this post . I thought I would do a sad one as he just seemed to be walking in the clouds ( no it is not a true tale) just my imagination. Glad you enjoyed it Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi, Christine
= Good aspect of this artwork of losing love to tragedy.
= So many super interpretations---fun challenge.
= Well composed and presented.
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* Cheers & Blessings *
Keep Smilin'... Jackie <> Jax (*<*)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Hi, Christine
= Good aspect of this artwork of losing love to tragedy.
= So many super interpretations---fun challenge.
= Well composed and presented.
<> Always use comma with direct address.
<> It could just be this way in the USA, but spelling would be: Mam/Ma'am
= I'm sorry(,) Mam (Ma'am)
*** I apologize for my late response ***
= Just edited/published a new book.
= Highlighted w/plugin to = amazon.com = on my profile page.
= Working on getting caught up on reviews/reviewing.
* Cheers & Blessings *
Keep Smilin'... Jackie <> Jax (*<*)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2016
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Hi Jackie, Many thanks for reading my post and thanks for the tips I will correct these now. Yes I wondered how do do Mam, it's not a term we use much in Australia, but it seemed to fit this poem. Congratulations on you book. I will try and have a read. I also apologise for my late post. and I look forward to catching up with the other poems also. Have a great day. Cheers Christine😃
