Comment from Loren (7)

Excellent

I was first drawn in by the title - intriguing to say the least. And then came the poem with a story all its own.Nice allegory - eyes of the own - seeing all. That last line --- I think in a few years that memory may more burden than gain:)
Don't know how you find time to write so much and so well.

Loren

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2014

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

Terrific work with this one. Makes one wonder if a few minutes of pleasure is really worth the price. Very clever and I enjoyed this immensely. How do you find time to write poetry when working on your book? I can hardly keep up with you.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2014

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

You seem to have that meter thing whipped Michael. Good job, Great presentation! Just one thing. That second line. What's up with that? I am dyslectic and that doesn't even compute with me. I am always turning things around so I could be wrong but!
"It seems my secrets known to him alone." That is a much better way to say it! LOL Good job my friend.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2014

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2014

Goodness. Hahaha. When I see the line the way it should be it makes me wonder what I was thinking. I changed it to English! I'm getting better. The meter is starting to come to me a lot easier now. :) mike

reply by nancy_e_davis on 02-Dec-2014

Good, I knew you would get it eventually. Well done!

Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Michael: Evil likes to hide in the darkness with sin surrounding you. Passion and lust overtakes, but the husband sees..Scum...maybe, other words. Carnal and flesh oriented can get kicked in the butt. Good rhymes and beat.
flylikeaneagle

Yes, I think you hit all the contests. But, develops character and writing skills. I think you are a great scribe with an incredible imagination.

God bless your advent season with joy, love, blessings overflowing...Jesus name! flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2014

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

When an owl observes, nothing is secret, his eyes do look wily and wise! Even clandestine affairs are found out. Excellent rhyming and imagery to convey your thoughts. Good use of descriptive language and most enjoyable as always, faye

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2014

Comment from Carole Rosa

Excellent

Michael, When I first read you poetic piece, I thought that I was going to comment on the owl. When I reached the last two verses, I laughed out loud! Very Clever. Carole

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2014

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

Well, you scum! As Dean Martin says in his song: "That was no lady, that was my wife!"

Cute poem with a zit, below:

stares as I sneek by. [Stares as I SNEAK by.]

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2014

Comment from Sankey

Excellent

Y9u bad man you. Great layout and plot mate. maybe it was your first wife ha! Awww sorry. Looking forward to more of the wolves and stuff. Keep up the good work. This was good too. Wondered about sneek I realise there is peek and seek but I did think sne(a)k had an a in it. Whatever.

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Comment from Joe_P

Excellent

I like the poem. I found it amusing, almost comical. How ironical is it that a few minutes of Heaven damns your soul to Hell? Hey, but you'll see the Devil with a smile on your face!

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 Comment Written 02-Dec-2014