In Fields Of Friendship
friends I can count on, I could count on one hand44 total reviews
Comment from Mai Mai
This is a very interesting and sweet piece. It use metaphors nicely to lay out a picture of a friendship, tried and true. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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This is a very interesting and sweet piece. It use metaphors nicely to lay out a picture of a friendship, tried and true. Good job and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Hello my friend Mai Mai,
Thank you for sharing your elegantly penned impressions of " in fields of friendship". As you might have guessed, this poem was written as a gift for a dear friend.
It is always a joy to hear from you.
Until next time,
Jill
-:)
Comment from Starlit Ink
I like this approach to a free verse contest. It is simple and free-flowing, yet speaking volumes. True friends are hard to find, and should be cherished, and never taken for granted. Friends cheer us and gude us home in many ways. Well said, and best of luck in the ocntest.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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I like this approach to a free verse contest. It is simple and free-flowing, yet speaking volumes. True friends are hard to find, and should be cherished, and never taken for granted. Friends cheer us and gude us home in many ways. Well said, and best of luck in the ocntest.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Hello my friend,
Thank you for your elegantly penned and insightful impressions of " in fields of friendship". I fully agree with you that we should cherish our friends and never ever take them for granted..
Thank you for embracing " in fields of friendship" . It is always a joy to hear from you.
Until next time,
Jill
-:)
Comment from kashmayank
nice way to celebrate friendship which is one of the most important things of the life a good poem sweet and simple yet effective
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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nice way to celebrate friendship which is one of the most important things of the life a good poem sweet and simple yet effective
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Hello Kashmayank,
Thank you for your entirely candid impressions of " in fields of friendship". As you might have guessed, this poem was written as a gift for a dear friend. Like you, I believe in celebrating the blessing of true friends in our lives.
It will be a pleasure getting to know you through your poems. Any favorite titles in your portfolio that you would like to suggest I begin with?
Until next time,
Jill
-:)
Comment from visionary1234
This is lovely! the image of the field of red poppies amidst the winter landscape is striking (and I've seen those poppies) - I liked your little description as it made the images all the more poignant -
"a single star in a black sky
those few friends are, indeed, treasures!
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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This is lovely! the image of the field of red poppies amidst the winter landscape is striking (and I've seen those poppies) - I liked your little description as it made the images all the more poignant -
"a single star in a black sky
those few friends are, indeed, treasures!
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Hello Sharyn,
Thank you for embracing " in fields of friendship" so fully. As you may have thought, this poem was written as a gift for a dear friend. Like you, I believe that true friendships are indeed treasures! I appreciate that you mentioned a specific line that worked for you.
It is always a pleasure to read your reviews and an absolute delight to dwell within your poems.
I love them all!!
Until next time,
Jill
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You're so welcome, Jill - and I'm delighted that you enjoy MY work too! :)S
Comment from Black_Oxygen
A circle of cheer
to celebrate
This poetry transports the reader to beautiful place.
It flows nicely and uses non-confusing language. With
very few words, this poetry attracts the reader.
Thank You for your creation.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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A circle of cheer
to celebrate
This poetry transports the reader to beautiful place.
It flows nicely and uses non-confusing language. With
very few words, this poetry attracts the reader.
Thank You for your creation.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Good morning my friend,
Thank you for your elegantly penned generous impressions of " in fields of friendship". I appreciate that you mentioned a favorite phrase and that you were specific in pointing out that " less is more".
As you may have guessed, " fields of friendship" was written as a gift for a dear friend. I am delighted that you enjoyed reading this poem nearly as much as I enjoyed writing it.
Until next time,
Jill
-:)
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Comment from J.R Dickinson
A beautiful piece with a sentimental meaning. I adore it,as it reminds me of my most precious friendships and the best memories with them. Congratulations on the Recognized ribbon. You definitely earned it.
Sincerely,
J.R
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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A beautiful piece with a sentimental meaning. I adore it,as it reminds me of my most precious friendships and the best memories with them. Congratulations on the Recognized ribbon. You definitely earned it.
Sincerely,
J.R
Comment Written 07-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Good morning J.R.,
Thank you for embracing " in fields of friendship" so completely!
As you may have guessed, this poem was written for a dear friend. Like you, I cherish and celebrate the blessing of precious friends.
Thank you for sharing such beautifully expressed and entirely candid impressions.
Until next time,
Jill
-:)
Comment from Walu Feral
This is a really beautiful piece of work. to me it describes your feelings of love and friendship in a quietly dramatic way. Well done. Cheers Fez.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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This is a really beautiful piece of work. to me it describes your feelings of love and friendship in a quietly dramatic way. Well done. Cheers Fez.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Hello my friend Fez,
Thank you for embracing " in fields of friendship" so completely. As you may have guessed, this poem was written for a dear friend. Like you, as I have learned through your marvelous poems, I cherish and celebrate my true precious friends.
