Jack and the Beanstalk
An acrostic fairy tale23 total reviews
Comment from Debra White
Hi Steve :)
I loved this neatly rhymed acrostic Fairy Tale.
Really cleverly done, you missed nothing from the story and included a moral also!
My favourite line is 'As sniffing Giant Fee-Fie-Fummed'
Thanks for sharing it, I'll look through your portfolio for the others in the series.
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Hi Steve :)
I loved this neatly rhymed acrostic Fairy Tale.
Really cleverly done, you missed nothing from the story and included a moral also!
My favourite line is 'As sniffing Giant Fee-Fie-Fummed'
Thanks for sharing it, I'll look through your portfolio for the others in the series.
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Debra.
When I checked again there are now five in this series, some of them go back a little way....
Princess and the Pea, Little Red Riding Hood, Goldilocks and Boy who cried wolf are the earlier ones. I'm looking at assembling them into a (FanStory) book - at least they will all be together then.
Steve
Comment from adewpearl
Fantastic acrostic for Jack And The Beanstalk
solid rhyming couplets
love the beans/smithereens pairing
and fee fie fummed/drummed LOL
great alliteration in hen and harp
a wonderfully poetic retelling of this classic story :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Fantastic acrostic for Jack And The Beanstalk
solid rhyming couplets
love the beans/smithereens pairing
and fee fie fummed/drummed LOL
great alliteration in hen and harp
a wonderfully poetic retelling of this classic story :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Brooke.
Steve
Comment from Adri7enne
Terrific rhymes and steady rhythm. You fit the Acrostic in there without hampering flow. Told the story well, besides. I enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest, steve.
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Terrific rhymes and steady rhythm. You fit the Acrostic in there without hampering flow. Told the story well, besides. I enjoyed the read. Good luck in the contest, steve.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you!
Steve
Comment from Stephen Wolff
Fun! Well put together and generally nicely crafted. Not sure I approve of the word "smithereens", it seems inexact, but, in any case, this is quite a casual sounding piece of verse. Of course, I know it was more difficult to write than you make it seem!
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Fun! Well put together and generally nicely crafted. Not sure I approve of the word "smithereens", it seems inexact, but, in any case, this is quite a casual sounding piece of verse. Of course, I know it was more difficult to write than you make it seem!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thanks.
I think I get what you mean about smithereens, but it's such a lovely word and suited the rhyme so well I was determined to use it - let's call it poetic licence. :o)
Steve
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I know what you mean!
Comment from S A Bullen
This was excellent; very clever. Beautifully rhymed and timed and clever use of acrostic. Good luck with the comp. Sheryn :-)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This was excellent; very clever. Beautifully rhymed and timed and clever use of acrostic. Good luck with the comp. Sheryn :-)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Sheryn.
Steve
Comment from rama devi
Superb entry for this unusual contest. Witty and well-rhymed with a bouncy beat, well-timed!
As usual, fresh inventive rhyming and a smattering of alliteration here and there accent and augment the musicality.
The most impressive line for phonetics is:
Heroically, Jack climbed the crop...
Superb alliteration and consonance of C and K sounds.
I enjoyed the pun on GIANT here:
Each meal-time led to giant strife.
Favorite rhyme pair:
As sniffing Giant Fee-Fie-Fummed,
Now in the oven, Jack's heart drummed.
LOL!
Entertaining and enjoyable.
Good luck
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Superb entry for this unusual contest. Witty and well-rhymed with a bouncy beat, well-timed!
As usual, fresh inventive rhyming and a smattering of alliteration here and there accent and augment the musicality.
The most impressive line for phonetics is:
Heroically, Jack climbed the crop...
Superb alliteration and consonance of C and K sounds.
I enjoyed the pun on GIANT here:
Each meal-time led to giant strife.
Favorite rhyme pair:
As sniffing Giant Fee-Fie-Fummed,
Now in the oven, Jack's heart drummed.
LOL!
Entertaining and enjoyable.
Good luck
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Rama.
Steve
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
A series of children's stories is a good thing to do with acrosstics, in my opinion. I tried to make a statement with mine. I think you did well to get the whole story into a few lines... not easy. Good luck in the competition, Giddy
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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A series of children's stories is a good thing to do with acrosstics, in my opinion. I tried to make a statement with mine. I think you did well to get the whole story into a few lines... not easy. Good luck in the competition, Giddy
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Giddy.
Steve
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good one, Steve! I've always thought that was a stupid kids's story. Jack did a really dumb thing, and in the end was rewarded for his stupidity. Not a good lesson for anyone.
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Good one, Steve! I've always thought that was a stupid kids's story. Jack did a really dumb thing, and in the end was rewarded for his stupidity. Not a good lesson for anyone.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Phyllis.
Some of these stories are so old and have been meddled with so much over the centuries that any original point has been lost. I know Little Red originally came to a very sticky end to teach kids not to go chatting to wolves in the wood!
Steve
Comment from SaluteDobby
This one made me smile! All the best with the contest, Steve. As sniffing Giant Fee-Fie-Fummed,
Now in the oven, Jack's heart drummed.
Loved the "Fee-Fie -fumed" :)
I shall go to your profile and read Goldilocks and The boy who cried wolf..:)
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This one made me smile! All the best with the contest, Steve. As sniffing Giant Fee-Fie-Fummed,
Now in the oven, Jack's heart drummed.
Loved the "Fee-Fie -fumed" :)
I shall go to your profile and read Goldilocks and The boy who cried wolf..:)
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you!
When I checked again there are now five in this series, some of them go back a little way....
Princess and the Pea, Little Red Riding Hood, Goldilocks and Boy who cried wolf are the earlier ones. I'm looking at assembling them into a (FanStory) book - at least they will all be together then.
Steve
Comment from ThePaperThief
Ha! I love this. So well done, the measure is perfect. You have great talent and told the whole story, which is a credit to your use of words. I plan to read this to my kids, if you don't mind. I look forward to checking out your other fairy tales as well. Thank you for writing this.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Ha! I love this. So well done, the measure is perfect. You have great talent and told the whole story, which is a credit to your use of words. I plan to read this to my kids, if you don't mind. I look forward to checking out your other fairy tales as well. Thank you for writing this.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you!
When I checked again there are now five in this series, some of them go back a little way....
Princess and the Pea, Little Red Riding Hood, Goldilocks and Boy who cried wolf are the earlier ones. I'm looking at assembling them into a (FanStory) book - at least they will all be together then.
Steve
