Faerie Lights
Pantoum Sonnet33 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, debi. I wouldn't know a Pantoum from a pushbroom, but I know this is good poetry and I liked it very much:
"Amazing and exquisite, they entrance.
You'd best be heeding all your darkest fears."
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi, debi. I wouldn't know a Pantoum from a pushbroom, but I know this is good poetry and I liked it very much:
"Amazing and exquisite, they entrance.
You'd best be heeding all your darkest fears."
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi Bob,
Thank you for the great review and encroachment.
Debi
Comment from Amy Greta
Wow, excellent and very creative sonnet. I like how the first three lines create such a beautiful and magical setting, and then BAM the fourth line gives the reader doubt and curiosity.
Your poem is very engaging, as I kept wanting to read the next line for clues about the wicked trap. Clever to add Rip van Winkle!
I really enjoyed your poem!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Wow, excellent and very creative sonnet. I like how the first three lines create such a beautiful and magical setting, and then BAM the fourth line gives the reader doubt and curiosity.
Your poem is very engaging, as I kept wanting to read the next line for clues about the wicked trap. Clever to add Rip van Winkle!
I really enjoyed your poem!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for very kind comments, Amy Greta. I am so happy you enjoyed it and grateful that you mentioned the things that you liked so I know what worked. I appreciate the encouragement!
Comment from Eric1
Hi w j debi, This is a beautifully written pantoum sonnet, you have written it perfectly with a beautiful rhythm and flow, the only thing I can't understand is why no one has given it a six! Well I will remedy that my friend.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Hi w j debi, This is a beautifully written pantoum sonnet, you have written it perfectly with a beautiful rhythm and flow, the only thing I can't understand is why no one has given it a six! Well I will remedy that my friend.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the generous six stars, Eric! I had several, "this deserves a six, but I'm out" statements. I guess that is what I get when for posting late on Friday night.
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You are very welcome my friend
Comment from Nosha17
You have captured the essence of the faerie magic well with you choice of words and excellent rhyme. The repetition helps to augment the magic. Most enjoyable Faye
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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You have captured the essence of the faerie magic well with you choice of words and excellent rhyme. The repetition helps to augment the magic. Most enjoyable Faye
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the great review, Faye. I appreciate the comment about the repetition augmenting the magic. Debi
Comment from BeasPeas
Debi--this is gorgeous in content, form and presentation. I'm impressed by your skill and the beauty of this poem. You deserve six stars, but I only have five to give. This is a WOW! Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Debi--this is gorgeous in content, form and presentation. I'm impressed by your skill and the beauty of this poem. You deserve six stars, but I only have five to give. This is a WOW! Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the virtual sixer, Marilyn. Also, for the very nice comments. "Gorgeous" and "This is a WOW!" are most encouraging. Debi
Comment from Clover77
You have truly written a beautiful sonnet my dear friend. It was wonderfully worded, and I enjoyed reading it the entire time. Well done
~Julia
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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You have truly written a beautiful sonnet my dear friend. It was wonderfully worded, and I enjoyed reading it the entire time. Well done
~Julia
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review, Julia. I am pleased you enjoyed reading this sonnet. Debi
Comment from Raoul D'Harmental
Hi w.j.debi,
This is a well-penned pantoum which I am glad you have shared with us. Your rhymes and meter are excellent too and the artwork complements the subject well. I wish you more grease to your capable elbow! R
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Hi w.j.debi,
This is a well-penned pantoum which I am glad you have shared with us. Your rhymes and meter are excellent too and the artwork complements the subject well. I wish you more grease to your capable elbow! R
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I appreciate the kind comments about the writing. I love the comment about the grease and the elbow! Thank you. Debi
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Debi,
This starts out as a magical delight. Who doesn't like fairy lights. But then it takes a dark turn. Perhaps it's a commentary on how we shouldn't take things at face value.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Hi Debi,
This starts out as a magical delight. Who doesn't like fairy lights. But then it takes a dark turn. Perhaps it's a commentary on how we shouldn't take things at face value.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Hi Lou,
Thank you for a great review . I appreciate your fun comments about the theme. Watch out for those faeries. You never know what tricks they are up to.
Debi
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hi W.J. Debi. Faerie lights is an enjoyable read. Wish the picture was a bit more brighter. Of course, the dimness could make the reader a bit more entranced by pondering what lights might they be. I found it interesting you included Rip Van Winkle in your poem. I'm not exactly sure why, but I'm guessing that he too was beguiled by the lights that he was hypnotized to asleep for a long time.
As for your poem. The only suggestion I can offer is on the second line "adore." This word doesn't seem to be the right one at least to me. Anyways, take care and great job. Cheers.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Hi W.J. Debi. Faerie lights is an enjoyable read. Wish the picture was a bit more brighter. Of course, the dimness could make the reader a bit more entranced by pondering what lights might they be. I found it interesting you included Rip Van Winkle in your poem. I'm not exactly sure why, but I'm guessing that he too was beguiled by the lights that he was hypnotized to asleep for a long time.
As for your poem. The only suggestion I can offer is on the second line "adore." This word doesn't seem to be the right one at least to me. Anyways, take care and great job. Cheers.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the gracious comments and excellent review. I included Rip Van Winkle since he was lured into the woods by a short man with a long beard. At the end of the story someone says that the old men on the mountain were ghosts, but their description always made me think they were dwarves or gnomes or some other creature from the fae. At any rate, they tricked him like the faerie folk are known to do and he slept 20 years of his life away. Thank you again for the great review.
Comment from tfawcus
I love the teasing "aren't they?"
This is such an assured pantoum sonnet it near took my breath away. Such a lightness of touch, such artful concealment of the repetition with your deft shifts in meaning, beguiling as the sprites themselves.
I clutched desperately into the night to snatch six stars from them but one, alas, eluded me. Saturday again. Doubtless the Saturnalia at work.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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I love the teasing "aren't they?"
This is such an assured pantoum sonnet it near took my breath away. Such a lightness of touch, such artful concealment of the repetition with your deft shifts in meaning, beguiling as the sprites themselves.
I clutched desperately into the night to snatch six stars from them but one, alas, eluded me. Saturday again. Doubtless the Saturnalia at work.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2015
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Wow! Your comments are even better than that elusive six you couldn't quite catch. I am honored!
Yes, do watch out for the Faeries. At a Saturnalina? I hadn't considered that, but I'll bet their faerie festivities are just as wanton as those ancient Romans. How many days was that? I think at least a week.
