Shadow of Action
Being an ingrate is deadly to one's existence and success65 total reviews
Comment from Martin Chan
This is a good poem written in 5-7-5 poetry format, for the contest entry.
A short form poetry written with good imagination and thoughts. It conforms to the rules of a 5-7-5 poem.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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This is a good poem written in 5-7-5 poetry format, for the contest entry.
A short form poetry written with good imagination and thoughts. It conforms to the rules of a 5-7-5 poem.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thank you
Comment from LIJ Red
Taken with the note, this is well said considering that it
is an entry in a very narrow contest field. I am not sure the dash is essential to meaning, but then, does it any harm?
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Taken with the note, this is well said considering that it
is an entry in a very narrow contest field. I am not sure the dash is essential to meaning, but then, does it any harm?
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2014
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Thanks for the constructive review. The dash makes it a compound word, which carries the message along with the other verses
Comment from Joy Graham
This post makes the reader think about the message. Great use of syllables. Good to see you managed to get a rhyme in there with sky and by. Good luck to you in this contest:)
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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This post makes the reader think about the message. Great use of syllables. Good to see you managed to get a rhyme in there with sky and by. Good luck to you in this contest:)
Comment Written 29-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much for the review.
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Very true you cannot destroy your shelter and have it.
This writing has a great many nuances about it. Any one can take it the way he likes. I prefer to take its positive meaning.
Do not destroy what might destroy yourself.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Very true you cannot destroy your shelter and have it.
This writing has a great many nuances about it. Any one can take it the way he likes. I prefer to take its positive meaning.
Do not destroy what might destroy yourself.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 27-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Thank you. You are right in this concise review.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
You make a strong point - far too many people "beat up" our environment without considering the fact they are destroying their own shelter - excellent imagery :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
You make a strong point - far too many people "beat up" our environment without considering the fact they are destroying their own shelter - excellent imagery :-) Brooke
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2014
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Thanks a million.
Comment from donette1914
very powerful and people need to really think about this and the environment and the future. well done it was an outstanding piece
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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very powerful and people need to really think about this and the environment and the future. well done it was an outstanding piece
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thank you so much
Comment from Spitfire
A novel way to express the damage we are doing to the environment. Beating up is right. Nice rhyme with sky and by. Dire warning with crushed.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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A novel way to express the damage we are doing to the environment. Beating up is right. Nice rhyme with sky and by. Dire warning with crushed.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the concise review
Comment from Moh Ana
A beautiful 5-7-5 poem! How succinctly you tell the consequence of one's thoughtless actions on our environment! Lovely rhyming too! Many thanks for the delightful read, and all the best for the contest!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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A beautiful 5-7-5 poem! How succinctly you tell the consequence of one's thoughtless actions on our environment! Lovely rhyming too! Many thanks for the delightful read, and all the best for the contest!
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Literature Dragon
The haiku gives me a message of protecting the earth better, as pollution is humanity's bad habit. I like how I can see the sky see revenge in the final lines as the quick poem still gives off a strong sense of conscience. Good haiku.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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The haiku gives me a message of protecting the earth better, as pollution is humanity's bad habit. I like how I can see the sky see revenge in the final lines as the quick poem still gives off a strong sense of conscience. Good haiku.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you. can you review your rating if there is nothing against the poem and message?
Comment from mumsyone
Beating up the sky
Forgetting it's your shelter
You may be crushed-by
This is a thought-provoking poem. I particularly like your first line "beating up the sky." Too few people worry about our environment until it's too late. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Beating up the sky
Forgetting it's your shelter
You may be crushed-by
This is a thought-provoking poem. I particularly like your first line "beating up the sky." Too few people worry about our environment until it's too late. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2014
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Thank you for the review
