Rewards of the Laughingstock
Trying, even when you have everything to lose37 total reviews
Comment from Curt Mongold
Amen to that! Those who have never tried, have never succeeded either, and only when we fail do we truly learn anything and grow from the experience. At least, the OPPORTUNITY is there to learn!
Great piece, gets my vote!
Sincerely,
Curt
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2013
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Amen to that! Those who have never tried, have never succeeded either, and only when we fail do we truly learn anything and grow from the experience. At least, the OPPORTUNITY is there to learn!
Great piece, gets my vote!
Sincerely,
Curt
Comment Written 17-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2013
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Thanks for your time spent reviewing and for the excellent review! I agree wholeheartedly with your statements! They are why I wrote the poem. :) Best of luck to you!-Grace
Comment from mystery poet
What a sweet little face she has. She is a trooper
then. You have well utilized this senryu writing
form with some encouraging comments to those of us
who give up easily rather than giving it our best.
I have days like that, too!
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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What a sweet little face she has. She is a trooper
then. You have well utilized this senryu writing
form with some encouraging comments to those of us
who give up easily rather than giving it our best.
I have days like that, too!
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing! I appreciate it!-Grace
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It was my pleasure, poet!
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing! Thanks to reviewers, "Rewards of the Laughingstock" reached All Time Best status!:)-Grace
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Congrats! It was a pleasure to read
and so encouraging!
Comment from visionary1234
I get the general sense of this one - and the delightful photo of Camille is smashing - but the last line really isn't very clear yet. I know what you're trying to say - no pun intended - but the end result is a bit confusing if taken literally (which I do). "But they at least tried" perhaps would be clearer?
also "those that try" - should really be "those who try" as we're talking about people, not things ... people use who/whom, things use that/which, yes?
:)Sharyn
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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I get the general sense of this one - and the delightful photo of Camille is smashing - but the last line really isn't very clear yet. I know what you're trying to say - no pun intended - but the end result is a bit confusing if taken literally (which I do). "But they at least tried" perhaps would be clearer?
also "those that try" - should really be "those who try" as we're talking about people, not things ... people use who/whom, things use that/which, yes?
:)Sharyn
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing! I appreciate it! I will consider your suggestions.-Grace
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing! Thanks to reviewers, "Rewards of the Laughingstock" reached All Time Best status!:)-Grace
Comment from BigPoppaJrock
A lot of truth written in this 5-7-5 poem. A wonderful tribute to your younger sister, I can sense your admiration for her through use of your words. It seems like we can take some inspiration from Camille. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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A lot of truth written in this 5-7-5 poem. A wonderful tribute to your younger sister, I can sense your admiration for her through use of your words. It seems like we can take some inspiration from Camille. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing! I appreciate it!-Grace
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing! Thanks to reviewers, "Rewards of the Laughingstock" reached All Time Best status!:)-Grace
Comment from wordsfromsue
I like the message and sentiment of your poem. The first two lines are very good. I might possibly think about the third line in a slightly different way. Maybe..... 'at least they have tried'.... It's hard to squeeze in all the thoughts you might want to include on a 5-7-5, words are so limited!
Your sister is a great example of courage... she might succeed, she might not, but at least she attempts things. Good for her and lovely poem. :-)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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I like the message and sentiment of your poem. The first two lines are very good. I might possibly think about the third line in a slightly different way. Maybe..... 'at least they have tried'.... It's hard to squeeze in all the thoughts you might want to include on a 5-7-5, words are so limited!
Your sister is a great example of courage... she might succeed, she might not, but at least she attempts things. Good for her and lovely poem. :-)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing! I appreciate it! I will consider your advice. :)-Grace
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing! Thanks to reviewers, "Rewards of the Laughingstock" reached All Time Best status!:)-Grace
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:-) Grace, you've reached All Time Best at the age of twelve! I was fifty-two before I got it! Congratulations. :-)
Comment from ZBaron
This was a nice, inspiring piece. The addition of the photograph and your explanation really helped my reading of it. It's great to have an inspirational sibling, which you and I have in common.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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This was a nice, inspiring piece. The addition of the photograph and your explanation really helped my reading of it. It's great to have an inspirational sibling, which you and I have in common.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing! I appreciate it! It is great that you have an inspirational sibling as well!-Grace
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing! Thanks to reviewers, "Rewards of the Laughingstock" reached All Time Best status!:)-Grace
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great photo, love those green socks. It's true at least you have to try through life. A good life lesson in your 5 -7-5 and a cute pic of your sister.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Great photo, love those green socks. It's true at least you have to try through life. A good life lesson in your 5 -7-5 and a cute pic of your sister.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing! I appreciate it! :)-Grace
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing! Thanks to reviewers, "Rewards of the Laughingstock" reached All Time Best status!:)-Grace
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
True words and a very inspiring poem that is well written with good word choices. Reminds me of something I read once, "better to have tried and failed than to not have tried at all". well done.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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True words and a very inspiring poem that is well written with good word choices. Reminds me of something I read once, "better to have tried and failed than to not have tried at all". well done.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing! I appreciate it! :)-Grace
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing! Thanks to reviewers, "Rewards of the Laughingstock" reached All Time Best status!:)-Grace
Comment from LaDonnaCole
It starts out well. Those that try may fail. That is true.
It stays good, They will be mocked, ridiculed. Still good. It is true that some people will try and fail and others will mock them for their efforts.
Then my brain freezes on the last line But they would have tried.
I can't get it to make sense in my head. I am sure there is a clever catch there that I am missing, but it just doesn't puncture the fog of my brain.
Either I am having one of those brain freeze moments or the last line could be more clear.
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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It starts out well. Those that try may fail. That is true.
It stays good, They will be mocked, ridiculed. Still good. It is true that some people will try and fail and others will mock them for their efforts.
Then my brain freezes on the last line But they would have tried.
I can't get it to make sense in my head. I am sure there is a clever catch there that I am missing, but it just doesn't puncture the fog of my brain.
Either I am having one of those brain freeze moments or the last line could be more clear.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time spent reading and reviewing! I appreciate it! I will consider your advice. :)-Grace
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing! Thanks to reviewers, "Rewards of the Laughingstock" reached All Time Best status!:)-Grace
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a very strong piece of writing . It is motivational, inspirational and philosophical. Indeed we lose nothing by trying and may gain all things in the process. kudos
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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This is a very strong piece of writing . It is motivational, inspirational and philosophical. Indeed we lose nothing by trying and may gain all things in the process. kudos
Comment Written 16-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013
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Thank you for your time! Best of luck to you as well!
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Thank you for your time spent reviewing! Thanks to reviewers, "Rewards of the Laughingstock" reached All Time Best status!:)-Grace
