Savannah Love
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
Bradley is not a trained pup. He shows when he needs to or wants to. That said, I don't think Paige has a whole lot to worry about. Bradley ain't stupid and he ain't gonna be run out of his own home. In case you didn't notice I'm a Bradley Booster. Hehe.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Bradley is not a trained pup. He shows when he needs to or wants to. That said, I don't think Paige has a whole lot to worry about. Bradley ain't stupid and he ain't gonna be run out of his own home. In case you didn't notice I'm a Bradley Booster. Hehe.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from wadamani
I thought this was an interesting story with characters that possessed a distinct tone. I thoroughly enjoyed reading the passage you composed and look forward to what Bradley has done.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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I thought this was an interesting story with characters that possessed a distinct tone. I thoroughly enjoyed reading the passage you composed and look forward to what Bradley has done.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Zue65
I am little bit confused, sorry, who is Bradley by the way? But I do love the paranormal angle in this story, real or not, it intensified the conflict introduced in the story. Bradley is an additional element that solidify the suspense angle of your story. I enjoyed it, God bless.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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I am little bit confused, sorry, who is Bradley by the way? But I do love the paranormal angle in this story, real or not, it intensified the conflict introduced in the story. Bradley is an additional element that solidify the suspense angle of your story. I enjoyed it, God bless.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from Mishelly
I was wondering if Bradley Bookman would make an appearance. He sounds like a ghost who has a good sense of humour and likes to tease. I wonder if this will be the point where Cash finally becomes a believer. I can't wait to find out :-)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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I was wondering if Bradley Bookman would make an appearance. He sounds like a ghost who has a good sense of humour and likes to tease. I wonder if this will be the point where Cash finally becomes a believer. I can't wait to find out :-)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from AprilShower
Has Paige met the ghost named Bradley? She keeps talking to him through her thoughts. Was Bradley a real person? I liked that last paragraph.
Barbara, when did you get your other book printed by Create a Space or Amazon.Com?
April :o)
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Has Paige met the ghost named Bradley? She keeps talking to him through her thoughts. Was Bradley a real person? I liked that last paragraph.
Barbara, when did you get your other book printed by Create a Space or Amazon.Com?
April :o)
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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In my first chapter, I explained how Bradley was killed in the Civil War and when we first new he was now a ghost. When Paige broke her ankle, Bradley carried her to safety. My publisher is G and J publisher. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sefiros
I'm not exactly up to speed with your story, so the paranormal angle took me by surprise. Paige seems to be in a hurry to get them out of the house, yet she constantly wishes for the ghost to behave. To have all kinds of pressure on Paige, perhaps the ghost angle is the first step in a spiraling abyss she is falling through. I would abandon this storyline entirely.
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reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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I'm not exactly up to speed with your story, so the paranormal angle took me by surprise. Paige seems to be in a hurry to get them out of the house, yet she constantly wishes for the ghost to behave. To have all kinds of pressure on Paige, perhaps the ghost angle is the first step in a spiraling abyss she is falling through. I would abandon this storyline entirely.
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Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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I will not abandon this story line because it's been a major part of the story since page 1. I am so sorry you have not followed the story and I fail to see how that's my fault. I post every Sunday.
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I am sorry if I offended you. It's just that I remember Paige as being afraid -- afraid to get into a relationship, afraid of getting hurt, afraid of history repeating herself. She has all these fears and I wanted her to have a break. It's not your fault at all. sorry about everything.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbra,
I don't ever have issues with your dialogue; it serves the story and is natural enough to keep it sounding like "thinking on the page", which is a real weakness in many writers;' dialog. Nice research with the sage. It must be Africian in origin, as it's used in Brazilian macumba. Great job--
Ted
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Dear Barbra,
I don't ever have issues with your dialogue; it serves the story and is natural enough to keep it sounding like "thinking on the page", which is a real weakness in many writers;' dialog. Nice research with the sage. It must be Africian in origin, as it's used in Brazilian macumba. Great job--
Ted
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and encouraging words.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
HAHA! Bradley is brilliant! I'm so impressed by your detail in this post, Barbara. You've obviously done a lot of research on paranormal investigating. I watch all the shows, so much of the equipment you mention in this post was familiar to me.
I LOVE that Bradley did nothing in the house, then got them outside. I also really like that Paige is protective of him, and him of her. Cash has yet to be convinced, although I'm sure he will be.
Great stuff!
Av
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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HAHA! Bradley is brilliant! I'm so impressed by your detail in this post, Barbara. You've obviously done a lot of research on paranormal investigating. I watch all the shows, so much of the equipment you mention in this post was familiar to me.
I LOVE that Bradley did nothing in the house, then got them outside. I also really like that Paige is protective of him, and him of her. Cash has yet to be convinced, although I'm sure he will be.
Great stuff!
Av
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the kind words.
Comment from Writingfundimension
I was feeling pretty disappointed in Bradley until that great ending, barbara LOL. Glad it happened in full view of all the doubting Thomases who will come up with some easy explanation.
Warm regards, Bev
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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I was feeling pretty disappointed in Bradley until that great ending, barbara LOL. Glad it happened in full view of all the doubting Thomases who will come up with some easy explanation.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Just wait until you hear the explanation. It's a dozey. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're very welcome, barbara. I look forward to the explanation :0)
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
I really liked Bradley's taking the Michael out of the "team" as they leave. My kind of ghost that one.
As usual a good dialogue to this. Very well done.
Patrick
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Hi Barbara,
I really liked Bradley's taking the Michael out of the "team" as they leave. My kind of ghost that one.
As usual a good dialogue to this. Very well done.
Patrick
Comment Written 16-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate the encouragement.
