Comment from mvbrooks

Good

Good use of rhyme and using simpler words to attract children to your story.
Consider reading your poem aloud to catch the "cadence" and rhyme scheme--story would be stronger if the cadence was more consistent.

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 Comment Written 28-Jan-2016

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Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This is a delightful read. I enjoyed it very much. Very suitable for children and educational, too. Well presented... Great job!

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2016

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Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

How serendipitous--I just made myself a cup of green tea! I was intrigued by the title and enjoyed the threesome. Your picture selection and rhymes added to the joy. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2016

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Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Sweet picture and presentation with this adorable children's poem with a theme that I think a child would really enjoy.
Well done and good luck in the Children's poem contest.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2016

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Comment from William Ross

Excellent

Very nice and nicely written, cute, witty playful and fun. some good rhyme and great flow when read. Good luck and have a wonderful day.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2016

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Comment from Domino 2

Excellent

Thanks for entering, mystery writer.

This is a lovely simple tea-party tale for young kids, and you had me smiling a couple of times. Fun rhymes.

Good luck and best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2016

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Comment from Cheryl9359

Excellent

I really like your little poem. It is so cute, a bug tea party, how sweet for kids. Nice poem and good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2016

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Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

Cute little animated insects just what kids would love to read and identify themselves with. An amusing and funny tale. liberty justice

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2016

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Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed your poem for the contest. I believe children will really like it, too. Good job with the prompt. Your lines flow smoothly and do tell a cute story. I like the dialog. Good job and best wishes in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2016

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Comment from LanceHill

Excellent

This is an excellent entry. You have written a poem that can be enjoyed at multiple ages. Good luck with the contest. Have a great week. God bless.

 Comment Written 25-Jan-2016

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