Comment from nelliesellie

Excellent

I love the story. The young lady had it all together. All she needed was a little love life. She found that. I like the idea of the wine and cheese. That is how I used to relax after a hard day at work. All you are missing is soft music playing in the back ground. Great work. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 05-Sep-2014

Thanks for your kind and lovely review. Have a nice weekend, Ine

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Sometimes there is better things to do than lie around and read a book. This is very well written wth a smooth flow of words, making for s good read.good luck in your contest.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week, Ine

reply by c_lucas on 04-Sep-2014

You're welcome, Ine. Charlie

Comment from mbagby23

Excellent

I enjoyed. I wouldn't think she was a nurse just looking at her picture. The story flowed very well. Interesting, wondering how long her and David were friends or are they coworkers. However, I still liked your take on the picture story.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from amada

Excellent

Nice story, it seems like a piece coming from real life. These things happen often. Great dialogue going on between those two love birds.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from DerivedBetter

Good

I like the story and the conversational tone that comes right at the reader. There are quite a few grammatical errors though. The dialogue also doesn't quite ring true and takes me out of the story a bit. I think this has real potential if cleaned up a little. You say it doesn't meet the word requirements, why not add a little to strengthen the ending. Any way, all just my take. Thanks for sharing.

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week, Ine

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, robina, I enjoyed reading this story about the young nurse that relaxes on her day off and finds companionship when she allows someone in her space. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2014

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reply by the author on 04-Sep-2014

Thanks for your kind and nice review. Have a lovely week, Ine