Savannah Love
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Comment from Simple Splendors
Fascinating chapter! I read the author's note beforehand and expected to have difficulty getting into this chapter as I have not been following it, but after reading a few lines, you had my full attention. You plot is very captivating, your characters interesting, and overall the chapter comes off in such a smashing way that I am quite tempted to neglect laundry for the day and read through the rest of it! :P
My one critique is perhaps the lack of emotional development in the characters, but perhaps this is more apparent in other chapters! I shall just have to read and see.
Oh! And I really liked the italicized mental dialogue of Cash. Well done!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Fascinating chapter! I read the author's note beforehand and expected to have difficulty getting into this chapter as I have not been following it, but after reading a few lines, you had my full attention. You plot is very captivating, your characters interesting, and overall the chapter comes off in such a smashing way that I am quite tempted to neglect laundry for the day and read through the rest of it! :P
My one critique is perhaps the lack of emotional development in the characters, but perhaps this is more apparent in other chapters! I shall just have to read and see.
Oh! And I really liked the italicized mental dialogue of Cash. Well done!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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no problem!
Comment from barkingdog
I'm glad they are alright. Good puppy, bit the bad man's glove.
I wonder what they plan to do to stay safe? The girls can't be left alone. Is that officer looking at Cash and Billy Joe with suspicion? I hope he's not that stupid.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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I'm glad they are alright. Good puppy, bit the bad man's glove.
I wonder what they plan to do to stay safe? The girls can't be left alone. Is that officer looking at Cash and Billy Joe with suspicion? I hope he's not that stupid.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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I hope the officer isn't that stupid either. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from samandlancelot
Barbara,
I haven't been reading your other chapters, but this chapter was filled with action, excitement and mystery. I enjoyed your writing.
Patricia
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Barbara,
I haven't been reading your other chapters, but this chapter was filled with action, excitement and mystery. I enjoyed your writing.
Patricia
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Sorry I'm late! Wouldn't miss it though. So glad they found the girls. I wonder who the heck is doing this. The cops are way off the mark if they think it's Cash.
Great post, Barbara. You always leave me hanging!!!
av
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Sorry I'm late! Wouldn't miss it though. So glad they found the girls. I wonder who the heck is doing this. The cops are way off the mark if they think it's Cash.
Great post, Barbara. You always leave me hanging!!!
av
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your continued support.
Comment from Kidlike101
Interesting installment to the story. I loved this line
"Let's get them outta here then ask questions."
Always a good idea! I wonder if cash would have been able to find them without the smart little puppy though.
Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Interesting installment to the story. I loved this line
"Let's get them outta here then ask questions."
Always a good idea! I wonder if cash would have been able to find them without the smart little puppy though.
Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I think Morgan is stealing my story.
Comment from jjstar
Uh oh..this is not good. Now we're getting to the nitty gritty of the story. Love Cash's inner thoughts. And what a great ending.
"Let's get them outta here then ask questions====good thinking...
On the damp cement floor, sat Paige and Mary Pat, ====I wasn't going to say anything at first because there's nothing really wrong with it. It just seems like it might be a little civilized or too comfortable. When I think of scenes like this the mental picture I draw is one where the women are either huddled together or were shoved into a corner or something....Maybe you could take out the sat Paige and Mary Pat and say they were bound, etc. I don't know..:)
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Uh oh..this is not good. Now we're getting to the nitty gritty of the story. Love Cash's inner thoughts. And what a great ending.
"Let's get them outta here then ask questions====good thinking...
On the damp cement floor, sat Paige and Mary Pat, ====I wasn't going to say anything at first because there's nothing really wrong with it. It just seems like it might be a little civilized or too comfortable. When I think of scenes like this the mental picture I draw is one where the women are either huddled together or were shoved into a corner or something....Maybe you could take out the sat Paige and Mary Pat and say they were bound, etc. I don't know..:)
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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I will take another look at that sentence. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Tonulak
Dear Barbra,
This was really riveting and outstanding writing. the read just blew by, because it was so well-written and natural. Terrific write--Ted
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Dear Barbra,
This was really riveting and outstanding writing. the read just blew by, because it was so well-written and natural. Terrific write--Ted
Comment Written 13-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your encouragement.
Comment from Mishelly
I'm glad Cash and Billy Joe found the girls. I'm sure Cash being a hero will bring him and Paige closer. The mysteries involved in this story are still fascinating. First ghosts, and now treasure. Can't wait to find out what happens next :-)
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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I'm glad Cash and Billy Joe found the girls. I'm sure Cash being a hero will bring him and Paige closer. The mysteries involved in this story are still fascinating. First ghosts, and now treasure. Can't wait to find out what happens next :-)
Comment Written 12-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2013
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I can't wait either. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Barbara - I enjoyed reading this one - nice mystery and emotion from the woman. They seemed quite calm about the whole thing, and if they were ruffed up some I'm wondering if it needs more reaction from them when found.
Otherwise a great work and continuation of this story.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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Hi Barbara - I enjoyed reading this one - nice mystery and emotion from the woman. They seemed quite calm about the whole thing, and if they were ruffed up some I'm wondering if it needs more reaction from them when found.
Otherwise a great work and continuation of this story.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 12-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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I will think about that. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Hmm, hired help called in to beat up the lady and get the goods? There seem to be some nasty people behind this, but, as they say, where there's a Will, there's a Lawsuit ...
Good chapter, nicely resolved, but not much for the police to work with. One correction -
Only a dim light came from Billy Joe's flashlight Billy Joe. - delete the second Billy Joe ...
Patrick
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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Hi Barbara,
Hmm, hired help called in to beat up the lady and get the goods? There seem to be some nasty people behind this, but, as they say, where there's a Will, there's a Lawsuit ...
Good chapter, nicely resolved, but not much for the police to work with. One correction -
Only a dim light came from Billy Joe's flashlight Billy Joe. - delete the second Billy Joe ...
Patrick
Comment Written 12-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2013
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That sentence has given me nothing but trouble. Thank you for the kind review.
