Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This is a cute story. Rabbit is luck to have Virge and Erin in his life, even if Erin was only for a few days.

Politely, She said, "No, but I wish you would." (lower case 's' on she)

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks for reading Barbara and for the spot. I very much appreciate both. Bill

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

Great chapter! Even though I haven't been following this, enjoyed the compelling plot and the interaction done through your narrative was quite entertaining. Well done! Les

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks for reading and the kind feedback. I appreciate both. Bill

Comment from Mrs Jones

Exceptional

This was a wonderful chapter. The description of the lake and the cheeky ending. I loved reading it. It seemed well edited to me.
Cheers
Rose

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks Rose, first for reading and then the wonderful compliment of the six! Bill

Comment from trailblazer101

Excellent

This is an excellent depicted slice of life. Liked the way you handled the nudity portion and made it just one more slice. Kids growing up. I liked how Rabbit got his name. Makes it all realistic and heartwarming. Especially since I was raised on such a farm.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks for reading and the kind feedback. People who never got a chance to spend early life on a farm missed out!

Comment from Judy Couch

Exceptional

I love it. You didn't go into detail about how the girl looked which is a good thing. You left it to the reader's imagination to fill in the details. I like all of your characters. This is really fun to read. I'm reading it aloud to my husband and he likes it too.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks for reading Judy and for the wonderful compliment of the six. I'm glad that the two of you both liked it. Bill

Comment from Norbanus

Excellent

A darn well told story, b, Written with the delightful POV of a child. It advances froth the story and the development of the characters.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks for reading and the kind feedback! Bill

Comment from Curtis Hatch

Excellent

Bill,

This is a delightful chapter, and I found it to be interesting and informative. The story flowed smoothly and logically, and the plot is compelling and believable. The characters are convincing and realistic, and their interaction is natural and displays great imagery. It is easy for my mind's eye to see the events as they unfold...the art of a skillful writer.

I enjoyed the read and the interaction with Virge, Erin, and Rabbit. He was very fortunate to have a mentor like Virge, who taught many practical things not found in text books.

Curtis

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks Curtis. I appreciate you reading and for supporting the story! Bill

Comment from AprilShower

Excellent

Well looks like Rabbit did make a friend for life. Rabbit is smart for a little boy.

"You know, Rabbit, I wish you were fifteen years older."

"Me too Erin. Me too."

This reminds me of something I wrote in my first novel, only with different names.

If you're interested, I'll let you know where it's at so you can read it.

April

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Hi April - please do let me know. I would like to read it. Regards, Bill

reply by AprilShower on 29-Mar-2013

Bill, it's not exactly like yours. Mine is about a young man in the service. It takes place in 1960. Life was a bit different back then. Put it into today's time, and it's a bit controversal. The name of the novel is "When Silence is Not Golden". The chapter's name is "Time Out" Chapter 10. You will have to click the search Porfolio at the bottom. It's the first book I posted.

Comment from dannyleonn

Excellent

Adorable! You wrote this chapter with the fun and grace of the times. I smiled throughout and frequently laughed out loud. I am really enjoying my new friends.

Nice work as usual, Bill.

Not knowing all of the rules on dialogue, should the paragraph when Virge is telling Erin about Rabbit's first fishing excursion, should the quotes be continuous?

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks for reading and for your comment. I struggled with the quotes. Some of the grammar gurus didn't respond, so maybe it's okay. I can assure, I'm learning most of the rules as I go. Warm regards, Bill

Comment from Adri7enne

Excellent

My tendency is to want to point out all the grammatical errors in the narrative, until I remind myself it's written from the POV of a kid.

I liked the quick story of why he's called Rabbit. Cute!

"Erin was a red head." LOL! I guess you knew for sure! Ah, Rabbit!

So you might have started a romance with Erin if you'd a been a little older. LOL! Starting so young, you must have got real good at romancin' the girls.
What a lovely, idyllic childhood you describe. Do you have any idea how lucky you are?
Such fun to read. Well done, Bill.

 Comment Written 29-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013

Thanks Adri - getting away with all sorts of gramattical sin for sure! Thanks for your continuing interest in this story. I appreciate it. Bill