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Comment from Maritza M. Mejia
This simple a-a-b-b rhymed Quatrains in 7-8 meter long is the clear description of the image. Perfect Quatrains.
Good visual, flow, rhyme and style.
I love it!
Regard,
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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This simple a-a-b-b rhymed Quatrains in 7-8 meter long is the clear description of the image. Perfect Quatrains.
Good visual, flow, rhyme and style.
I love it!
Regard,
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Thank you so much Maritza
Comment from Selina Stambi
'Cause I never thought I'd be
On pins and needles in a tree. ... who would have thought it??
Nice work with surprisin'/ horizons, Tom!
Sonali
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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'Cause I never thought I'd be
On pins and needles in a tree. ... who would have thought it??
Nice work with surprisin'/ horizons, Tom!
Sonali
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you Sonali. Those pins and needles may also be why he's "stuck".
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Great photo that adds to your poem.
-The poem flows well with your story and the rhyme pattern.
-I like the last line of the first stanza; the reader can almost feel the "pins and needles".
-The second stanza is good and gets across how your grandson must be feeling.
-In this line: "Yet, here I'm in the branches" I would think about using 'I am" as it would give you the eight syllables you have in this stanza.
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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-Great photo that adds to your poem.
-The poem flows well with your story and the rhyme pattern.
-I like the last line of the first stanza; the reader can almost feel the "pins and needles".
-The second stanza is good and gets across how your grandson must be feeling.
-In this line: "Yet, here I'm in the branches" I would think about using 'I am" as it would give you the eight syllables you have in this stanza.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you respa, My meter goes 7-8-7-8 7-8-78. That is intentional, gives it a bit of bounce.
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You are welcome for the review.
Comment from al1801
Well done on a nice, pleasant little AABB - yup! I checked. Great imagery and congrats on the pic, I guess you got down okay.
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reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Well done on a nice, pleasant little AABB - yup! I checked. Great imagery and congrats on the pic, I guess you got down okay.
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Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you al1801.
Comment from patcelaw
I enjoyed the poem and the photo. Nice work.
Looks as though he is quite a climber to be that far up the tree. I have a grand daughter who loved climbing my weeping willow when she was younger. I myself loved climbing trees when I was young. Patricia
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I enjoyed the poem and the photo. Nice work.
Looks as though he is quite a climber to be that far up the tree. I have a grand daughter who loved climbing my weeping willow when she was younger. I myself loved climbing trees when I was young. Patricia
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Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 05-May-2015
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Thank you Patricia. I loved to climb trees too when I fat young.
