Act of Endurance
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Comment from Beverly Botelho
My only suggestion: I think you do disservice to this writing by categorizing it fantasy. To me that implies magic, faeries and talking trees. This is a deep contemplation that involves thoughts and images that would be lost on many readers of typical fantasy. It is well-written piece that would be best enjoyed by sober, mature individuals, Nice work!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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My only suggestion: I think you do disservice to this writing by categorizing it fantasy. To me that implies magic, faeries and talking trees. This is a deep contemplation that involves thoughts and images that would be lost on many readers of typical fantasy. It is well-written piece that would be best enjoyed by sober, mature individuals, Nice work!
Comment Written 28-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2016
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I appreciate your thought, struggling with writes: pits. You found one. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements.
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You're welcome. Bev.
Comment from Phoenix Rysing
I enjoyed this piece very much, but didn't really agree with the picture that accompanies it. It looks like pizza to be honest! The piece is great, just the picture is a bit distracting.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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I enjoyed this piece very much, but didn't really agree with the picture that accompanies it. It looks like pizza to be honest! The piece is great, just the picture is a bit distracting.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Not much of a painter, as for picture selection the feel of uncertainty was aim to be captured. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from JanPerry
Very neat and well set out. You have consistency here in all forms.
Great and well done.
I enjoy all your thoughts and all your descriptions are put together very well.
Very powerful descriptions here.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Very neat and well set out. You have consistency here in all forms.
Great and well done.
I enjoy all your thoughts and all your descriptions are put together very well.
Very powerful descriptions here.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2016
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2016
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Glad this write was inspiring and pleasing: go get them. Do it right: go beyond. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from DarriaStevens82
I like that each verse of your prose is structured in a way that makes it easier to read and easier to follow. I was thinking that the title made me thinking marriage but then the poem made me think of things you do. I'm not sure. I don't read a lot of poetry so I have no point of reference. I was a lost a few places where I had to read the verse again. I'm a songwriter so...I'm always looking for literal meanings in a line.
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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I like that each verse of your prose is structured in a way that makes it easier to read and easier to follow. I was thinking that the title made me thinking marriage but then the poem made me think of things you do. I'm not sure. I don't read a lot of poetry so I have no point of reference. I was a lost a few places where I had to read the verse again. I'm a songwriter so...I'm always looking for literal meanings in a line.
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Comment Written 24-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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My writes have their flaws, I seek in their conveyance a story to entertain the reader: why I'm at FS to communicate. Thanking you for your generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from Neonewman
I enjoyed this well crafted piece you have delivered my friend. I know this is prose but it has an authentic, somewhat poetic flow to it. Not a bad thing at all. Interesting way about it is all.
God bless
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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I enjoyed this well crafted piece you have delivered my friend. I know this is prose but it has an authentic, somewhat poetic flow to it. Not a bad thing at all. Interesting way about it is all.
God bless
Steve
Comment Written 24-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2016
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Glad this work was a pleasing read to you. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements about this write.
Comment from Ricky1024
I did was gushing forth with drainage active content semen imagery I thoroughly enjoyed this piece by 2pac well written on a scale of 1 to 100 would give it an even 100 thanks for dish 24oI do
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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I did was gushing forth with drainage active content semen imagery I thoroughly enjoyed this piece by 2pac well written on a scale of 1 to 100 would give it an even 100 thanks for dish 24oI do
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Wow. Neat way to commune, I like the grasp, appealing in my view. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is an interesting style you have chosen to present your piece in. It feels prose but still maintains some poetic devices to root it in that corner as well. It is effective. There is a duality of expression here both within form and content, life as war, art as war too.
thought provoking and interesting
GMG
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Hi there,
This is an interesting style you have chosen to present your piece in. It feels prose but still maintains some poetic devices to root it in that corner as well. It is effective. There is a duality of expression here both within form and content, life as war, art as war too.
thought provoking and interesting
GMG
Comment Written 15-Feb-2016
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2016
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Thank you not sure I have a style: why I came to FS. Still I love these stories in notes. Glad aspects.were.found pleasing to you. Tjanking you for your warming thoughts.
Comment from foxangie123
Love the picture and poem. It is great-both so they are. Any who this is truly a masterpiece in my eyes. Your writing takes one on a journey of applications to real life with your pen, words, and lines. Awesome.
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Love the picture and poem. It is great-both so they are. Any who this is truly a masterpiece in my eyes. Your writing takes one on a journey of applications to real life with your pen, words, and lines. Awesome.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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I try to make a connection, waiting to take the reader on a mind tour, lacking proper presentation for smooth traveling of my write course. Thanking you for generous rate and inspiring comments about this read.
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Welcome.
Comment from Joyce Long
"Life is war welcome to my battlefield" seems to be the theme of your poem for My First Win! I am still wondering what your first win was. Your words seem to be in a battle of their own. Good luck in the contest. I don't believe Life is War. If it is then I am in the peacetime between the wars. There are ups and downs, but the good Lord helps me through it all. Keep writing.
Joyce 01-28-16
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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"Life is war welcome to my battlefield" seems to be the theme of your poem for My First Win! I am still wondering what your first win was. Your words seem to be in a battle of their own. Good luck in the contest. I don't believe Life is War. If it is then I am in the peacetime between the wars. There are ups and downs, but the good Lord helps me through it all. Keep writing.
Joyce 01-28-16
Comment Written 28-Jan-2016
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2016
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Yeah. Maybe extreme on my behalf, yet I enjoyed the avenues of potentials for this write. Forget winning a contest, talent here is a great challenge: best to get pits out my write. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating conveyances.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is an excellent write, tpac, great imagery presented in this prose poem about the creativity that was nourished in life's accomplishments and failures, the growth that came about from each. normally your writes are too philosophical for me to read, but this one was easy to comprehend. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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this is an excellent write, tpac, great imagery presented in this prose poem about the creativity that was nourished in life's accomplishments and failures, the growth that came about from each. normally your writes are too philosophical for me to read, but this one was easy to comprehend. I wish you the best of luck in the contest
Comment Written 29-Nov-2015
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2015
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Contest failure past tense, all my works under revisions learning how to's about writing. Try them again and see. Thanking you for generous rate and touching statements disclosing my works.
