Twelve Little Grains of Sparkly Sand
counting rhyme in 8/6/8/6 meter119 total reviews
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
One little grain of sparkly sand
was sitting all alone,
until a gently lapping wave
swept new grains toward his home.
Perfect flow to the sing-song rhythm and rhyme - as
always it's a pleasure to read your work.
Margaret
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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One little grain of sparkly sand
was sitting all alone,
until a gently lapping wave
swept new grains toward his home.
Perfect flow to the sing-song rhythm and rhyme - as
always it's a pleasure to read your work.
Margaret
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Margaret, for your lovely six stars. We have several inches of snow predicted for tomorrow, so I just bought myself a frozen turkey dinner for Thursday in case I can't get to my sister's for Thanksgiving dinner. I need to be thinking about beaches :-) Brooke
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stay safe and warm, Brooke - I've seen the snow in some parts of the States on the news and, although in Kent where we lived for 10 years when the children were small, it to reach up to my thighs - I've never seen it as deep as they have it. And with threats of floods - even worse. When up in Kent, we couldn't let the dog out for fear it would disappear under the snow - as quick as the men in the village dug a way along the road, it was covered again. How our men got to work was a mystery, as in those days, no work - no pay!!
Margaret
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thank you, Margaret - last winter the Philly area had its second worse snow year ever with 68 inches total - in the Buffalo area they had over 80 inches in that one storm That is just amazing and horrible! It makes me say to myself - you can survive 5. :-)
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Wow! amazing!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Brooke, This has such a fun and light feel reading it - even for me the smiles came, maybe I miss my beach:) Beautifully crafted as always, this reads smooth as silk. Kids will love it, I did.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Dear Brooke, This has such a fun and light feel reading it - even for me the smiles came, maybe I miss my beach:) Beautifully crafted as always, this reads smooth as silk. Kids will love it, I did.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Maureen :-) I just read you've moved up to a caterpillar's pace - that sounds pretty damned good to me! :-) Brooke
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feels pretty damn good to me too my friend:)
Starting to see the improvements myself makes all the difference. One day at a time;)
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Comment from robina1978
I really enjoy these counting poems, this time about grains of sand. It rhymes and has meter, Lovely photo of Sawyer that complements your poem very well.
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I really enjoy these counting poems, this time about grains of sand. It rhymes and has meter, Lovely photo of Sawyer that complements your poem very well.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Ine, for your generous response to this poem :-) Brooke
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Brooke, this is another one of your fantastic counting poems, your imagination is just so good to write such lovely words about sand. All the twelve stanza are brilliant, well done, I enjoyed it.
Mary
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Hi Brooke, this is another one of your fantastic counting poems, your imagination is just so good to write such lovely words about sand. All the twelve stanza are brilliant, well done, I enjoyed it.
Mary
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Mary, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Dibul
I love the counting poems, and this one's a gem! Love the story and the concept of the twelve little grains. Each verse is packed with fun and magic. Lovely rhymes and meter as always!
One read is not enough. I'm gonna read it to my daughter today. Thank you for sharing such wonderful poems with us, Brooke! :)
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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I love the counting poems, and this one's a gem! Love the story and the concept of the twelve little grains. Each verse is packed with fun and magic. Lovely rhymes and meter as always!
One read is not enough. I'm gonna read it to my daughter today. Thank you for sharing such wonderful poems with us, Brooke! :)
Comment Written 25-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2014
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Dibul, thanks so much for your gracious comments and generous sixth star. :-) Brooke
Comment from Titanx9
My goodness, it seems Sawyer has grown several inches since I was last on FanStory. You do such a magnificent job capturing his many sides in poetry. The flow and message in this one have such synergy - it's lovely. I've missed coming on FanStory, but too much was happening in my life at the time I stepped back from writing. I had to make some choices.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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My goodness, it seems Sawyer has grown several inches since I was last on FanStory. You do such a magnificent job capturing his many sides in poetry. The flow and message in this one have such synergy - it's lovely. I've missed coming on FanStory, but too much was happening in my life at the time I stepped back from writing. I had to make some choices.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, Titan, and this photo is from this past summer :-) So, he's even taller no. I so appreciate your generous review :-) Brooke
Comment from GWHARGIS
I do love your counting poems. You manage to weave an adventure out what ever you use as your subject. Good rhythm and flow. Nicely done as always. Gretchen
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I do love your counting poems. You manage to weave an adventure out what ever you use as your subject. Good rhythm and flow. Nicely done as always. Gretchen
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thank you so much, Gretchen :-) Brooke
Comment from Malerie
Ah, that last stanza is really cute, I like the way this whole piece flows from 10 - 1 grain and then the one grains finds new friend. Great artwork that pulls in readers in; thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Ah, that last stanza is really cute, I like the way this whole piece flows from 10 - 1 grain and then the one grains finds new friend. Great artwork that pulls in readers in; thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Malerie, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from RodG
It's fun to think of grains of sand as something we CAN count. I like how you SHOW a young reader how each grain is important. As always, you TEACH as much as you show and it's nice that the single grain finds new friends at the end.
Rod
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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It's fun to think of grains of sand as something we CAN count. I like how you SHOW a young reader how each grain is important. As always, you TEACH as much as you show and it's nice that the single grain finds new friends at the end.
Rod
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Rod, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Leineco
I absolutely love it when I see one of your poems pop-up with number in the title! I always know I am in for a delightful guessing game (but squished 'tween toes instead. was my fav! LOL)
As always, Brooke, you kept me thoroughly entertained :-)
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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I absolutely love it when I see one of your poems pop-up with number in the title! I always know I am in for a delightful guessing game (but squished 'tween toes instead. was my fav! LOL)
As always, Brooke, you kept me thoroughly entertained :-)
Comment Written 24-Nov-2014
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2014
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Thanks so much, my friend :-) Brooke
