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Comment from ravenblack
Cleaner than a bar of soap and just as good to talk to- makes perfect sense to me and made me laugh out loud. A holier-than-thou type who is all about green grass and how's the weather (as if he cares). Just curious - do you come up with the name and then write the poem ? Very witty poem.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2015
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Cleaner than a bar of soap and just as good to talk to- makes perfect sense to me and made me laugh out loud. A holier-than-thou type who is all about green grass and how's the weather (as if he cares). Just curious - do you come up with the name and then write the poem ? Very witty poem.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2015
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Thank you for the kind review. I have a list that I have made and use them as the inspiration hits.
Comment from LIJ Red
He sounds like a man with common sense, and a firm grip on his finances and little respect for the American Politically Correct emphasis on whining rather than doing the job right the first time. Gotchergoat for president.
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2015
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He sounds like a man with common sense, and a firm grip on his finances and little respect for the American Politically Correct emphasis on whining rather than doing the job right the first time. Gotchergoat for president.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2015
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He would definitely be a conservative choice. He may have trouble keeping staff from week to week, but while they're there he'll get our money's worth out of them.
Comment from Irish Goat
Bill, you ought to get all of these together in a single chapbook and publish them out as a series. What a wonderful cast of characters you have created. I particularly like the Gotchergoat, since we have the same last name. Well done
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Bill, you ought to get all of these together in a single chapbook and publish them out as a series. What a wonderful cast of characters you have created. I particularly like the Gotchergoat, since we have the same last name. Well done
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you, IG, for the great review. I'm hoping to publish a short story book and these will likely be included in a grouping. Bill
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Verrrry well done, Bill. Love how you describe this Scroogy guy. The hammer.. right. And to him, we're all nails. I knew a person like that once. DIdn't have to work for the jerk, but felt sorry for anyone who did. :)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Verrrry well done, Bill. Love how you describe this Scroogy guy. The hammer.. right. And to him, we're all nails. I knew a person like that once. DIdn't have to work for the jerk, but felt sorry for anyone who did. :)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Phyllis, for the super review. I have heard of this type as well. Bill
Comment from I am Cat
Hi Bill,
I had to chuckle at this... gotchergoat... Oh yes, I think i know this guy! ;)
He seems to show up just when i am feeling like i can't take one more thing... ;)
I loved, especially the last half:
Gotchergoat's the kind of chap
to have ghosts visit in a nap
show present, past, and future crap
in hopes to make him new.
(right? This guy is just not my best friend)
But these spirits won't prevail
without a profit margin... fail
'cause he's the hammer, not the nail
so, I guess, we're through.
(he's the hammer, not the nail... perfect! )
and yes, I suppose we ARE through! ;) gotchergoat, not us, Bill) ;)
Well done, I thought that was lots of fun!
C
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Hi Bill,
I had to chuckle at this... gotchergoat... Oh yes, I think i know this guy! ;)
He seems to show up just when i am feeling like i can't take one more thing... ;)
I loved, especially the last half:
Gotchergoat's the kind of chap
to have ghosts visit in a nap
show present, past, and future crap
in hopes to make him new.
(right? This guy is just not my best friend)
But these spirits won't prevail
without a profit margin... fail
'cause he's the hammer, not the nail
so, I guess, we're through.
(he's the hammer, not the nail... perfect! )
and yes, I suppose we ARE through! ;) gotchergoat, not us, Bill) ;)
Well done, I thought that was lots of fun!
C
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Cat, for your terrific review and for pointing out what worked well. Bill
Comment from krys123
Bill;
-One suggestion their Bill in your second verse third line and here's what I propose: "He'll prove to you not to earn your pay".
-also I suggest a solid rhythmic pattern which yours this variable and mixed. you have sometimes a line that's tetrameter or eight syllables per line and then you go on and have a nine syllable and then a six syllable or a seven syllable per line. This would just help the reading to flow smoother. You did have cadence, timing and tempo which was helpful in making your reading flow smoother.
-your rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore helping your rhythm the flow smoothly.
-I like your concept and again you make me laugh and I especially like the line when you say that he's the hammer not the nail. That's a very universal concept.
-thanks for sharing and posting Bill and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Bill;
-One suggestion their Bill in your second verse third line and here's what I propose: "He'll prove to you not to earn your pay".
-also I suggest a solid rhythmic pattern which yours this variable and mixed. you have sometimes a line that's tetrameter or eight syllables per line and then you go on and have a nine syllable and then a six syllable or a seven syllable per line. This would just help the reading to flow smoother. You did have cadence, timing and tempo which was helpful in making your reading flow smoother.
-your rhyming words were contingent to the meaning and concept of each line therefore helping your rhythm the flow smoothly.
-I like your concept and again you make me laugh and I especially like the line when you say that he's the hammer not the nail. That's a very universal concept.
-thanks for sharing and posting Bill and may the good Lord be with you always my friend.
Alex
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Alex, for your thorough and helpful review. Bill
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You are so very welcome Bill.
Alex
Comment from patcelaw
This is an interesting nonsense type of poem It was fun to read thought and the rhymes were clever. Blessing, Bill for a good evening, Patricia
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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This is an interesting nonsense type of poem It was fun to read thought and the rhymes were clever. Blessing, Bill for a good evening, Patricia
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Patricia, for your kind review. Bill
Comment from Tessa Kay
What a funny name, Gunga Dindin Gotchergoat. I kept pronouncing it to see if there was some hidden meaning in it, but I'm probably too tired to see it if it is there. Love the just as good to talk to than to a bar of soap.
Smiles all round. :)
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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What a funny name, Gunga Dindin Gotchergoat. I kept pronouncing it to see if there was some hidden meaning in it, but I'm probably too tired to see it if it is there. Love the just as good to talk to than to a bar of soap.
Smiles all round. :)
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Tessa, for your kind review. Bill
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello Bill :)
You always do a great job finging estrange and interesting words with wonderful consonance. Good presentation, easy to read. Well done!
Gypsy
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Hello Bill :)
You always do a great job finging estrange and interesting words with wonderful consonance. Good presentation, easy to read. Well done!
Gypsy
Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you, GBR, for the kind review. Bill
Comment from Neonewman
Bill, this is a masterfully crafted piece you have delivered my friend. I enjoyed this immensely and had to read it a couple of more times for my own viewing pleasure.
God bless!
Steve
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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Bill, this is a masterfully crafted piece you have delivered my friend. I enjoyed this immensely and had to read it a couple of more times for my own viewing pleasure.
God bless!
Steve
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Comment Written 19-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2015
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Thank you, Neo, for the generous review. Bill
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My pleasure!
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My pleasure!
