Love, Forever
A different kind of love story21 total reviews
Comment from maggieadams
A heartfelt love story for sure. Realistic characters, dialogue and no spag...perfect story for all...love is where the heart is.
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A heartfelt love story for sure. Realistic characters, dialogue and no spag...perfect story for all...love is where the heart is.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Any one who has been loved would never diminish or trade that moment/memory or reality. It's hard to decide one love is more valid than another. Thanks.
Comment from Dom G Robles
Ingrid, this is a lovely, and yet, very interesting and melancholic story. I loved reading it from beginning to end. The poor boy, Timmy, young as he is, felt so deeply the loss of his "friend," Mrs. Simpson. The dialog between Bella and Timmy, strikes me, too, deeply. Your ending too. The house for sale revealed that Mrs. Simpson was no longer there, and I think, the boy, Timmy, felt something wiggling inside. It is painful. Reminding me again my broken past. You write so well, my dearest friend. This story deserves a six. I am out of luck because I used it all! Congratulations.
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Ingrid, this is a lovely, and yet, very interesting and melancholic story. I loved reading it from beginning to end. The poor boy, Timmy, young as he is, felt so deeply the loss of his "friend," Mrs. Simpson. The dialog between Bella and Timmy, strikes me, too, deeply. Your ending too. The house for sale revealed that Mrs. Simpson was no longer there, and I think, the boy, Timmy, felt something wiggling inside. It is painful. Reminding me again my broken past. You write so well, my dearest friend. This story deserves a six. I am out of luck because I used it all! Congratulations.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Recently I heard a quote that I can't recall exactly, but the gist of it was that love and memory of a deceased person is the debt of the living, the cost for the gift of love from another time. Listen to Garth Brooks song, 'The Dance' I had that on Saturday night and danced in my living room with a husband that has been gone 15 years.
Comment from lancellot
It was good story. I could see where you were going and I have to say you did a wonderful job with it, without being preachy or overdoing it. You let the story tell it. I would suggest perhaps a notice for the sudden scene shift. But it was a great tale.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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It was good story. I could see where you were going and I have to say you did a wonderful job with it, without being preachy or overdoing it. You let the story tell it. I would suggest perhaps a notice for the sudden scene shift. But it was a great tale.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Than you. I appreciate your feedback and the very generous bouquet of stars.
Comment from michaelcahill
I tried not to cry like a little girl all the way through this. Hahaha. At least I got even with my wife who was making fun of me by making her read it too!! Such a darling little weeping couple! Absolutely defines what love really is. To some of these little pieces that describe falling in love, I say see me in twenty years. So many beautiful lines like "dandelions turning into wishes". But the truth of the story told in a straightforward way without any gimmicks is the star. This has to win. If it doesn't? Well, everyone that reads it knows the real truth. Beautiful! mikey
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I tried not to cry like a little girl all the way through this. Hahaha. At least I got even with my wife who was making fun of me by making her read it too!! Such a darling little weeping couple! Absolutely defines what love really is. To some of these little pieces that describe falling in love, I say see me in twenty years. So many beautiful lines like "dandelions turning into wishes". But the truth of the story told in a straightforward way without any gimmicks is the star. This has to win. If it doesn't? Well, everyone that reads it knows the real truth. Beautiful! mikey
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Michael, the prompts and contests make me focus on a single idea and that's the biggest draw for me entering. The honest truth, the second reason is to collect enough funny money to keep promoting, but if I don't win, another story touched a string in the reader's heart that mine didn't. C'est la vie.
There are a lot of homophobic people on site that might not react to a life time of love unless it's between heterosexual couples. For me, an enduring love is a life treasure. thanks for the glitter.
Comment from DionysusDeVille
When I was a child I knew of an old lady who gave me ice cream all the time and my mom didn't really want me around her. But she was a sweet older lady, but I digress, this was a very touching passage that really tugs at the heartstrings
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When I was a child I knew of an old lady who gave me ice cream all the time and my mom didn't really want me around her. But she was a sweet older lady, but I digress, this was a very touching passage that really tugs at the heartstrings
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you for the read and the sensitivity.
Comment from Janie King
Were these ladies sisters? I've know two old maids that stayed together, really after their husband's died. It's a sad story in it's own right. God loves you and so do I.
