Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "I May Never Tell You"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
28 total reviews
Comment from dmt1967
The picture is really cute and the poem is something most people can relate to. I felt the poets pain and anger. It was full of emotion and very well written. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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The picture is really cute and the poem is something most people can relate to. I felt the poets pain and anger. It was full of emotion and very well written. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2015
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Thank you for your comments and support. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, I thought the puppy was so cute. That was why he made it into my little poem. Appreciate it indeed.
Comment from DR DIP
What a great effort Brett that is really nice you have some beautiful lines here for sure
just a few things and I am certainly not an anal poet grammar Nazi by any stretch of the imagination
Go on back to the memory
You can't get off your mind
Tangles sheets tell the story
Of the love you'll never find
Go on back to the memory
You can't get off your mind
Tangled sheets tell the story
Of the love you'll never find
No, I may never tell you
'bout these tears that I cried
But that don't mean I don't love you
Somewhere deep inside
reads better as
No, I may never tell you
'bout these tears I've cried
But that don't mean I don't love you
Somewhere deep inside
great poem just a suggestion
with respect dip
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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What a great effort Brett that is really nice you have some beautiful lines here for sure
just a few things and I am certainly not an anal poet grammar Nazi by any stretch of the imagination
Go on back to the memory
You can't get off your mind
Tangles sheets tell the story
Of the love you'll never find
Go on back to the memory
You can't get off your mind
Tangled sheets tell the story
Of the love you'll never find
No, I may never tell you
'bout these tears that I cried
But that don't mean I don't love you
Somewhere deep inside
reads better as
No, I may never tell you
'bout these tears I've cried
But that don't mean I don't love you
Somewhere deep inside
great poem just a suggestion
with respect dip
Comment Written 23-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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Thanks for your comments. Appreciate them very much.
Comment from hannahorion
Free verse: Title:I May Never Tell You. Presentation Quatrains, left justified. Theme: A tale of unrequited love". The title is relevant to the theme: Comments: The meter and ABCB (unbounded) rhyme scheme make this poem easy to read and recite while the plain colloquial language facilitate comprehension and understanding. This is a ballad quatrain. Metaphors such as "I could give you tomorrow Like a thousand yesterdays" ad color and feel to the verses. The repetition of the first verse as the last verse adds to the pathos of the lament by portraying the struggle of having a presence in the room of a more positive nature. I thought this poem reached out to the reader ina way as to express a feeling of being helpless in a situation that cant be changed. I gave it five stars.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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Free verse: Title:I May Never Tell You. Presentation Quatrains, left justified. Theme: A tale of unrequited love". The title is relevant to the theme: Comments: The meter and ABCB (unbounded) rhyme scheme make this poem easy to read and recite while the plain colloquial language facilitate comprehension and understanding. This is a ballad quatrain. Metaphors such as "I could give you tomorrow Like a thousand yesterdays" ad color and feel to the verses. The repetition of the first verse as the last verse adds to the pathos of the lament by portraying the struggle of having a presence in the room of a more positive nature. I thought this poem reached out to the reader ina way as to express a feeling of being helpless in a situation that cant be changed. I gave it five stars.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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Thank you very much for this complimentary review. Really do appreciate your comments and support indeed. Glad you enjoyed it.
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Comment from ann marie mazz
hello
I am honored to have read your entry
for this entry is poetry in true fashion
one of the elements of poetry is emotion
and yes
you truly have met that factor along with others
this entry is wonderful in its entirety
may all know of love even for a moment
thank you for sharing your poetic talent
this is one entry to be read out load with emphasis
ann marie
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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hello
I am honored to have read your entry
for this entry is poetry in true fashion
one of the elements of poetry is emotion
and yes
you truly have met that factor along with others
this entry is wonderful in its entirety
may all know of love even for a moment
thank you for sharing your poetic talent
this is one entry to be read out load with emphasis
ann marie
Comment Written 01-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much indeed.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Here comes heartache number 9. This is well written in the country genre. I was thinking that some of the lines needed a bit of change with subject/verb, however after rereading it, I can see that it fits the genre. Therefore no changes needed.
