Tell me a tale
Rhyming couplets39 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
BEARING ONES SOUL IS SOMETIMES ROUGH ESPECIALLY WHEN YOU KEEP US IN AWE BY NOT TELLING US THE GOOD STUFF AND USE A PLOY INSTEAD TO AMUSE US
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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BEARING ONES SOUL IS SOMETIMES ROUGH ESPECIALLY WHEN YOU KEEP US IN AWE BY NOT TELLING US THE GOOD STUFF AND USE A PLOY INSTEAD TO AMUSE US
Comment Written 01-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Thanks for reviewing this work of fiction. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from MelB
Nice rhyme and smooth flow throughout. I think someone has someone else wrapped around their finger. Good use of alliteration.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Nice rhyme and smooth flow throughout. I think someone has someone else wrapped around their finger. Good use of alliteration.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Thanks for reviewing this work of fiction, Mel. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from LIJ Red
Tetris. A game I loved. Tetrameter is okay too. Conversing with one's muse is okay as long as it doesn't become a habit. All of which makes my review save.
The poem is quite excellent.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Tetris. A game I loved. Tetrameter is okay too. Conversing with one's muse is okay as long as it doesn't become a habit. All of which makes my review save.
The poem is quite excellent.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Thank you, LIJR.
Comment from artemis53
What a great piece of a tumultuous love affair that you are enjoying while it is going on.. What a surge of memories this brings back within a certain time.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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What a great piece of a tumultuous love affair that you are enjoying while it is going on.. What a surge of memories this brings back within a certain time.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Thanks for reviewing this work of fiction, Artemis. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from RGstar
Good write, Tony. It sounds as though one is willing to except much, even being stringed along for the the love and togetherness depicted.
Good portrayal of attraction...could even be infatuation.
Good write.
RG
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Good write, Tony. It sounds as though one is willing to except much, even being stringed along for the the love and togetherness depicted.
Good portrayal of attraction...could even be infatuation.
Good write.
RG
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Thanks for reviewing this work of fiction, RG. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from emrpoems
Here is my heart. Quicken the beat.
Capture my ears with your deceit.
These lines set the pace for the entire poem.
Beautiful upbeat rhythm
good use of rhymed couplets
Nice bits of alliteration and a well penned poem
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Here is my heart. Quicken the beat.
Capture my ears with your deceit.
These lines set the pace for the entire poem.
Beautiful upbeat rhythm
good use of rhymed couplets
Nice bits of alliteration and a well penned poem
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Many thanks, EMR. This was an experiment in trochaic meter - a rhythm that I haven't attempted before. I very much appreciate your review. Most affirming! Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Andrewajgblue
I really enjoyed this poem, I really loved the rhythm, and the ryhme was excellent, I liked that it was rhyming couplets, I think it helped the natural quick beat immensely, great writing
Andrew
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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I really enjoyed this poem, I really loved the rhythm, and the ryhme was excellent, I liked that it was rhyming couplets, I think it helped the natural quick beat immensely, great writing
Andrew
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Many thanks, Andrew, for your kind words and for the six stars. Your review, as always, is much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from krys123
Tony; Magnificently Arranged and Composed
+ Picture totally outstanding and very much represents and is reflective and appropriate as well as complementary to the poem. Effectively chosen.
+ Enjambment is used where does the running on of a thought, idea and concept one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Imagery metaphorical at times and throughout is very clear and distinct and quite exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively expressive: "Read me a dance. Hang disbelief. You are my time. Time is my thief. Sharpen my pen. Cut to the chase. This is my life. You are my pace." His relative and meaningful life is so much directed by love and her influence that she respectfully influences his life like a mirror would reflect his soul.
+ Rhyming is done very well in each rhyming word is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line and this is important because it is helpful in the rhythmic flow of the poem.
+ Rhythmic meter (iambic tetrameter), cadence, timing, tempo and movement all are helpful in making the reading smooth, clear an very easy.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting Tony this magnificent poem that I enjoyed very much and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Tony; Magnificently Arranged and Composed
+ Picture totally outstanding and very much represents and is reflective and appropriate as well as complementary to the poem. Effectively chosen.
+ Enjambment is used where does the running on of a thought, idea and concept one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Imagery metaphorical at times and throughout is very clear and distinct and quite exquisitely expressive and vividly and demonstratively expressive: "Read me a dance. Hang disbelief. You are my time. Time is my thief. Sharpen my pen. Cut to the chase. This is my life. You are my pace." His relative and meaningful life is so much directed by love and her influence that she respectfully influences his life like a mirror would reflect his soul.
+ Rhyming is done very well in each rhyming word is contingent to the meaning and concept of each line and this is important because it is helpful in the rhythmic flow of the poem.
+ Rhythmic meter (iambic tetrameter), cadence, timing, tempo and movement all are helpful in making the reading smooth, clear an very easy.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting Tony this magnificent poem that I enjoyed very much and may the good Lord be with you always.
Alex
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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What a wonderful review, Alex. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and respond so thoroughly. Thank you, also, for the six stars. May the Lord be with you, too. Best wishes, Tony.
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You are so sincerely welcome Tony. Not to be forcible but I wonder how you would do writing a poem about Spain again. I enjoyed some of the other ones.
Alex
Comment from daeneam
I love this figurative rhyming couplets. It is as if I am reciting it to my husband. Thank you for sharing, Sir. I hope we will have a very meaningful Lenten season. God bless us. c", Mae
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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I love this figurative rhyming couplets. It is as if I am reciting it to my husband. Thank you for sharing, Sir. I hope we will have a very meaningful Lenten season. God bless us. c", Mae
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Thank you so much, Mae, for your lovely review and for the six stars. Very much appreciated. Thank you, too, for your Lenten wishes. Kind regards, Tony.
Comment from Glasstruth
Your muse, again has the magic. Sounds very lyrical, has a wonderful rhythm, and deceit sounds so good reading this. Very playful. Like the metaphor in "Massage my words," has a sexual tone. Reads smoothly. Well done. Les
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Your muse, again has the magic. Sounds very lyrical, has a wonderful rhythm, and deceit sounds so good reading this. Very playful. Like the metaphor in "Massage my words," has a sexual tone. Reads smoothly. Well done. Les
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Many thanks, Les. Your review, as always, is much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
