Haiku (Succulence)
thirsty31 total reviews
Comment from SteveY
What a wonderful play on words you've penned here. But it's you, so now I've come to expect it. Still beautiful as everything you produce is!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
What a wonderful play on words you've penned here. But it's you, so now I've come to expect it. Still beautiful as everything you produce is!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Thank you SO much!
Comment from Hitcher
A haiku with depth and beauty, it is soft and alluring, it whispers sweet nothings and causes one to wonder what and why... So cool for a haiku my friend, very accomplished, loved your artwork too :) I rarely give a six to a haiku but this one wooed me. NICE!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
A haiku with depth and beauty, it is soft and alluring, it whispers sweet nothings and causes one to wonder what and why... So cool for a haiku my friend, very accomplished, loved your artwork too :) I rarely give a six to a haiku but this one wooed me. NICE!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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YAY...I do love these little buggers! haha.
Thank you for the beautiful garland of stars, my friend.
Comment from Gaye Hemsley
That's a delightful Haiku. Really loved the last line. The beautiful picture certainly enhanced the few words. You got the ideal syllabi count 5/7/5 Cheers Gaye
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
That's a delightful Haiku. Really loved the last line. The beautiful picture certainly enhanced the few words. You got the ideal syllabi count 5/7/5 Cheers Gaye
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much Gaye!
Comment from babylonia
wow! i don't know which came, the picture or the inspiration. either way, it works here. nicely done. made me smile. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
wow! i don't know which came, the picture or the inspiration. either way, it works here. nicely done. made me smile. imagery is excellent.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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The picture first, well deserving of a haiku to enhance it. :)
thanks for stopping in.
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I totally agree with you. I love it when I find a picture and it inspires me to write. Great job!
Love,
Barbara
Comment from donaldww
This is an excellent haiku. I get saturation comes and the word play of dew time/due time. The gentle persuasion must of a sexual nature.
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
This is an excellent haiku. I get saturation comes and the word play of dew time/due time. The gentle persuasion must of a sexual nature.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2013
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thank you DW
Comment from ErikAHarris
This is well written. I pictured dew falling from the tip of a leaf. The image is alright. I think it would have been better had it been a leaf, but that's a personal opinion. Nothing further to say.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
This is well written. I pictured dew falling from the tip of a leaf. The image is alright. I think it would have been better had it been a leaf, but that's a personal opinion. Nothing further to say.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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haha It was the image that brought on the poem for me but I may try it for a leaf as well.
Comment from Black_Oxygen
Well Done ~ Jewell
With very few words, this poetry transports the reader
to a beautiful scene. The attached photo is the perfect
accent to enhance the message. Thank You for your
creation.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
Well Done ~ Jewell
With very few words, this poetry transports the reader
to a beautiful scene. The attached photo is the perfect
accent to enhance the message. Thank You for your
creation.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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Thank you so much.
Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
saturation comes saturation/persuasion rhyme
signs of gentle persuasion 's' alliterations
falling in dew time A pun? 'dew' time
Heavy dew presses down (gentle persuasion) on a petal until it pulls away and floats to earth in due time. Wonderful allusion. Deserves a 6 but alas none was proffered.
Regards:
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
saturation comes saturation/persuasion rhyme
signs of gentle persuasion 's' alliterations
falling in dew time A pun? 'dew' time
Heavy dew presses down (gentle persuasion) on a petal until it pulls away and floats to earth in due time. Wonderful allusion. Deserves a 6 but alas none was proffered.
Regards:
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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ahhh, thanks so very much for stopping in!
Comment from GWinterwin
Beautiful words and beautiful picture, sounds like words of love to me. Words to make one think of sensuous times. Great writing, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
Beautiful words and beautiful picture, sounds like words of love to me. Words to make one think of sensuous times. Great writing, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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sounds good to me. ;)
Thank you~
Comment from xotic flotsam
You have penned a superb haiku here. Each line offers something to ponder. The lines together come build and harmonize like the last color touches on a painting. The full beauty emerges. Your creative play on words with 'dew' is something I often try, but finding the right spot is difficult. The picture carries all the emotional beauty. The delicate bloom and fresh dew is perfect. As a rosarian I love it. This is one my favorite pieces. Well done.
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
You have penned a superb haiku here. Each line offers something to ponder. The lines together come build and harmonize like the last color touches on a painting. The full beauty emerges. Your creative play on words with 'dew' is something I often try, but finding the right spot is difficult. The picture carries all the emotional beauty. The delicate bloom and fresh dew is perfect. As a rosarian I love it. This is one my favorite pieces. Well done.
x
Comment Written 31-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2013
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What a treasure!
THANK YOU!! I fell in love first with the outcome of my photo and just had to give it a simple description in profound imagery.
Your review is a treat and I am so honored coming from you.
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I'm a rose growing fool too. Nice shot.
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I'm a rose growing fool too. Nice shot.
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I'm a rose growing fool too. Nice shot.
x
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oooh do share a poem and photo of one of your roses!