Good job expressing the sentiments of the love lost that one does not want/wish to let go.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Here comes heartache number 9. This is well written in the country genre. I was thinking that some of the lines needed a bit of change with subject/verb, however after rereading it, I can see that it fits the genre. Therefore no changes needed.
Good job expressing the sentiments of the love lost that one does not want/wish to let go.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Appreciate your comments indeed.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I like your poem about love lost. It would make a good country song lyrics. It is sad, melancholic and it makes me think of someone I lost a while back. Good job!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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I like your poem about love lost. It would make a good country song lyrics. It is sad, melancholic and it makes me think of someone I lost a while back. Good job!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support.
Comment from GE Parson
Bret those lyrics are the negative kind of the old country music of the 40's & 50's
I would listen to Marty Robins get shot chasing after a Mexican lover, Dolly Parton sleeping single in a double bed,
and Hank Snow moaning about Honky Tonk Angels, some man who got married last Saturday night but was soon split up, and Johnny Cash killing some poor soul "just to see him die"
ands the Everly Brothers "Moon and stars no longer shining" because they lost their girl friend, and every so often but not very often the DJ would through in the story of Johnny Cash building a Caddy one piece at a time than back to
some poor oil farmer man whose wife done left him right at harvest time..... after listening to all that negative music all day long,I had those blues that Hank Snow warbled about.
That's why I wrote some good Gospel words to the country tunes.
All this said your poem had good rythem and flowed real good.
Your Friend, Jerry
PS Going to send you a few of my Gospel lyrics.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Bret those lyrics are the negative kind of the old country music of the 40's & 50's
I would listen to Marty Robins get shot chasing after a Mexican lover, Dolly Parton sleeping single in a double bed,
and Hank Snow moaning about Honky Tonk Angels, some man who got married last Saturday night but was soon split up, and Johnny Cash killing some poor soul "just to see him die"
ands the Everly Brothers "Moon and stars no longer shining" because they lost their girl friend, and every so often but not very often the DJ would through in the story of Johnny Cash building a Caddy one piece at a time than back to
some poor oil farmer man whose wife done left him right at harvest time..... after listening to all that negative music all day long,I had those blues that Hank Snow warbled about.
That's why I wrote some good Gospel words to the country tunes.
All this said your poem had good rythem and flowed real good.
Your Friend, Jerry
PS Going to send you a few of my Gospel lyrics.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015
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Nothing better, musically speaking, than a good Country song. Thanks for your comments and support.
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem captures a feeling that is widespread, with so many blended families. Moving on with powerful memories that, at times , hinder forward progress is not uncommon. Nice poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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This poem captures a feeling that is widespread, with so many blended families. Moving on with powerful memories that, at times , hinder forward progress is not uncommon. Nice poem.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Really appreciate them very much indeed.
Comment from MelB
This free style tells a sad story of one who is in love with someone who is in love with someone else. I can't imagine the person feels like they can ever measure up to the one who holds the heart of the loved one, even if it is a memory.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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This free style tells a sad story of one who is in love with someone who is in love with someone else. I can't imagine the person feels like they can ever measure up to the one who holds the heart of the loved one, even if it is a memory.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Always appreciate them very much.
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You're welcome:)
Comment from Chrissy710
A good poem Brett of a lost love it rhymed well and the words portrayed the story. I liked the sentiment. My only question is and I assume you are writing from a woman's perspective about her man thinking about his lost love. If so your language is quite masculine and not as feminine . I though it was about a man not having his woman's love. But you use the word she's in the bedroom in your 1st stanza so I assume it is from a woman's view. Interesting word choice if that's the case. However I did like it never the less. Cheers Christine
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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A good poem Brett of a lost love it rhymed well and the words portrayed the story. I liked the sentiment. My only question is and I assume you are writing from a woman's perspective about her man thinking about his lost love. If so your language is quite masculine and not as feminine . I though it was about a man not having his woman's love. But you use the word she's in the bedroom in your 1st stanza so I assume it is from a woman's view. Interesting word choice if that's the case. However I did like it never the less. Cheers Christine
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support as always.
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Your welcome
