Destined For Greatness
This is an American poem that fulfills the requirements.16 total reviews
Comment from Petriesan
good luck in the patriot contest
I think the last is not destined for greatness bu hath achieved it/
At least, all grandmas I know
nice piece
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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good luck in the patriot contest
I think the last is not destined for greatness bu hath achieved it/
At least, all grandmas I know
nice piece
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2014
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02/08/2014 Hello! Thank you for your consideration, appreciation, and participation (Leisure)! The Panama Canal was completed by The United States of America. As a leading United Nation, the great United States has "Heart", so much so that it is compared to the loving "Heart" (Characteristic) of a Grandma. God Bless America! - Jason Robert Van Pelt
Comment from Righteous Riter
Great America
The canal of Panama
Heart of a Grandma
This piece meets the criteria of the 5-7-5 poem as the syllable count is correct. Good end rhyming. Clear message that is short and simple.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Great America
The canal of Panama
Heart of a Grandma
This piece meets the criteria of the 5-7-5 poem as the syllable count is correct. Good end rhyming. Clear message that is short and simple.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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02/07/2014 Hello! Thank you for your appreciation and participation (Leisure)! - Jason Robert Van Pelt
Comment from royowen
I like the way you have an almost cryptic approach to the symbolic role that the US has played out in the world up to this day. I like the rhyme scheme, difficult to do in this poetry type. I'm not sure of the Panama Canal reference. The grandma analogy, is the kindly nature of the US toward the rest of the world! I'm an Australian with a daughter living in NY.And they have been kind to her, husband and grandchildren..Well done. Roy.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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I like the way you have an almost cryptic approach to the symbolic role that the US has played out in the world up to this day. I like the rhyme scheme, difficult to do in this poetry type. I'm not sure of the Panama Canal reference. The grandma analogy, is the kindly nature of the US toward the rest of the world! I'm an Australian with a daughter living in NY.And they have been kind to her, husband and grandchildren..Well done. Roy.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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02/07/2014 Hello! Thank you for your consideration, appreciation, and participation (Leisure)! The Panama Canal was completed by The United States of America. As a leading United Nation, the great United States has "Heart", so much so that it is compared to the loving "Heart" (Characteristic) of a Grandma. God Bless The Continent of Australia! - Jason Robert Van Pelt
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Thank you for for comprehensive reply and my countrie's blessing. And bless you back
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Great America
The canal of Panama
Heart of a Grandma.
All lines end in an 'a' which in itself is a challenge. The canal was a great engineering feat on behalf of the US. As to grandma rhyming with 'panama', I like it.
Regards:
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Great America
The canal of Panama
Heart of a Grandma.
All lines end in an 'a' which in itself is a challenge. The canal was a great engineering feat on behalf of the US. As to grandma rhyming with 'panama', I like it.
Regards:
Comment Written 07-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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02/07/2014 Hello! Thank you for your appreciation and participation (Leisure)! - Jason Robert Van Pelt
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Dear Jason: Well deserved. I wrote 100 poems on Americana as a new text book for getting school kids interested in American hist/geog.. Check out 'Americans R Us'. Thanks.
With Respect: Steve C
Comment from Glasstruth
Your rhyming is very interesting and unique, especially for a 5-7-5. Greatness has to be worked at, as the Panama canal was. Wonderfully written. Les
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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2014
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Your rhyming is very interesting and unique, especially for a 5-7-5. Greatness has to be worked at, as the Panama canal was. Wonderfully written. Les
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
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02/07/2014 Hello! Thank you for your appreciation and participation (Leisure)! - Jason Robert Van Pelt
Comment from Judith H
Your poem fits the 5-7-5 format effectively but for me the three ideas seem rather disjointed. The way you have made the three lines rhyme is effective.
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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Your poem fits the 5-7-5 format effectively but for me the three ideas seem rather disjointed. The way you have made the three lines rhyme is effective.
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Comment Written 06-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2014
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02/06/2014 Hello! Thank you for your consideration! The Panama Canal was completed by The United States of America. As a leading United Nation, the great United States has "Heart", so much so that it is compared to the loving "Heart" (Characteristic) of a Grandma. - Jason Robert Van Pelt