It has been a joy getting to know yu through your poems. I love them all!!
Until next time,
Jill
-:)
Comment from yonashalom
This free verse starts out with a winter-white canvas that made me think of snow. Then there are poppies. So now I am seeing red on white snow. I'm thinking that justifies the picture but the picture looks like spring. After a second read, I see the winter-white is only intended to be a color of canvas, but the word choice pushes a winter scene naturally.
Then the poem speaks of warmth and I'm trying to see how that fits in with a snow image I already have in my head from the above lines. And lastly, you switch to a star in a black sky and it is night time.
I'm trying to make sense of it but the setting of this poem is all over the place for me. I'm thinking winter, spring, day, night.
I do like the visual of poppies in a field and red on white. I do like the idea of a star guiding one home. But, the middle doesn't make sense to me. It sounds like a run on phrase.
A circle of cheer
to celebrate
a whisper of warmth
to embrace
Maybe too, it is so divided in spacing the lines like this. Perhaps I am not connecting the meaning with all the breaks or it needs punctuation?
If I totally missed something here that connects all of these together, please do tell.
~Yona
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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This free verse starts out with a winter-white canvas that made me think of snow. Then there are poppies. So now I am seeing red on white snow. I'm thinking that justifies the picture but the picture looks like spring. After a second read, I see the winter-white is only intended to be a color of canvas, but the word choice pushes a winter scene naturally.
Then the poem speaks of warmth and I'm trying to see how that fits in with a snow image I already have in my head from the above lines. And lastly, you switch to a star in a black sky and it is night time.
I'm trying to make sense of it but the setting of this poem is all over the place for me. I'm thinking winter, spring, day, night.
I do like the visual of poppies in a field and red on white. I do like the idea of a star guiding one home. But, the middle doesn't make sense to me. It sounds like a run on phrase.
A circle of cheer
to celebrate
a whisper of warmth
to embrace
Maybe too, it is so divided in spacing the lines like this. Perhaps I am not connecting the meaning with all the breaks or it needs punctuation?
If I totally missed something here that connects all of these together, please do tell.
~Yona
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Shalom Yona,
I appreciate that you have taken the time to address specific issues and pose questions about my poem , " in fields of friendship. I shall try to provide clarification.
Although the artwork that accompanies this poem does celebrate poppies, perhaps a field of scarlet poppies, straight out of the wizard of oz, might have been more effective.
Both the winter white canvass landscape and the fields of scarlet poppies are simple metaphors. It is unimportant to specify an actual season when the metaphors are broad. All that is important here is that the poppies represent the welcoming blaze of true friendship. A winter white landscape canvass is a state of mind more than a statement of setting or actual season.
The lines that you pointed out "
"a circle of cheer to celebrate, a whisper of warmth to embrace"
are in this poem to define the gift of true friendship.
I hope that I have answered a couple of your questions. This poem was written as a gift for a dear friend. I cherish and celebrate the blessing of precious friendship.
If " in fields of friendship" still does not work for you, may I suggest " dancing in the kitchen" and rapscallions gift".
It has already been a pleasure getting to know you through your poems and most recent non-fiction account of your health scare.
I will keep you within my prayers.
Until next time,
Joheved ( Jill )
Until next time,
Jill
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Shalom Joheved,
Thank you so much for explaining the metaphors. I will revisit this. Sometimes things make more sense when we can get into the author's head. :) Thanks for the warm thoughts and prayers.
~Yona
Comment from dmt1967
This sea of poppy I like the way you embrace the friendship pact with it as well is very good I think poppy's are a friendship flower thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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This sea of poppy I like the way you embrace the friendship pact with it as well is very good I think poppy's are a friendship flower thank you for sharing
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Good morning Debbie,
Thank you for embracing " in fields of friendship" so fully! I appreciate your generous and beautifully expressed impressions.
Until next time,
Jill
-:)
Comment from Gypsy Starchild
I love we'll written free verse, It allows the reader the most chance to absorb the imagery and tone without having to fret over frivolous rules. This is wonderful. I'm officially a fan. :)
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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I love we'll written free verse, It allows the reader the most chance to absorb the imagery and tone without having to fret over frivolous rules. This is wonderful. I'm officially a fan. :)
Comment Written 06-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2013
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Good morning Gypsy Starchild ( I do love your pen name!)
Thank you for embracing " in fields of friendship" so fully.
As you may have guessed, this poem was written for a dear friend. I cherish and celebrate the blessing of precious friendships.
Any favorite titles in your portfolio that you might like to suggest I start with.
It will be a joy getting to know you through your poems.
Thank you once again for selecting to follow my poems as a fan
Until next time,
Jill
-:)
