Cautionary Tales
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Comment from MizKat
Hi kiwisteveh,
This is quite a poem with outstanding rhyming that tells a cute little story. You are really good at writing poetry like this. It amazes me that everyone's writings that I've read have been recognized and received the All Time Best award.
Kat
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Hi kiwisteveh,
This is quite a poem with outstanding rhyming that tells a cute little story. You are really good at writing poetry like this. It amazes me that everyone's writings that I've read have been recognized and received the All Time Best award.
Kat
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Kat.
It's pretty easy to get those awards - just promote your poem enough to get plenty of reviews....
I would rather take notice of the reviews of people I respect and trust.
Steve
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Good advice my friend!
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. This reads like satire or comdy, but like all satire, there is truth to this. Kids are no longer kids...they are feature Gates or :::
I enjoyed your poem, it was well written..and well...made a point.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Hi. This reads like satire or comdy, but like all satire, there is truth to this. Kids are no longer kids...they are feature Gates or :::
I enjoyed your poem, it was well written..and well...made a point.
padumachitta
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thank you Padumachitta. Yes, even in the silliest of stories there is a grain of truth, although this one is well on the side of laughter rather than making a serious point.
Steve
Comment from scd41
I enjoyed thoroughly reading your lovely humorous poem. What a theme you have concieved and how nicely you have delivered such a poem which pales into insignificance the delivery of Suzy. The lines - On giving babies just what's best: "Not formula, you fool, but breast!" are witty and funny. Well written.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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I enjoyed thoroughly reading your lovely humorous poem. What a theme you have concieved and how nicely you have delivered such a poem which pales into insignificance the delivery of Suzy. The lines - On giving babies just what's best: "Not formula, you fool, but breast!" are witty and funny. Well written.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
Comment from skye
Hysterical and funny, but oftentimes there is much truth within the humour.
Modern families begin early to teach and train, to prod their prodigies into education.
Excellent. Loved every word, in this well written poem.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Hysterical and funny, but oftentimes there is much truth within the humour.
Modern families begin early to teach and train, to prod their prodigies into education.
Excellent. Loved every word, in this well written poem.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Sky. yes, I am having a little go at pushy parents, but really this is all about the laughs.
Steve
Comment from Erik McGinley
Awesome, Steve. You should teach climbing :)
Falling, or being pushed, off a cliff is also bad for your head and survival techniques would be really handy there.
The visual presentation is just right and you do something few people do with cartoon presents .. you got several good points in there in a light and readable way.
Very nice piece of work!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Awesome, Steve. You should teach climbing :)
Falling, or being pushed, off a cliff is also bad for your head and survival techniques would be really handy there.
The visual presentation is just right and you do something few people do with cartoon presents .. you got several good points in there in a light and readable way.
Very nice piece of work!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks, Eric, for the great review and the six stars.
Just a piece of fun, really!
Steve
Comment from Leigh Ann
How funny! lol I was caught from the first word of this tale. Your use of many unusual words, the humor of how this mother thought she had every duck in a row; and the fart,omg. This poem has everything to make one laugh. I think I needed a survival kit to get through my laughter. Great job.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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How funny! lol I was caught from the first word of this tale. Your use of many unusual words, the humor of how this mother thought she had every duck in a row; and the fart,omg. This poem has everything to make one laugh. I think I needed a survival kit to get through my laughter. Great job.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Leigh Ann, thanks for the great review - I love to hear that my poems have raised a laugh - in this case a prolonged guffaw!
Steve
Comment from Adri7enne
Fun stuff, Steve. You sure do rhyme! And the story just keeps on going, stays on topic, shows us what can happen with our modern,'mother from hell'. I guess one should know where to draw the line. LOL! Fun!
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Fun stuff, Steve. You sure do rhyme! And the story just keeps on going, stays on topic, shows us what can happen with our modern,'mother from hell'. I guess one should know where to draw the line. LOL! Fun!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the kind words - I had fun with this and yes, gentle pushing is fine, but pushing Suzy-style is a bridge too far.
Steve
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is good and put a smile on my face. Kind of crazy the things we will go through, and the people we think are trained to help. great job.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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This is good and put a smile on my face. Kind of crazy the things we will go through, and the people we think are trained to help. great job.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks, BJ - glad you enjoyed.
Steve
Comment from amahra
That was a very nice and creative story. This was a fun read, very humorous. Loved the art work that you chose for your fun poem. It was very cleverly written.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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That was a very nice and creative story. This was a fun read, very humorous. Loved the art work that you chose for your fun poem. It was very cleverly written.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Amahra!
Steve
Comment from Zinnia48
What a fun, somewhat true description of motherhood gone bizarre! You pretty much exploited the exploits of a certain kind of parent, and did it with rhythm and rhyme! caroline
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What a fun, somewhat true description of motherhood gone bizarre! You pretty much exploited the exploits of a certain kind of parent, and did it with rhythm and rhyme! caroline
Comment Written 06-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2014
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Thanks for the kind words.
Steve
