A Shift in Awareness
Everything is conspiring for good.44 total reviews
Comment from juliaSjames
True we are co-creators of our reality. And when we're conscious of what we're doing, great things can and do happen.
I like the concrete imagery in the first part of your tanka, and the excellent pivot line.
Great verb choice in "glide to a higher plane" - when in harmony with life, events dovetail with effortless ease.
To my frustration, all this effortless gliding happens with inconsequential things. LOL I guess I have too much ego invested in larger matters. Working on it, and your tanka is like an encouraging pat from the Universe.
Best of luck in the contest.
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True we are co-creators of our reality. And when we're conscious of what we're doing, great things can and do happen.
I like the concrete imagery in the first part of your tanka, and the excellent pivot line.
Great verb choice in "glide to a higher plane" - when in harmony with life, events dovetail with effortless ease.
To my frustration, all this effortless gliding happens with inconsequential things. LOL I guess I have too much ego invested in larger matters. Working on it, and your tanka is like an encouraging pat from the Universe.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thanks, Julia, for a detailed review and your honest appraisal of your personal efforts.
Comment from DALLAS01
Really like your pivot line. It is equally effective in both the preceding, and following two lines. And the verb glide ties right in. Good luck.
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Really like your pivot line. It is equally effective in both the preceding, and following two lines. And the verb glide ties right in. Good luck.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thanks, Dallas, for the detailed review.
Comment from costellsgirl33
I really enjoyed your poem! It was put together perfectly. It is amazing to me how something so simple can have such a impact and make such a great statement. Well done
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I really enjoyed your poem! It was put together perfectly. It is amazing to me how something so simple can have such a impact and make such a great statement. Well done
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thank you costellsgirl. Always like to hear from someone new. +
Comment from Sasha
This is a terrific entry for this contest. I like the subject and you convey the beauty of turning debris into something beautiful. Beautiful illustration to go with this too. I wish you all the best in the contest.
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This is a terrific entry for this contest. I like the subject and you convey the beauty of turning debris into something beautiful. Beautiful illustration to go with this too. I wish you all the best in the contest.
Comment Written 14-May-2014
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Thanks, Sasha. Appreciate your input.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Dear Shari,
And birds do just that, they plan, prepare, are industrious, and finally create the sturdiest of nest in which to hatch their family. I loved the Tanka, the message and the accompanying picture. I think you have a strong contender here.
:-) Carolyn
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Dear Shari,
And birds do just that, they plan, prepare, are industrious, and finally create the sturdiest of nest in which to hatch their family. I loved the Tanka, the message and the accompanying picture. I think you have a strong contender here.
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 14-May-2014
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Wow! I hope you're right. :-)
Comment from 9999pool
A brilliant penned piece of art - as beautiful as the nest build from strewn debris and dead vegetation.
Our creative and and thinking power can get us a lot of things in life.
Garbage is money too and big time business.
If only we can use more of our creativity pursuing the best, more innovations and gadgets can make this a more wonderful world.
Great write and good luck.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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A brilliant penned piece of art - as beautiful as the nest build from strewn debris and dead vegetation.
Our creative and and thinking power can get us a lot of things in life.
Garbage is money too and big time business.
If only we can use more of our creativity pursuing the best, more innovations and gadgets can make this a more wonderful world.
Great write and good luck.
Cheerio, hugs, Ritchie. :))
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Thanks, Ritchie, for the insightful review.
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Welcome. Smiles. :))
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Shari,
I loved your tanka entry. We fashion much from debris; even wine is basically spoiled grapes:) This was quite a thoughtful write. Best of luck in the contest--Ted
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Dear Shari,
I loved your tanka entry. We fashion much from debris; even wine is basically spoiled grapes:) This was quite a thoughtful write. Best of luck in the contest--Ted
Comment Written 14-May-2014
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Thanks so much for the six, Ted. You're right about vine. LOL. At least it doesn't smell like dirty feet.
Comment from boxergirl
Nice Tanka, Shari. I like the imagery of the bird building a strong next from the debris to the message of transforming the bad into something good. Unusual timing for this because I am watching baby wrens bounce around my back porch where they are testing their new wings. Their mother built her nest in a vacant flower pot full of debris. A lovely sight. 8-)
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Nice Tanka, Shari. I like the imagery of the bird building a strong next from the debris to the message of transforming the bad into something good. Unusual timing for this because I am watching baby wrens bounce around my back porch where they are testing their new wings. Their mother built her nest in a vacant flower pot full of debris. A lovely sight. 8-)
Comment Written 14-May-2014
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Oh, how I envy you watching this miracle unfold. Nothing beats the beauty of nature. Thanks so much for the six.
Comment from MizKat
Hi Sharil,
This is a very nice poem for the Tanka Poetry Contest. You did a super job in writing it. Best wishes in it. I enjoyed every word of it.
MizKat
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Hi Sharil,
This is a very nice poem for the Tanka Poetry Contest. You did a super job in writing it. Best wishes in it. I enjoyed every word of it.
MizKat
Comment Written 14-May-2014
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THanks, MisKat. Appreciate the review.
Comment from visionary1234
hey spits ... haven't seen you tinker with tanka for a while (don't you love the sound of 'tinker with tanka'?) ... but of COURSE you'd be good at them. I'm here in AZ at the moment, so higher plane thinking re conservation is very much in the picture here (though not, unfortunately, for the conservative voters!) Great tanka write here!
:)Sharyn
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hey spits ... haven't seen you tinker with tanka for a while (don't you love the sound of 'tinker with tanka'?) ... but of COURSE you'd be good at them. I'm here in AZ at the moment, so higher plane thinking re conservation is very much in the picture here (though not, unfortunately, for the conservative voters!) Great tanka write here!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 14-May-2014
reply by the author on 14-May-2014
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Good to hear from you, Sharyn. Glad this was timely for you.