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Were these ladies sisters? I've know two old maids that stayed together, really after their husband's died. It's a sad story in it's own right. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Oh Janie, you missed a critical segment regarding Miss Simpson saying that both Bella and she had been married for a long time and then the vows and the matching lockets. Imagine how many spinsters might have been homosexual partners?
No, they were not sisters. They were two women who pledged their love to each other and lived up to their promise.
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I had a sneaky feeling it might have been that, I just chose to let my mind go the other direction. God loves you and so do I. I thought maybe as as to their age and the use of the term marriage because marriage tween gays is fairly recent.
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Most gay people in long term relationships considered themselves married, just as common-law spouses, long before the legalities made the title' marriage' official.
Comment from Petriesan
good luck in the contest
this sentence -
For the next hour Bella showed Timmy pictures and finished the story that began before his friend's death - is great because how how you handled time.
Good piece of writing
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good luck in the contest
this sentence -
For the next hour Bella showed Timmy pictures and finished the story that began before his friend's death - is great because how how you handled time.
Good piece of writing
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Thanks, I appreciate you reading and reviewing.
Comment from country ranch writer
Sometimes you just have to move on in life and just remember the memories made along the way. He will always remember her for he has a locket to share in his future
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Sometimes you just have to move on in life and just remember the memories made along the way. He will always remember her for he has a locket to share in his future
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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More than that, I think. When understanding comes with maturity, he will remember love not as an expected life experience, but also the love of two old ladies for a boy and each other. Thanks for reading.
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I agree
Comment from Narvik
Hey Ingrid, beautifully written. You had me with you the whole way on this one. The visuals were great--I could really see Timmy jiggling Mrs. Simpson's toe and the actions of all the characters.
The relationship between Bella and Miss Simpson took me by surprise. It's a bit different to think of elderly people in gay relationships, I guess because those things were so hush-hush back in the day.
I've always loved talking to older people and I've had some Miss Simpson's in my life. Grandparents are great, but there are non-relatives who can be just as inspirational. It's sad to think of all those stories gone forever with each death. Young people should talk to them much more often. Especially the generation that experienced the Depression and WWII. They can teach us a lot.
Overall, you took a delicate subject and wrote about it with just the right tone.
The six is not quid pro quo. It is well-deserved. Thanks for writing it.
(You called Miss Simpson both "Miss" and "Mrs." in places)
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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Hey Ingrid, beautifully written. You had me with you the whole way on this one. The visuals were great--I could really see Timmy jiggling Mrs. Simpson's toe and the actions of all the characters.
The relationship between Bella and Miss Simpson took me by surprise. It's a bit different to think of elderly people in gay relationships, I guess because those things were so hush-hush back in the day.
I've always loved talking to older people and I've had some Miss Simpson's in my life. Grandparents are great, but there are non-relatives who can be just as inspirational. It's sad to think of all those stories gone forever with each death. Young people should talk to them much more often. Especially the generation that experienced the Depression and WWII. They can teach us a lot.
Overall, you took a delicate subject and wrote about it with just the right tone.
The six is not quid pro quo. It is well-deserved. Thanks for writing it.
(You called Miss Simpson both "Miss" and "Mrs." in places)
Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2014
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At one time I toyed with the idea of sponsoring a contest with a few options of which one would be 'Is it better to be in a heterosexual relationship within an abusive partner than to be in a homosexual partnership where respect and affection flourish?" I thought it was the right kind of prompt to stir up shit around here, but I guess I'm mellowing and can't be bothered.
Yes, I think it is hard for many people to accept life-long gay partnerships where couples live and grow old together, suffering all the tribulations of any life expectancy and relationship turmoil.
The greatest love stories I've witnessed are in ordinary circumstances, an old couple holding hands in a grocery store, arguing about each purchase.
People to think about love stories and romance in terms of youth and passion, but my spectrum has a panoramic lens.
Thanks for the lovely stars.
Comment from Nosha17
It is easy for a compassionate child to become involved with a situation such as this, but I guess it also made him realise he needed to have child's fun, too. Your story is written with much sincerity and love. Nice to see into the child's mind like this. Enjoyable read. Faye
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It is easy for a compassionate child to become involved with a situation such as this, but I guess it also made him realise he needed to have child's fun, too. Your story is written with much sincerity and love. Nice to see into the child's mind like this. Enjoyable read. Faye
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Comment Written 27-Jan-2014
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Thank you. I appreciate your read and review.
